*Mere Dilse*:Shayeri for Dard -e- Bewafai

Roja

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Kehta tha dilse chaha hame
Magar, samne aane ki koshish nahi kiya

Kehta tha "Tere Liye Hu Mai Jaan"
Magar, waqt milan ka aaya to ilzam laga diya

Kehta zamana mujhe manoos, dil nahi toota
Magar, unka Bewafa kehna, dil main zakham ber diya

Kehta kuch bi zamana mujhe
Magar, aaj unka tevar, mujhe rula diya

Kehta koyee mujhe kisii aur ka ho jao, to dil hila nahi
Magar unka mujhe kisii aur ka batana, dil hila diya..


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*Mere Dilse*

«Reply #1 on: September 23, 2007, 08:12:38 PM »

Good expressions.
Just few glitch.. like
It should be
Magar, samne aane ki koshish nahi ki
isntead of :
Magar, samne aane ki koshish nahi kiya

because its grammatical error then.

Still expressive.


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Roja

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*Mere Dilse*

«Reply #2 on: September 25, 2007, 02:50:26 AM »

Quote from: "Ricky"

Good expressions.
Just few glitch.. like
It should be
Magar, samne aane ki koshish nahi ki
isntead of :
Magar, samne aane ki koshish nahi kiya

because its grammatical error then.

Still expressive.

Yes noted Mr Ricky. Thanks for your comments.


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rajrishi

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*Mere Dilse*

«Reply #3 on: September 29, 2007, 03:03:26 PM »

Good work Roja but it needs some polishing


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Roja

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*Mere Dilse*

«Reply #4 on: September 30, 2007, 01:23:18 PM »

Quote from: "rajrishi"

Good work Roja but it needs some polishing

Shukhriya Rajrishi ji... yap shall try to write upto yr marks.. :D


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aankhain

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*Mere Dilse*

«Reply #5 on: October 06, 2007, 09:14:02 PM »

bohat acha likha roja


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Roja

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Re: *Mere Dilse*

«Reply #6 on: August 27, 2008, 02:19:35 PM »

Quote from: aankhain on October 06, 2007, 09:14:02 PM

bohat acha likha roja

Thanks Aankhain.


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Roja

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Re: *Mere Dilse*

«Reply #7 on: August 27, 2008, 02:26:19 PM »

Teri Mohabbat main jee liya,
Teri mohabbat mein mer bi liya hai
Humne haq mohabbat ka, ada kar diya hai
Tum na aana samne kabhi, hey bewafa,
Pattar dil girna hai toh kisi pattar per gir
kyu girta hai bar bar mere aaine dil per?


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NODER

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Re: *Mere Dilse*

«Reply #8 on: September 10, 2008, 07:58:18 AM »

Roja jiiiiiiii pehle aap apna hindi shudda karo Galat shalat hindi
pada toh dimak tanak ta hai... Crying

aur maine MERE DILSE comment likha hai Laughing hard


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amarhellboy

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Re: *Mere Dilse*

«Reply #9 on: October 01, 2008, 03:40:28 PM »

AAPKO JO HINDI THIK SE LIKANE KE LIYE KEH RAHE HAI UNSE KAHIYE PEHLE AAP TO HINDI SUDHARE FIR AAP KI AUTOMATIK HINDI THIK HO JAYEGI. JAISE NODER Jiiiiii

OR AB BAAT RAHI AAPKI TO APNE BAHUT BAHUT BAHUT ACCHA LIKHA AAPKA KOI JAWAB NHI, AAPNE JO LIKHA SAB BAHUT BADIYA THA. OR APNE KOI GALTI NHI KI HAI SAMJHANE WAALE KO ISHARA KAAFI HOTA HAI FIR AAPNE TO PURI KITAB HI SAAMNE RAKH DI.

aMARHELLBOY@YMAIL.COM


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Roja

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Re: *Mere Dilse*

«Reply #10 on: October 01, 2008, 03:42:34 PM »

Quote from: NODER on September 10, 2008, 07:58:18 AM

Roja jiiiiiiii pehle aap apna hindi shudda karo Galat shalat hindi
pada toh dimak tanak ta hai... Crying

aur maine MERE DILSE comment likha hai Laughing hard

Haan Nodar ji hum shudda hindi seekhne ki koshish kar rahe hai ji.
Aapko hamara likha galat shalat laga, yeh padkar afsoos hua.
Next time aur accha likhne ki koshish karenge ji.. Aap yu hi
Dil se comment likhte rahiyega.


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Roja

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Re: *Mere Dilse*

«Reply #11 on: October 01, 2008, 03:49:41 PM »

Quote from: amarhellboy on October 01, 2008, 03:40:28 PM

Amar ji aap ko hamara likha pasand aaya padkar bahut khushi mili.
Hum koshish yahi karte hai ke teek se likhe...magar kahi kahi
grammatical error aa hi jata hai..

Aap yu hi hamara saat dete rehna ji.


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sonalxoxo

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Re: *Mere Dilse*

«Reply #12 on: October 02, 2008, 09:15:22 PM »

i can feel what you were writing...great job!


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Rajesh Harish

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Re: *Mere Dilse*

«Reply #13 on: February 21, 2009, 07:30:01 PM »

Quote from: Roja on September 23, 2007, 06:25:44 PM

Really good one Roja JI


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Roja

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Re: *Mere Dilse*

«Reply #14 on: June 03, 2009, 02:44:03 AM »

Quote from: Rajesh Harish on February 21, 2009, 07:30:01 PM

Really good one Roja JI

Bahut bahut Thanks Rajesh Harish ji


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