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Jinki nazar taraste the meri ek didar ke liye
aaj wo nazar churake jane lage main dekhti reha gayi
jinki dil dharak ta tha mere naam se
aaj mujhe tanha chor gaye main tarapti reha gayi
aaj me wo kal ki baat na rahi kahan kho gayi
zeher wo mujhe pilake gaye main khushi se pi gayi...
ye dil bhi dekho pagal hai samjhti hi nahi
wo na raha aaj tera samjha samjha ke main haar gayi....
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«Reply #1 on: May 11, 2007, 09:17:56 PM » |
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good.. 7/10 !
Keep it up !
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«Reply #2 on: May 12, 2007, 04:28:38 AM » |
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Jinki najar taraste the meri ek didar ke liye
aaj wo najar churake jane lage main dekhti reha gayi
jinki dil dharak ti thi meri naam se
aaj mujhe tanha chor gaye main tarapti reha gayi
aaj me wo kal ki baat na rahi kahan kho gayi
zeher wo mujhe pilake gaye main khushi se pi gayi...
ye dil bhi dekho pagal hai samjhti hi nahi
wo na raha aaj tera samjha samjha ke main haar gayi.... bhoot khoob likha hai pooja ji apne- dil ko kisne jana hai ish jamane me, pagal eese hee kahtee duniya yoo hee nahi pal me dhadkta hai, tadaf kar tooj jata hai fir pagal ye basa letaa hai kisi or ko apne me. netra...., |
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«Reply #3 on: May 12, 2007, 05:17:00 AM » |
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good.. 7/10 !
Keep it up ! Thanx Ricky ji..chalo acha laga... |
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«Reply #4 on: May 12, 2007, 05:18:49 AM » |
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Jinki najar taraste the meri ek didar ke liye
aaj wo najar churake jane lage main dekhti reha gayi
jinki dil dharak ti thi meri naam se
aaj mujhe tanha chor gaye main tarapti reha gayi
aaj me wo kal ki baat na rahi kahan kho gayi
zeher wo mujhe pilake gaye main khushi se pi gayi...
ye dil bhi dekho pagal hai samjhti hi nahi
wo na raha aaj tera samjha samjha ke main haar gayi.... bhoot khoob likha hai pooja ji apne- dil ko kisne jana hai ish jamane me, pagal eese hee kahtee duniya yoo hee nahi pal me dhadkta hai, tadaf kar tooj jata hai fir pagal ye basa letaa hai kisi or ko apne me. netra...., Hi Netra ji thanx ... but ji main punam hun pooja nahi... |
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«Reply #5 on: May 12, 2007, 05:25:35 AM » |
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wo bhale dil tod diye par dil me hain aaj bhi us tarah
chalegaye chod ke mujhe par yaado me se nikalu kis tarah
meri jaan meri zindagi sab kuch to the wo sirf wo
unhe bewafa kahu main kis tarah .....
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«Reply #6 on: May 12, 2007, 08:15:54 AM » |
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Jinki najar taraste the meri ek didar ke liye
aaj wo najar churake jane lage main dekhti reha gayi
jinki dil dharak ti thi meri naam se
aaj mujhe tanha chor gaye main tarapti reha gayi
aaj me wo kal ki baat na rahi kahan kho gayi
zeher wo mujhe pilake gaye main khushi se pi gayi...
ye dil bhi dekho pagal hai samjhti hi nahi
wo na raha aaj tera samjha samjha ke main haar gayi.... bhoot khoob likha hai pooja ji apne- dil ko kisne jana hai ish jamane me, pagal eese hee kahtee duniya yoo hee nahi pal me dhadkta hai, tadaf kar tooj jata hai fir pagal ye basa letaa hai kisi or ko apne me. netra...., Hi Netra ji thanx ... but ji main punam hun pooja nahi... aap poonam hai............okm :D :D netra |
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«Reply #7 on: May 12, 2007, 08:18:41 AM » |
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wo bhale dil tod diye par dil me hain aaj bhi us tarah
chalegaye chod ke mujhe par yaado me se nikalu kis tarah
meri jaan meri zindagi sab kuch to the wo sirf wo
unhe bewafa kahu main kis tarah .....
itnee achee lino ka koi jawab nahi hai...pooonam jiiii netra........ |
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«Reply #8 on: May 12, 2007, 08:59:04 AM » |
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Thanx Netra ji aap bhi bahot ache likhe...
main to bas kosish kar rahi hun kuch likhe ki....
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«Reply #9 on: May 14, 2007, 05:46:40 AM » |
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Jis raha me chal pare hum
sath wo hai soche sehelenge her gam
bich raha me wo mood liye kadam
tanha rehe gaye wahi khare hum
dard hua itna dil tarap utha par
wo khush rahe khuda se yehi dua mange hum...
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«Reply #10 on: May 14, 2007, 06:05:18 AM » |
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Jinki najar taraste the meri ek didar ke liye
aaj wo najar churake jane lage main dekhti reha gayi
jinki dil dharak ti thi meri naam se
aaj mujhe tanha chor gaye main tarapti reha gayi
aaj me wo kal ki baat na rahi kahan kho gayi
zeher wo mujhe pilake gaye main khushi se pi gayi...
ye dil bhi dekho pagal hai samjhti hi nahi
wo na raha aaj tera samjha samjha ke main haar gayi.... jitni bhi kohish kar lo,abhi tum sambhal nahi paoge kuch pal aor gujar lo yaadon sang,kuch lamhe aor nikal jayeinge ro ro kar khud ko mitta loge,lekin pathar dil na pigal payeinge "zehar" pee kar nijaat mil jayegi tumhein,par unka ka jo teri sangdilli se maar jayeinge |
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«Reply #11 on: May 14, 2007, 12:24:28 PM » |
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Jis raha me chal pare hum
sath wo hai soche sehelenge her gam
bich raha me wo mood liye kadam
tanha rehe gaye wahi khare hum
dard hua itna dil tarap utha par
wo khush rahe khuda se yehi dua mange hum... rahe ishk par chal pade ho tum kate bhoot hai, chubhab to hogi bahare bhee thee rahe ishak me jo befa ham safar ne milte rah me netra.. |
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«Reply #12 on: May 15, 2007, 04:34:54 AM » |
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Nice Netra ji...
manjil kahi to hogi par pahanchna muskil tha
raste pe kanto ke siva kahi kuch nahi tha
us raste se gujarna unhe manjur na tha
kanto ke bich yun rehagayi faisla jo unka tha...
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«Reply #13 on: May 15, 2007, 05:03:47 AM » |
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kanto se darne wale rahgeer nahi hua karte
kamjor saathi mushkilo me mot ke hee dua karte
foolo kee mala to gale lagate hai sabhi ish duniya me
gamo me samander me kya kabhi tair paya hai koi
netra.....
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«Reply #14 on: May 15, 2007, 06:04:23 AM » |
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kehena hai aasaan par nibhana nahi
mohobbat ke kitne dastan hum sune nahi
kanto pe bhi ha chal sakte hain agar ho sath aap ki
par rukh more liye aap to...
raha ke phool bhi kisi kante se kam nahi...
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