DEKHLO GAR DEKH PAAO

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This poem is a zist of Mir Taqi Mir’s poem.
Mir Sahib is my most favourite poet. Unfotunately he did not
give any title to his poems.
As you will see after reading the original poem that there is
nothing common between the two except the basic theme.

DEKHLO GAR DEKH PAAO:

Yeh kyaa kam hai ke humen tumh ek lamha dekh paao,
        Yahan marne kee bhi kisey phursat ke tumh dekh paao!

Yak lakhat seenaa peet.taa hoon aur kuchh kartaa nahin,
      Matam mein kitnaa masroof hoon dekh lo gar dekh paao!

Iss maut ke safar mein hum iss qadar thaak chuke hain,
      Chiraag-e-zindgi naa jaane kab gul ho shayad dekh paao!

Jahan chaahtaa yahee hai ke rotaa rahun so rotaa hoon,
        Dekhnaa hee chaaho shabnam to dekhlo gar dekh paao!

Duniya ke girjhe mein main kyaa kyaa naa dektaa hoon,
        Insan jitney bhi chaaho dekhlo insaniyat naa dekh paao!

Tumhen kyun fiqr ho koi agar main tabah bhi ho jaaun,
         Tumh bas shaad raho, jahan faani hai kaash dekh paao!

Dartaa hoon ke pichle pehr kaa chiraag bujhne ko hoon,
         Aaj shaam hee se aakhree saans hai gar yeh dekh paao!


Surindar.N                                         "MohanN"

Original Poem:

Aajaayen nazar hum nazar jo koi dam bahut hai yahan,
Mohlat basaan-e-barq-o-sharar kam bahut hai yahan!

Yak lakhat seenaa ko bhi se fursat humen nahin,
Yaanee ke dil ke jaane kaa maatam bahut hai yahan!

Hum rahar daan-e-rah-e-fanaa der reh chuke,
Waqfaa basaan-e-subah koi dam bahut hai yahan!

Hasil hai kyaa siwaaye taraayee ke dahar mein,
Uth aasman taley se ke shabnam bahut hai yahan!

Iss butkade mein maanee kaa kis se Karen swaal,
Aadam nahin hai surat-e-aadam bahut hai yahan!

Ijaaz-e-eeswee se nahin behas ishq mein,
Terii hee baat jaan-e-majasim bahut hai yahan!

Mere halak karne kaa gham hai abash tumhen,
Tumh shad zindgaanee karo gham bahut hai yahan!

Shayad ke kaam subah tak apnaa khenche naa Mir,
Ehwaal aaj shaam se darham bahut hai!!

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«Reply #3 on: March 07, 2015, 11:19:10 AM »
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This poem is a zist of Mir Taqi Mir’s poem.
Mir Sahib is my most favourite poet. Unfotunately he did not
give any title to his poems.

DEKHLO GAR DEKH PAAO:

Yeh kyaa kam hai ke humen tumh ek lamha dekh paao,
        Yahan marne kee bhi kisey phursat ke tumh dekh paao!

Yak lakhat seenaa peet.taa hoon aur kuchh kartaa nahin,
      Matam mein kitnaa masroof hoon dekh lo gar dekh paao!

Iss maut ke safar mein hum iss qadar thaak chuke hain,
      Chiraag-e-zindgi naa jaane kab gul ho shayad dekh paao!

Jahan chaahtaa yahee hai ke rotaa rahun so rotaa hoon,
        Dekhnaa hee chaaho shabnam to dekhlo gar dekh paao!

Duniya ke girjhe mein main kyaa kyaa naa dektaa hoon,
        Insan jitney bhi chaaho dekhlo insaniyat naa dekh paao!

Tumhen kyun fiqr ho koi agar main tabah bhi ho jaaun,
         Tumh bas shaad raho, jahan faani hai kaash dekh paao!

Dartaa hoon ke pichle pehr kaa chiraag bujhne ko hoon,
         Aaj shaam hee se aakhree saans hai gar yeh dekh paao!

Surindar.N                                         "MohanN"

achi lines hai, thanx for sharing
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bahut shukria Prabhaa Jee.
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«Reply #5 on: March 07, 2015, 06:31:37 PM »
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This poem is a zist of Mir Taqi Mir’s poem.
Mir Sahib is my most favourite poet. Unfotunately he did not
give any title to his poems.

DEKHLO GAR DEKH PAAO:

Yeh kyaa kam hai ke humen tumh ek lamha dekh paao,
        Yahan marne kee bhi kisey phursat ke tumh dekh paao!

Yak lakhat seenaa peet.taa hoon aur kuchh kartaa nahin,
      Matam mein kitnaa masroof hoon dekh lo gar dekh paao!

Iss maut ke safar mein hum iss qadar thaak chuke hain,
      Chiraag-e-zindgi naa jaane kab gul ho shayad dekh paao!

Jahan chaahtaa yahee hai ke rotaa rahun so rotaa hoon,
        Dekhnaa hee chaaho shabnam to dekhlo gar dekh paao!

Duniya ke girjhe mein main kyaa kyaa naa dektaa hoon,
        Insan jitney bhi chaaho dekhlo insaniyat naa dekh paao!

Tumhen kyun fiqr ho koi agar main tabah bhi ho jaaun,
         Tumh bas shaad raho, jahan faani hai kaash dekh paao!

Dartaa hoon ke pichle pehr kaa chiraag bujhne ko hoon,
         Aaj shaam hee se aakhree saans hai gar yeh dekh paao!

Surindar.N                                         "MohanN"



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bahut shukria Prabha Jee.
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achi lines hai, thanx for sharing
Bahut shukria Ambalika Jee. Please read it again though and tell me if your remarks thanks for sharing is justified.
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bahut bahut shukria Sheba Sahiba daad ke liye. Please do read the poem once again and compare it with the original poem and then tell me if your remarks thanks for sharing are justified.
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bahut shukria Jeet Jee.
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bahut khoob
bahut shukria Nandbahu Sahib.
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This poem is a zist of Mir Taqi Mir’s poem.
Mir Sahib is my most favourite poet. Unfotunately he did not
give any title to his poems.
As you will see after reading the original poem that there is
nothing common between the two except the basic theme.

DEKHLO GAR DEKH PAAO:

Yeh kyaa kam hai ke humen tumh ek lamha dekh paao,
        Yahan marne kee bhi kisey phursat ke tumh dekh paao!

Yak lakhat seenaa peet.taa hoon aur kuchh kartaa nahin,
      Matam mein kitnaa masroof hoon dekh lo gar dekh paao!

Iss maut ke safar mein hum iss qadar thaak chuke hain,
      Chiraag-e-zindgi naa jaane kab gul ho shayad dekh paao!

Jahan chaahtaa yahee hai ke rotaa rahun so rotaa hoon,
        Dekhnaa hee chaaho shabnam to dekhlo gar dekh paao!

Duniya ke girjhe mein main kyaa kyaa naa dektaa hoon,
        Insan jitney bhi chaaho dekhlo insaniyat naa dekh paao!

Tumhen kyun fiqr ho koi agar main tabah bhi ho jaaun,
         Tumh bas shaad raho, jahan faani hai kaash dekh paao!

Dartaa hoon ke pichle pehr kaa chiraag bujhne ko hoon,
         Aaj shaam hee se aakhree saans hai gar yeh dekh paao!


Surindar.N                                         "MohanN"

Original Poem:

Aajaayen nazar hum nazar jo koi dam bahut hai yahan,
Mohlat basaan-e-barq-o-sharar kam bahut hai yahan!

Yak lakhat seenaa ko bhi se fursat humen nahin,
Yaanee ke dil ke jaane kaa maatam bahut hai yahan!

Hum rahar daan-e-rah-e-fanaa der reh chuke,
Waqfaa basaan-e-subah koi dam bahut hai yahan!

Hasil hai kyaa siwaaye taraayee ke dahar mein,
Uth aasman taley se ke shabnam bahut hai yahan!

Iss butkade mein maanee kaa kis se Karen swaal,
Aadam nahin hai surat-e-aadam bahut hai yahan!

Ijaaz-e-eeswee se nahin behas ishq mein,
Terii hee baat jaan-e-majasim bahut hai yahan!

Mere halak karne kaa gham hai abash tumhen,
Tumh shad zindgaanee karo gham bahut hai yahan!

Shayad ke kaam subah tak apnaa khenche naa Mir,
Ehwaal aaj shaam se darham bahut hai!!


bahut shukria all readers.
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«Reply #14 on: March 13, 2015, 02:15:38 AM »
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This poem is a zist of Mir Taqi Mir’s poem.
Mir Sahib is my most favourite poet. Unfotunately he did not
give any title to his poems.
As you will see after reading the original poem that there is
nothing common between the two except the basic theme.

DEKHLO GAR DEKH PAAO:

Yeh kyaa kam hai ke humen tumh ek lamha dekh paao,
        Yahan marne kee bhi kisey phursat ke tumh dekh paao!

Yak lakhat seenaa peet.taa hoon aur kuchh kartaa nahin,
      Matam mein kitnaa masroof hoon dekh lo gar dekh paao!

Iss maut ke safar mein hum iss qadar thaak chuke hain,
      Chiraag-e-zindgi naa jaane kab gul ho shayad dekh paao!

Jahan chaahtaa yahee hai ke rotaa rahun so rotaa hoon,
        Dekhnaa hee chaaho shabnam to dekhlo gar dekh paao!

Duniya ke girjhe mein main kyaa kyaa naa dektaa hoon,
        Insan jitney bhi chaaho dekhlo insaniyat naa dekh paao!

Tumhen kyun fiqr ho koi agar main tabah bhi ho jaaun,
         Tumh bas shaad raho, jahan faani hai kaash dekh paao!

Dartaa hoon ke pichle pehr kaa chiraag bujhne ko hoon,
         Aaj shaam hee se aakhree saans hai gar yeh dekh paao!


Surindar.N                                         "MohanN"

Original Poem:

Aajaayen nazar hum nazar jo koi dam bahut hai yahan,
Mohlat basaan-e-barq-o-sharar kam bahut hai yahan!

Yak lakhat seenaa ko bhi se fursat humen nahin,
Yaanee ke dil ke jaane kaa maatam bahut hai yahan!

Hum rahar daan-e-rah-e-fanaa der reh chuke,
Waqfaa basaan-e-subah koi dam bahut hai yahan!

Hasil hai kyaa siwaaye taraayee ke dahar mein,
Uth aasman taley se ke shabnam bahut hai yahan!

Iss butkade mein maanee kaa kis se Karen swaal,
Aadam nahin hai surat-e-aadam bahut hai yahan!

Ijaaz-e-eeswee se nahin behas ishq mein,
Terii hee baat jaan-e-majasim bahut hai yahan!

Mere halak karne kaa gham hai abash tumhen,
Tumh shad zindgaanee karo gham bahut hai yahan!

Shayad ke kaam subah tak apnaa khenche naa Mir,
Ehwaal aaj shaam se darham bahut hai!!


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