Mujhe ahsaas hai ki woh nahi hai !

by Ricky on August 11, 2007, 10:26:31 PM
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This poem is having a distinct poetic style which we encountered many times.
Hint: its about repeatation of words.

    Ahsaas hai mujhe ki woh ab nahi hai
    Nahi hai wo mere sang nahi hai..
    Door toh woh tha hee .. Magar ..
    Magar ab woh hai hee nahi hai !!
    Hai nahi koi umeed fir bhi .. kyun…
    Nazar meri kuch dhoondh rahi hai ?.
    Dhoondhna chahti hai kyun ab bhi woh..
    uske lavzo me mera naam jo ab wahan nahi hai !
    Wahan kuch surkh ho gaya hai ya..
    Yahan kuch khalti kami hai ?
    Khalti hai nazar mujhe meri .. Jo
    Harr taraf teri hi nazar dhoondh rahi hai !
    Mujhe ahsaas hai ki teri hansi mein ..
    Hai chhupi meri hansi hai !
    Garr baha ek bhi qatra yahan gham ka..
    Gham woh gham nahi garr fiza teri mehki hui hai !
    Meri shikayat uss tak naa pohochegi ..
    Na pohochegi kyunki uski rehmat bhi badi hai,
    Badi hai uski harr kahani kyunki
    Uss kahani usne khushi teri likhi hai !
    Main na hi uska rasta naa koi manzil…
    Yeh toh usay kahin aur hi dikhi hai !
    Shahakaar mere hai khuburat Kyunki
    Unme tera aks.. meri zindagi bhari hai ..
    Dikh toh jayega usko usme kuch ..
    K usme mere tassavur mein tuh judi hai..
    Judi hai jaane kis dorr sae tuti patang
    Nahi pata ki ye meri khata ya ..
    Isme abhi bhi kuch taan padi hai ??
    Ahsaas hai mujhe ki woh ab nahi hai..
    Kitna asaan hai dekho jeena zindagi
    K Zindagi bhi ab soch mein padi hai.
    Kar di khali maine soch kisi ki ..
    Soch mein kyun ab meri khushi padi hai ?..
    Kushi hai kashmakash mein lekin ..
    Kashmakash beparwah khadi hai ..
    Pata hai usko ki kisi ko ab khushi mili hai !
    Aah na pohonchegi wahan .. kyunki
    Aah dard ae sabab uske liye fir bani hai..
    Daba diya hai isko kahin..
    Kahin chupa diya naa ab ye samne bachi hai..
    Jaa chuke hain woh unke liye ab
    manzar khudai lekar naya khadi hai..
    naya manzar toh yahan bhi hai ..
    Kahi koi baat khaali toh kayi baatoN ki jhadi hai
    Ahsaas hai mujhko k woh ab nahi hai
    Jo nahi thi haath mein ab ankhon se bhi ojhal ho chali hai !
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«Reply #1 on: August 11, 2007, 10:40:33 PM »
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This is definitely one of your best creation.......!!!

Sab kuch mila hai, khush baash zindagi chali hai
Kuch to hai khoya magar, haan,  koi to kami hai
Muskura rahe hain hont, khilakhilate hain yeh lab
Chupke se ponch li maine, jo aankhon main nami hai
Wo samjhe bewafa, bhula diya hai use maine dil se
Kya jaane wo, kuch nahin zindagi, jo uski ek kami hai !!!
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«Reply #2 on: August 12, 2007, 12:07:02 PM »
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Thankyou for calling it "one of my best creation" .
Infact it is my longest creation.


You also posted a nice snippet !
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«Reply #3 on: August 12, 2007, 06:11:32 PM »
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Yeah, its is your longest one ! Thanks.
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Roja
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«Reply #4 on: August 13, 2007, 02:50:36 AM »
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Aapko padkar aankhon main nami si chaa gayee...
Dil ko chua her ek lafz... Esp..

first four lines... and last 3 lines...

Well expressed Mr Ricky... very touchy..
Daad hazir hai ....kabul kijiyega..
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«Reply #5 on: August 13, 2007, 09:48:04 AM »
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Very Touching Poetry Ricky... Usual Smile

And Really Lovely Lines Talat...

Good Work... Both of you... =D> =D>
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«Reply #6 on: August 13, 2007, 07:29:20 PM »
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too gud ricky sir G
ye to ek kahani si hai
long long poem

talat G bhi acha likhi

:D :D :D
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«Reply #7 on: August 13, 2007, 08:49:25 PM »
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Thanks Shikha and Sahiba Usual Smile
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«Reply #8 on: August 14, 2007, 08:46:42 AM »
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@Roja
That was really touchy comment, as I always say .. if reader is able to feel the poem then it is a Poem as it is just piece of TEXT.

@Shikha..
Thankyou for appreciation.

@Sahiba
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Usual Smile Thankyou for your comment too !
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«Reply #9 on: August 14, 2007, 10:45:03 PM »
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Ricky

Very nice thoughts expressed in a very loooooooong poem :D

Nice reply by Talat !
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«Reply #10 on: August 29, 2007, 01:25:42 PM »
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Thankyou Rajbir Ji
I know its really nice to see that you gave your effort to read this poem as well understood.

Thankyou Again for Reading this long one !
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«Reply #11 on: August 29, 2007, 03:44:44 PM »
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Bahot acha apna bhavnao ko aap ne roop diya ricky ji...
aankho me aansoo chalak aaye...

sawal yeh nahi long hai ya short hai...yeh hai k chota ho ya bara dil ko choo jaaye...

bahot bahot acha likhe aap ne....

talat di aap bhi kuch kam nahi ..bahot acha likhe ...
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«Reply #12 on: August 29, 2007, 07:17:20 PM »
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Punam,  you gave real nice feedback.
Your heartly comment gave my poem more value.

Thankyou!
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«Reply #13 on: September 16, 2007, 11:52:09 PM »
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Woh ab nahi hai......

Raste jab chun liye, door tujhse ho gaye,
Phir kyun lag raha hai, teri ek kami hai
Guzre lamhe murjhaye phoolon se bikhre
Khushk chaman main ab bhi khusbu basi hai
Barhte rahe qadam, manzilain milti gayin
Na mili kabhi jo, wo dil ki ek khushi hai
Jab bhi socha humne kya adhoora reh gaya
Yaad aaya, aaj bhi teri ek kami hai !!
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«Reply #14 on: September 20, 2007, 03:31:53 PM »
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my reply to ricky's work, good job ricks; keep writing always it's the best way to get your emotions out it's like a therapy you know...

tu hi basta hai meri ankhriyon mein
tuje hi sochti rehti hoon aksar
aksar yeh bhi sochti hoon
ke mai aor tu koi bigdi ghadi hain
ghadi hain isliye milte nahin hain
hain kyon madham ab ham tum
ham tum ab murda ho chukay hain
kyon murda ho chukay  hain
yeh kismat ke faisle hain
faisle yeh nah badlenge jaanu
jaanu tu baat meri maan le ab tau
ke ab din apne puray ho chukay hain
badalte rukh se samjhaota karle
tu dukh ko mujmein samo de
samo ke tu tau ab azad ho ja
muje dukhon mein bun de
bune they khawab ham usko bhula de
bhula ke tu nahi duniya basa le
basa ke tu muje sandesa de de
de de ke mai nahin kaaran
tere dukh ka mai nahin kaaran
kaaran kuch aor bana de
tu yeh karam mujpekar de
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