Saza mili mujhko per gunegaar hum nahin..:Shayri for Dard -e- Judai

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This is not the way I usually write, rather this poems is like various pieces stitched together. Views about format are appreciated.

Kaise aage badhe hum jab
manzil hi hamari kahin peeche thahar gayi !
Gazur rahe thae jab uske paas sae..
na usne roka, naa usne awaz di, sirf khamoshi reh gayi !

Dekha tha usko door jaate hue maine,
Ghard bhi uski rah se hathai thi maine,
Kya uski saza mujhe milegi baar baar
Aisi bhi kya khata'on ki kadi banayi thi maine .. !

Gehre kahin chot hui hai mere,
Gehrai itni gehri ki ankhoN sae wo ojhal !
Dekhe jo mera dil bhi jo gehra mere itna
Na milegi usko bhi woh mayus si halchal !

Itna bikhra k pani logo ne samajh liya
Jaise chaha waise bahaya mujhko
Jab aas jaati rahi mere wajood ki
Jhat sae raah badal muh fer liya !

Mere pehnaave ko mera dil samajha kisi ne
Na uski dhadkano ka khayal kiya kisi ne
Tadap tadap ke dhadak rahi thiN..
Zindagi ka unhe dooja ayaam samjha kisine

Saza maine payi thi per gunehgaar toh nahin
Beh ke sukhe ashq baar baar
Inka koi kahin bhi parastar toh nahin![/list]

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Saza mili mujhko per gunegaar hum nahin..

«Reply #1 on: August 04, 2007, 09:35:55 PM »

Nice one Ricky !


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Rajbir

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Saza mili mujhko per gunegaar hum nahin..

«Reply #2 on: August 04, 2007, 11:16:25 PM »

Ricky

Wow ! =D>

Too good. I loved it very much !


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Ricky

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Saza mili mujhko per gunegaar hum nahin..

«Reply #3 on: August 05, 2007, 09:45:32 AM »

Thankyou Talat !!

Rajbir Ji, You liked it more than I expected, thankyou too for your words full of appreciation.


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«Reply #4 on: August 05, 2007, 09:53:24 AM »

behtarin koshish rahi aapki ricky ji ,apne andaaz-e-bayan ko badalkar pesh karni ki...................words aapne behad aache choose kiye hai ,aur usse bhi aachi tarah aapne unka 'use' kiya hai, nice ....................10/10 frm me.


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Saza mili mujhko per gunegaar hum nahin..

«Reply #5 on: August 05, 2007, 05:23:04 PM »

PJAG:
That was really a generous appreciation by you. You just made this poem noble for me. Thankyou!


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«Reply #6 on: August 06, 2007, 01:03:22 AM »

Quote from: "Ricky"

This is not the way I usually write, rather this poems is like various pieces stitched together. Views about format are appreciated.

Gehre kahin chot hui hai mere,
Gehrai itni gehri ki ankhoN sae wo ojhal !
Dekhe jo mera dil bhi jo gehra mere itna
Na milegi usko bhi woh mayus si halchal !

Itna bikhra k pani logo ne samajh liya
Jaise chaha waise bahaya mujhko
Jab aas jaati rahi mere wajood ki
Jhat sae raah badal muh fer liya !

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Ricky ji..

Nicely clubed ...Esp above lines... very touchy


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Ricky

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Saza mili mujhko per gunegaar hum nahin..

«Reply #7 on: August 06, 2007, 06:30:28 AM »

Thankyou Roja
Its good for me that you find my work, my those lines touching.


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Saza mili mujhko per gunegaar hum nahin..

«Reply #8 on: August 06, 2007, 10:46:16 AM »

Wah wah kaya baat hai Ricky sir bahut khoob aankhir kuch to baat hai Ricky babu main jo itni achchi post kar dete hai
=D> =D> =D>


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Saza mili mujhko per gunegaar hum nahin..

«Reply #9 on: August 06, 2007, 02:28:34 PM »

Sameer.. Thankyou for heartly praising by you. You the liked the poem, may be because I know I have such a wonderful readers so poem turned out to be good for good people.


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