Vo merra ajnabi......

by brokenbyluv on March 19, 2010, 05:09:41 PM
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Iss kavita ki last line maine ek sher se li hai i alwayz liked this line..isliye is kavita ka ant maine iss khubsurat line se kiya hai kyunki main apni kavita ko kisi khubsurat dard se end karna chahti thi......

Tu aaya merre jahan mein main terri duniya mein khoyi,
tune jagaye kayi ankahe ehsas phir se..
terre hotho se main hasti rahi terri ankho se main royi,

tu jab takta tha zamana bhula k mujhe MERRE AJNABI,
main jane kahan kho jati thi..
terre wishwas pe bus terri hi ho jati thi,

tu kehta tha mujhe jahan mein apna sabse azeez,
main bhi tujhe ankho mein bhar leti thi,
chup reh kar bhi apni nigaho se mhbt ka izhar kar leti thi,

tune kabula tha mujhe apne dilo jaan se,
mujhe bhi tu kabul tha har surat mein..
har su bus tu hi tha merre..har saaye har murat mein,

ab jab tu chala gaya hai mujhse door,
maine terre har aks apni duniya se mita diya..
waise main pehle bhi tanha hi thi..tou kya jo tune phir se ehsas dila diya......
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«Reply #1 on: March 19, 2010, 05:15:00 PM »
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Bahut achhi poem aapne likhie hai BBL ji. Bade nazuk se khayalaat aur ahsasat ka muraqqa hai ye poem. Very nice, bahot khoob.

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«Reply #2 on: March 19, 2010, 05:18:36 PM »
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bahut bahut shukriya riyaz ji...
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«Reply #3 on: March 19, 2010, 05:38:57 PM »
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BBL ji, Aapki poem padhkar  zehn mein kuchh lafz aane lage aur sher ban gaya, malaheza farmayen:

Dardo-gham phoolon ka titliyan samajhti hain
Kaise zulfein suljhengi, ungliyan samjhti hain
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«Reply #4 on: March 19, 2010, 05:58:20 PM »
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waah ji waah riyaz ji bahut hi khoob...
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«Reply #5 on: March 20, 2010, 04:54:51 AM »
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Wah wah bahut khoob Geet ji,very touching and mindblowing creation.beautiful lines by Riyaz bhai. Hats off to you! Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Thumbs UP
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«Reply #6 on: March 20, 2010, 02:18:38 PM »
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thnx madhu ji...
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«Reply #7 on: March 20, 2010, 02:25:23 PM »
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Bahut bahut Khoob Geetji..

Aapke Iss kavita mein Bhaut dard Basa hai..

bahut Ache.. Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
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«Reply #8 on: March 20, 2010, 02:41:10 PM »
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shukriya khwaish ji...
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«Reply #9 on: March 20, 2010, 03:10:31 PM »
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bahoot bahoot khoob Geet.. apne ehsaaso ko bakoobi byaan kiya hai.. bahoot khoob!
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«Reply #10 on: March 20, 2010, 03:15:44 PM »
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ek khoobsurat dard....kya khoob baat kahi aapne bbl ji......aur issi dard ki apni kavita mein bakhubi utara....bahut hi khoob bbl ji...... Applause Applause
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«Reply #11 on: March 20, 2010, 03:17:15 PM »
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bahut bahut shukriya sophi ji..
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«Reply #12 on: March 20, 2010, 03:22:48 PM »
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shukriya nikhar ji...
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«Reply #13 on: March 20, 2010, 08:08:25 PM »
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Good Job Brokenbyluv ji
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«Reply #14 on: March 22, 2010, 10:39:31 AM »
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thnx hum dum ji...
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