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Jab Bhi Usko Meri Yaad Aaya Karegi
Aankhon Mein Aansoon Behisaab Laya Karegi..
Jab Bhi Karegi Yaad Mere Sath Bite Har Pal Ko
Wo Ek Pal Haskar Phir Khamosh Ho Jaya Karegi..
Jab Kabhi Khud Ko Tanha Mehsus Karegi
Tab Wo Mere Likhe Khato Ko Padha Karegi..
Kitabo Mein Chhupi Meri Tasvir Dekhkar
Apne Seene se Laga – Laga Kar Roya Karegi..
Dekh Kar Meri Di Huvi Nishani Ko
Use Apne Aanchal Mein Chhupa Liya Karegi..
Kisi Gair Ke Liye Chhorkar Mujhe Tanha
Wo Apni Bhool Pe Bahut Pachtaya Karegi.. |
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«Reply #1 on: February 15, 2011, 08:55:37 PM » |
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Kya baat hai mere bhai.. kamal ka likha hai.. akhri do lines toh bas dil choo gayi..  ek shaer yaad agaya: Humare baad na aega tumhe chahat ka aisa maza Faraz,
Tum logon se kehte phiroge 'mujhe chaho uski tarha'Khush rahiye..! |
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«Reply #2 on: February 15, 2011, 09:03:45 PM » |
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Kya baat hai mere bhai.. kamal ka likha hai.. akhri do lines toh bas dil choo gayi.. ek shaer yaad agaya: Humare baad na aega tumhe chahat ka aisa maza Faraz,
Tum logon se kehte phiroge 'mujhe chaho uski tarha'Khush rahiye.. Shukriya Rahim Bhai Bus Aap Sabse Kuch Na Kuch Shikhne Ko Mil Jata Hai Aur Dil Mein Jo Aata Hai Likh Leta Hu Mein Koi Shayar To Nahi Hu Bus Dil Ko Sakun Mil Jata Hai Aur Rahim Ji Niche Ki Last Line Mein Meine Tum Likha Tha Per Nirala Ji Ne Kaha Aap Tum Ki Jagah Wo Likho To Meine Wahi Kiya Ab Jayda Better Lag Rha Hai.. Thnx For Comment Rahim Bhai |
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«Reply #3 on: February 16, 2011, 02:04:38 AM » |
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sorry rishi ji----mera reply delete ho gaya tha jo mene abhi dekha.  mujhe aapki ye rachna behad pasand aai. aapki rachnao me ajeeb sa bholapan aur sukoon milta hai. aur aapka thanx ki aapne 'tum' ki jagah 'wo' kiya  |
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«Reply #4 on: February 16, 2011, 04:08:30 AM » |
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«Reply #5 on: February 16, 2011, 05:43:27 AM » |
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bht bht or bht khoob rishi ji...
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«Reply #6 on: February 16, 2011, 06:11:46 AM » |
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bahot aacha likha he rishi ji.....maja aa gaya padkar......keep it up
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«Reply #7 on: February 16, 2011, 06:38:52 AM » |
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*KasaK*....Dil Ki
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«Reply #8 on: February 16, 2011, 08:18:19 AM » |
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excellent 1 rishi ji....bhttttttttttttt hi mast likha hai aapne...sach me dil me ajeeb si feeling ho gai padhkar....
aapki poems me jo saadgi se shikayat hoti hai na mujhe bht lubhati hai wo......bht mast ji tooooooooooo goooooddddd
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«Reply #9 on: February 16, 2011, 08:35:33 AM » |
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Bahut Bahut Khoob Rishiji
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«Reply #10 on: February 16, 2011, 04:50:48 PM » |
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Jab Bhi Usko Meri Yaad Aaya Karegi
Aankhon Mein Aansoon Behisaab Laya Karegi..
Jab Bhi Karegi Yaad Mere Sath Bite Har Pal Ko
Wo Ek Pal Haskar Phir Khamosh Ho Jaya Karegi..
Jab Kabhi Khud Ko Tanha Mehsus Karegi
Tab Wo Mere Likhe Khato Ko Padha Karegi..
Kitabo Mein Chhupi Meri Tasvir Dekhkar
Apne Seene se Laga – Laga Kar Roya Karegi..
Dekh Kar Meri Di Huvi Nishani Ko
Use Apne Aanchal Mein Chhupa Liya Karegi..
Kisi Gair Ke Liye Chhorkar Mujhe Tanha
Wo Apni Bhool Pe Bahut Pachtaya Karegi.. Good One ... Rishi Ji ! Very Impressive ..... Very Touching ... Good Expression .. !!! Very Nice Creation ... dil se daad !!!!!!!!!! |
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«Reply #11 on: February 16, 2011, 05:04:21 PM » |
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sorry rishi ji----mera reply delete ho gaya tha jo mene abhi dekha. mujhe aapki ye rachna behad pasand aai. aapki rachnao me ajeeb sa bholapan aur sukoon milta hai. aur aapka thanx ki aapne 'tum' ki jagah 'wo' kiya Koi Baat Nahi Nirala JI Its ok Sory Mat Boliye Shukriya Jo Aapko Meri Likhi Post Acchi Lagi Aap Bus Yuhi Sath Dete Raho Nirala JI Hum Koshish Krenge Aur Behtar Likhe |
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«Reply #12 on: February 16, 2011, 05:06:48 PM » |
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«Reply #13 on: February 16, 2011, 05:12:04 PM » |
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bht bht or bht khoob rishi ji...
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«Reply #14 on: February 16, 2011, 05:16:47 PM » |
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bahot aacha likha he rishi ji.....maja aa gaya padkar......keep it up
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