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Chand phir nikla aur shama jalne laghi
Iss isqh ki aag mein diwani ban chuki
Chahe tum door ho fir bhi dil ke kareeb ho
Jab tak chamake chaand sitare hum hai tumhare
Sagar ke jo laharen pukare milake rahenge dono kinare
Chahe paas ho chahe door tum ho mere jeevan ki tasveer
Mere pyaar ka chand tum mujhe bhul na jaana
Mere pyaar ka nazrana lekar toh jaana
Chup gaye ansoo aaj phir bharish mein
Dil main phir gum ka sailab aaya hai
Chupa loh mujhe chand ki chaon mein
Saja loh mujhe aapni bhaon mein
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«Reply #1 on: March 17, 2008, 07:29:18 AM » |
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Shukriya majid..  |
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«Reply #2 on: March 17, 2008, 11:13:43 AM » |
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Nice one Honey...Keep it up..! |
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«Reply #3 on: March 17, 2008, 03:44:50 PM » |
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nice work honey!!
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harashmahajan
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«Reply #4 on: March 18, 2008, 04:36:02 AM » |
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Honey wrote:- Chand phir nikla aur shama jalne laghi
Iss isqh ki aag mein diwani ban chuki
Chahe tum door ho fir bhi dil ke kareeb ho
Jab tak chamake chaand sitare hum hai tumhare
Sagar ke jo laharen pukare milake rahenge dono kinare
Chahe paas ho chahe door tum ho mere jeevan ki tasveer
Mere pyaar ka chand tum mujhe bhul na jaana
Mere pyaar ka nazrana lekar toh jaana
Chup gaye ansoo aaj phir bharish mein
Dil main phir gum ka sailab aaya hai
Chupa loh mujhe chand ki chaon mein
Saja loh mujhe aapni bhaon mein Honey..aapne apni tehreer main apne sheroN ki har jodi alag likhi...azaad nazmm keh sakte haiN......per khoobsoorat likhi.....Agar critiqs ke tour par iska jawaab likheiN alag tareeke ka...tanz liye hoga..per achha bhi wahi lagega.....kyuN ki maiN tanz our dard hi bechta hooN so wahi likhta hooN....Ye pal pal ka chalna fasila khatam na karega,
Tum kitna bhi chaho tumeh woh kal na milega
Ye dil ke tukde haiN ya aapki yadeiN
Tum kitna bhi chao, tumeh marham na milega.
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honeyrose
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«Reply #5 on: March 18, 2008, 06:45:07 AM » |
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Honey wrote:- Chand phir nikla aur shama jalne laghi
Iss isqh ki aag mein diwani ban chuki
Chahe tum door ho fir bhi dil ke kareeb ho
Jab tak chamake chaand sitare hum hai tumhare
Sagar ke jo laharen pukare milake rahenge dono kinare
Chahe paas ho chahe door tum ho mere jeevan ki tasveer
Mere pyaar ka chand tum mujhe bhul na jaana
Mere pyaar ka nazrana lekar toh jaana
Chup gaye ansoo aaj phir bharish mein
Dil main phir gum ka sailab aaya hai
Chupa loh mujhe chand ki chaon mein
Saja loh mujhe aapni bhaon mein Honey..aapne apni tehreer main apne sheroN ki har jodi alag likhi...azaad nazmm keh sakte haiN......per khoobsoorat likhi.....Agar critiqs ke tour par iska jawaab likheiN alag tareeke ka...tanz liye hoga..per achha bhi wahi lagega.....kyuN ki maiN tanz our dard hi bechta hooN so wahi likhta hooN....Ye pal pal ka chalna fasila khatam na karega,
Tum kitna bhi chaho tumeh woh kal na milega
Ye dil ke tukde haiN ya aapki yadeiN
Tum kitna bhi chao, tumeh marham na milega.
Harash
Humhe aaj bhi unka intezaar hogha
Humhe yaqeen hai ki kal zaroor hogha
Woh dard-e-gum mein bhi ik pyaar ki pyaas hai
Woh dekh ley meri aab-e-deedah woh dard ki pyaas hai ~honeyrose~ |
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harashmahajan
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«Reply #6 on: March 18, 2008, 04:09:57 PM » |
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Honey ..bahoot khoob......... Honey wrot:- Humhe aaj bhi unka intezaar hogha
Humhe yaqeen hai ki kal zaroor hogha
Woh dard-e-gum mein bhi ik pyaar ki pyaas hai
Woh dekh ley meri aab-e-deedah woh dard ki pyaas hai Teri aankhoN ke samander maiN ye jalan kaisi hai
Gar hai bhi toh numaiish kerne ki lagan kaisi hai
ye intezaar our yaqeen ab toh lazmi hai mere dost
Is Dard-e-gum maiN ye pyaar ki pyaas kaisi hai
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«Reply #7 on: March 18, 2008, 07:18:40 PM » |
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Bohat khoob HoneyRose... Nice Reply Harash...
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«Reply #9 on: March 19, 2008, 06:44:42 AM » |
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Shukriyaa aryan and Honey....Mujhe kon sa lutf hasil nahiN hai
Tera gum bhulane kekabil nahiN hai
Tere dum kadam se diloN maiN hai rounaq
Woh dil kya hai jo teri manzil nahiN hai
Harash
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«Reply #10 on: March 19, 2008, 07:01:06 AM » |
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Shukriyaa aryan and Honey....Mujhe kon sa lutf hasil nahiN hai
Tera gum bhulane kekabil nahiN hai
Tere dum kadam se diloN maiN hai rounaq
Woh dil kya hai jo teri manzil nahiN hai
Harash Bohat khoob Harash ji..
Manzil ka toh hosh nahi
Aaj ki zindagi mein naye kadam rakhe
Kal ka humey koi itemaad nahi
Na jaane kab hum mil paye.. |
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«Reply #11 on: March 19, 2008, 07:23:58 AM » |
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Honey wrote Bohat khoob Harash ji..
Manzil ka toh hosh nahi
Aaj ki zindagi mein naye kadam rakhe
Kal ka humey koi itemaad nahi
Na jaane kab hum mil paye.. Waah bahoot khoob honey...yahi naam hai shayad.....achha likh lete haiN aap...Tuzh se milker mohabbat ki ada bhool gaye
Doobker tujhmaiN sanam rasme wafa bhool gaye
Teri aankhoN se chhalakte haiN mai ke paimane
Mili nazer toh maikade ka nasha bhool gaye.
Khuda jaane aitmaad ka sila kya hai aage
khwaab lete lete milne ka sila bhool gaye.
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«Reply #12 on: March 19, 2008, 07:31:21 AM » |
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wow bahot khoob Honey di Harsh ji ...
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«Reply #13 on: March 19, 2008, 07:32:06 AM » |
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madhoshi ka aalam chaya hai mujhpe
jab se nazarein mili hai tujh se..
ilzaam main ab dun kis ko batao
ghayal huyi jo teri aankhon ke teer se...
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«Reply #14 on: March 19, 2008, 07:42:55 AM » |
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Punam wrote:- madhoshi ka aalam chaya hai mujhpe
jab se nazarein mili hai tujh se..
ilzaam main ab dun kis ko batao
ghayal huyi jo teri aankhon ke teer se... bahut khoob punam.....aapkee dono'n ashar pasnd aaye....aise hee achchhe-achchhe sher se iss bazm kee raunaq barhaate rahiye... Teri madhoshi ko mere dil ki shikayat hai
NazreiN mila ker baat kero toh kyamat hai
KyuiN kerte ho iljammoN ki bateiN yahaaN
Ghayal ho ankhoN ke teer se inayat hai
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