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ya to sukoon ka thikana chhodo...
ya uski yaado ab aana chhodo....
ya khushboo bano tum
ya hawa ban jaao....
magar mera ashiyana chhodo...
ya na jaao tum
ya phir na aana...
baharo mujhe satana chhodo...
ya tumhe shauk hai
ya mein hi khilona hoon...
mujhe todna..banaana chhodo...
ya mein jalta hoon
ya tamanna jalti hai...
kuchh to khatir e parwana chhodo...
ya chhodo ye badmasti
ya chhodo ya deewanapan...
ya phir aaj ye maikhana chhodo...
ya to sukoon ka thikana chhodo
ya uski yaado ab aana chhodo....!
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«Reply #1 on: May 20, 2008, 08:25:02 PM » |
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Prateek Mardia
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«Reply #2 on: May 20, 2008, 10:03:11 PM » |
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aapko pudh kur kabhi waah to kabhi aah nikalta he.kamaal he.
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«Reply #3 on: May 21, 2008, 05:48:56 AM » |
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just amazing dear keep up
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«Reply #4 on: May 21, 2008, 06:47:22 AM » |
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welcome to yoindia Deetri
bahut accha likha hai aapne
keep it up
ya to khwabon mein aana chodo
ya phir meri haeeqat se mil jao
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Prateek Mardia
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«Reply #5 on: May 22, 2008, 06:14:30 PM » |
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ya to sukoon ka thikana chhodo...
ya uski yaado ab aana chhodo....
ya khushboo bano tum
ya hawa ban jaao....
magar mera ashiyana chhodo...
ya na jaao tum
ya phir na aana...
baharo mujhe satana chhodo...
ya tumhe shauk hai
ya mein hi khilona hoon...
mujhe todna..banaana chhodo...
ya mein jalta hoon
ya tamanna jalti hai...
kuchh to khatir e parwana chhodo...
ya chhodo ye badmasti
ya chhodo ya deewanapan...
ya phir aaj ye maikhana chhodo...
ya to sukoon ka thikana chhodo
ya uski yaado ab aana chhodo....!
is tarranum se gaana chhodo aur gaane hi he to yeh taana chhodo nahi rakhta hu mein shabdon ki jaadogari teri tarah tum baate banaana chodo de de mujhe 'dil-nikaala' berahami se , sehjaunga! mere jaane ka bahaana chhodo Prateek |
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«Reply #6 on: May 22, 2008, 06:48:12 PM » |
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simply. amazing creation!! good job deetri1  bahhot acha prateek ji apne bhi jawab diya hai good job!! |
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«Reply #7 on: May 22, 2008, 09:55:14 PM » |
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re replying prateek ji
ya chhodo ye berukhi
ya phero na nazar
ya phir mujhe bulana chhodo
ya thukara do mujhe
ya apna hi lo
magar yun azmana chhodo
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«Reply #8 on: May 22, 2008, 09:57:04 PM » |
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wah kaya jawab diya hai deetri apne!! Good one!!
Deetri ji, apke is IdName (deetri) ka arth kaya hai?
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deetri1
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«Reply #9 on: May 22, 2008, 10:01:57 PM » |
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my name is deepak tripathi so i took id deetri1
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«Reply #10 on: May 22, 2008, 10:03:53 PM » |
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Thanks Deepak!! App bahoot hi simple shabdo main bahoot gahra likhte hai!! Asha hai aise he apki kavitaye padne ko milati rahegi!!!
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«Reply #11 on: May 22, 2008, 10:10:03 PM » |
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thanx
u all r very good and attentive.
itne achchhe manch par khud ko pesh karna mere liye achchha anubhav hai.
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«Reply #12 on: May 23, 2008, 07:23:27 PM » |
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re replying prateek ji
ya chhodo ye berukhi
ya phero na nazar
ya phir mujhe bulana chhodo
ya thukara do mujhe
ya apna hi lo
magar yun azmana chhodo
Aapka andaaz kabile-taaref he deepak bhai,bahut kum aur zarrori shabdon ka prayog kar jo bahut kuch keh jaate he-woh sahi arth mein 'shayar' he!aapka mein bhee kayal hu! |
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