Hai Paya Tujhme Maine --- Kumaar

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Naa apna hai koi naa kisi aur ko apna banana hai,
Tu hi meri mohabbat tu hi mera aashiyana hai..!!

Hai paaya tujhe maine meri ibadaton se khuda se,
Ki tu hi meraa makka tu hi mera madeena hai!!!

Jai Kumar
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«Reply #1 on: September 10, 2014, 08:32:01 PM »
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bahut khoob Jai kumar jee. Applause Applause Applause
 Just a friendly advice, aap qaafiye se qaafia milaane kee koshish keejiye. For example agar aap second line ko kehte:
Tu hee merii hoor hai tu hee merii haseenaa hai. Abb 4th line is se match kar jaaye gii.
Tu hee meraa Makka hai tu hee meraa madeena hai.
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«Reply #2 on: September 11, 2014, 06:47:12 AM »
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 Applause Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #4 on: September 14, 2014, 12:57:54 PM »
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AP sabka bahut bahut shukriya
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«Reply #5 on: September 14, 2014, 12:59:39 PM »
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Quote from: surindarn on September 10, 2014, 08:32:01 PM
bahut khoob Jai kumar jee. Applause Applause Applause
 Just a friendly advice, aap qaafiye se qaafia milaane kee koshish keejiye. For example agar aap second line ko kehte:
Tu hee merii hoor hai tu hee merii haseenaa hai. Abb 4th line is se match kar jaaye gii.
Tu hee meraa Makka hai tu hee meraa madeena hai.

Surindran Bhai namste!

aapke vichar bahut hi sarahniy hai.. main koshish karungaa aisa likhne ki!!
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