Magic Moments------please critique

by unicorn_girl on July 16, 2005, 04:16:33 AM
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Dreams of being together





Every time
I dream ,   of us
being together,
and holding hands,
and you fulfilling all that
What my heart demands.
There is no time,
No minute nor
any second ,
When my  mind  stops
thinking about you.
Its all the magic ,
the magic of your eyes,
that casts the
spells on me ,
to think about you,
and hold on to you,
you don’t know how much    
“I love you”.
You are a true magician
Who has stole my heart
And made yourself a part
of my life and my heart
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«Reply #1 on: July 16, 2005, 07:11:44 AM »
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Dreams of being together





Every time
I dream ,   of us
being together,
and holding hands,
and you fulfilling all that
What my heart demands.
There is no time,
No minute nor
any second ,
When my  mind  stops
thinking about you.
Its all the magic ,
the magic of your eyes,
that casts the
spells on me ,
to think about you,
and hold on to you,
you don’t know how much    
“I love you”.
You are a true magician
Who has stole my heart
And made yourself a part
of my life and my heart
wow,thats lovely unicorn Usual Smile
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«Reply #2 on: July 16, 2005, 07:17:52 AM »
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thanx niddhi  tongue3
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«Reply #3 on: August 08, 2005, 03:05:41 PM »
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so here i come...!!!
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Good work Uni
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in your arms the magic begins
you mould me you melt me within
the look deep in your eyes
can hold a million skies
then the touch of your cool skin
brings a shiver down my back
and i beg to hold me tight
honey! you know just how to teat me right
in your love i'm charmed to bliss
and i never want to miss a single kiss
so warm so gentel, such beauty you bring
my best of friends my love unto me you sing
songs of blessings and love devine
songs of you and me like sweet wine
dont let the magic melt away
with you i send the most magical days
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«Reply #4 on: August 09, 2005, 08:10:57 AM »
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lovely tosha

Midnight moon
in the month of june
it raining outside
the doors are open wide
of my house and my heart
just for you
loving someone truly is an art
and you know it  true
as the sky in the night
is empty without its stars
my life is empty without you
so do back soon
because magic moments
you promised me
are still in due
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«Reply #5 on: August 09, 2005, 08:37:23 AM »
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Its raining ,
so its time for love
for lovers like us
its blessing from above
As we walk
under the same umbrella
the magic or the charisma..
starts blossoming ..
of the fisrt time love
as hand meets hand
the moment turns immortal
your  blue watery eyes stare at me
its so beautiful that
it feels more deeper than the sea
then suddenly
air comes rushing
and there flies our umbrella
we knew this was a
disguised blessing
you turned to me ,
held me in to your arms
your sense of touch
sent jerks inside me
and i started shivering
then down came a kiss
filled full of bliss
these magic moments now i miss
as you are away
so do come back soon ....please
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«Reply #6 on: August 17, 2005, 05:39:39 AM »
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Shocked  U bet its comming out better each time .. !!!
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Dripping drop upon my face
as i swing in your arms in chill rain
touch of your skin loves warmth within
glimps of heaven these magic moments
stay with me like this forever
lets let the love bloom and get stronger
and hand in hand we'll walk afar
come to me my honey, be with me
let us dance a bit more in love
and let this rain make our love flow
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«Reply #7 on: August 18, 2005, 03:59:21 AM »
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very nice Unicorn_Girl & Tosha..... Beautiful!!!
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«Reply #8 on: August 18, 2005, 07:32:51 AM »
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Thanx a lot Aryaan
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Well !! i always spell ur name wrong...u ner checked me...!!! ... U seem to be a real poet. Keep it up!!!
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«Reply #9 on: August 18, 2005, 05:39:19 PM »
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very nice  Unicorn................Tosha....................  tongue3 ..........
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«Reply #10 on: August 18, 2005, 05:57:39 PM »
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Thanks a lot waheed
.~.~.~.~.~.~.~.~.~.~.~.~.
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«Reply #11 on: August 18, 2005, 07:02:42 PM »
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Thanx a lot Aryaan
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Well !! i always spell ur name wrong...you ner checked me...!!! ... you seem to be a real poet. Keep it up!!!
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Lekin iss baar aap ne mera naam bilkul sahi likha Tosha...Usual Smile
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«Reply #12 on: August 19, 2005, 06:03:24 AM »
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HHmmm..!!!
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is baar shi spell kiya hai Aryaan jiiiiii Puzzled !
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we have shared moments of laughter and joy
we have sat together and shared our sorrows
known each outher for so long
seen the thicks and thins all along
for all these moments we have been together
like brand new memories and the begining
are saved in my heart forever
movies and trips, Mc Donals became our home
fighting like we are the one
like us there could be none
blessed was our love and pure our friendship
and the feeling of beauty with each other
let this love blossom in every season
creeping high up and deep within
my love for you is forever
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«Reply #13 on: August 21, 2005, 12:26:52 AM »
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Wow...It's Beautiful Tosha...............
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«Reply #14 on: August 21, 2005, 08:15:28 AM »
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Thanx a lot Aryaan[/n]
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In the Twilight  i gaze into the sky
and ask whe winds to blow my soul away
may i reach into your arms and i could hold you tight
we would dance in the rain and sing in the moon light
let our love flow deep with mystrious passion
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