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«Reply #15 on: August 19, 2010, 08:18:26 AM » |
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Dear Kasak Dil Ki! Ye ANU kya bala hai, zara batla dijiye. Waise poem bahut jazbaat hai aur purkaif hai. Achchha laga ise paRhkar. Daad haazir hai. (Waquif Ansari) <>*Mujhe fir se *ANU* banane wale ho tum*<>
Lehron me uthti hulchal hun main
Use sametne wale saahil ho tum
Geeton me sajte sur hun main
Unhe gungunate gaayak ho tum
Bikhri hui thandi sheetal chandni hun main
Par mujhe failane wale chaand ho tum
Phoolon ki khushbu haan hum main
Par ise sab failane wali hawa ka jhonka ho tum
Maana k sabse yahan haseen hun main
Par mujhe haseen banana wale ho tum
Yahan main sabke dil me rehne lagi hun
Par mujhe iss pariwaar me lane wale ho tum…
Kuch pal ko kho diya tha maine apna wajud
Mujhe aaj khudse milane wale ho tum
Mujhe fir se *ANU* banane wale ho tum……!!!!
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«Reply #16 on: August 19, 2010, 08:39:04 AM » |
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«Reply #17 on: August 19, 2010, 05:29:05 PM » |
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kya kahu aapse Pooja-di.....ab bahut kam aati ho.....jaldi laut jaati ho.... Kuchh bhi puchhu jawaab nahi deti ho.....itne sunder beech par akeli khadi ho.... hamein hi bula leti......  bahut dino se haal nahi bataye aapne pu-di....pehle tou kehti thee ud k aajaa...ab Geet-di bhi nahi k barabar aati hain.....dheere dheere yo k sab purane sitaare kisi aur galaxy mai chamakne chale gaye..... Panchi chahe kahi bhi udd jaaye....aankhir mein laut kar apne basere mein hi aate hai....toh yha k sitaare kaise kahi aur chamkenge dear koyal......waise aap kaun se beech ki baat kar rahi hai.....aur ab hum aa gaye hai ,ab toh haal-chaal sab chalega.....  |
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KOYAL46
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«Reply #18 on: August 19, 2010, 05:41:56 PM » |
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Nikhaar-di aap mujhe aap keh rahi hain......arre aapke signature ki beautiful senari ki baat kar rahi hu......wahaan ret par aap khadi ho naa......ye sunn kar achha laga aap ab roj aayengi...... Panchi chahe kahi bhi udd jaaye....aankhir mein laut kar apne basere mein hi aate hai....toh yha k sitaare kaise kahi aur chamkenge dear koyal......waise aap kaun se beech ki baat kar rahi hai.....aur ab hum aa gaye hai ,ab toh haal-chaal sab chalega..... |
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ParwaaZ
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«Reply #19 on: August 19, 2010, 05:49:31 PM » |
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Kasak Jee Aadaab .....
Phir se aapke naye khayaaloN se saji poem dekhi achchi lagi...
And hum pahlese hi kah rahe hai ke aapke khayaal behad achche hai..
Kuch likhane ke mutalbe se kahna chahenge agar aapko bura na lage to...
Ijazat hai to bataiyeNga ...
Likhati rahiye...
Khush rahiye.....<>*Mujhe fir se *ANU* banane wale ho tum*<>
Lehron me uthti hulchal hun main
Use sametne wale saahil ho tum
Geeton me sajte sur hun main
Unhe gungunate gaayak ho tum
Bikhri hui thandi sheetal chandni hun main
Par mujhe failane wale chaand ho tum
Phoolon ki khushbu haan hum main
Par ise sab failane wali hawa ka jhonka ho tum
Maana k sabse yahan haseen hun main
Par mujhe haseen banana wale ho tum
Yahan main sabke dil me rehne lagi hun
Par mujhe iss pariwaar me lane wale ho tum…
Kuch pal ko kho diya tha maine apna wajud
Mujhe aaj khudse milane wale ho tum
Mujhe fir se *ANU* banane wale ho tum……!!!!
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«Reply #20 on: August 19, 2010, 05:56:53 PM » |
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Kasak Jee Aadaab .....
Phir se aapke naye khayaaloN se saji poem dekhi achchi lagi...
And hum pahlese hi kah rahe hai ke aapke khayaal behad achche hai..
Kuch likhane ke mutalbe se kahna chahenge agar aapko bura na lage to...
Ijazat hai to bataiyeNga ...
Likhati rahiye...
Khush rahiye.....
kahiye na parwaaz ji...
hum kyun bura manennge...hum yahan sirf sikhne hi to aaye hain...sabachcha achcha to keh dete hain par kami nai batate...aap bateyneg to hume bht ahccha lagega...aur hum koshishs karenge use thik karne ki.... |
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ParwaaZ
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«Reply #21 on: August 19, 2010, 07:28:17 PM » |
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Jee Kasak jee ....
Woh kya hai naa ijazat lena zururi hai... KyuN ki sabko apni aana pyaari hoti hai hume bhi...
Chaliye aapko kuch samjhane ki koshish karte hai.. waise hum ko ustad shayar nahi hai... per kuch to aapko sikha sakte hai..Hum jo aapki post meiN black kiye hai use dhayan dijiye..[/b] <>*Mujhe fir se *ANU* banane wale ho tum*<>
Lehron me uthti hulchal hun main
Use sametne wale saahil ho tum
Geeton me sajte sur hun main
Unhe gungunate gaayak ho tum
Bikhri hui thandi sheetal chandni hun main
Par mujhe failane wale chaand ho tum
Phoolon ki khushbu haan hum main
Par ise sab failane wali hawa ka jhonka ho tum
Maana k sabse yahan haseen hun main
Par mujhe haseen banana wale ho tum
uska use kaise karte hai yeh samjhne ke liye hum ek do sher kah dete hai... baki samjhne ke liye aapko bade shayaroN ko padhna padeNga...
Jaise aapne use kiya hai Sahil, Gayak, chand, jhonka, wale... etc
Aur jo kafiyaa hai uske bad aaye hua word's ko kahte hai radiff.. Jo aapne use kiya haiHo TUMAb agar aap first sher meiN sahil use kar rahi hai to usi ke rhyming words aapko dusre sher meiN use karne hote hai jisse poetry meiN rawaani aati hai ...
Sahil ke same words hai........ Mehfil, Qatil, Manzil, Aadil, Etc
Ab hum inko lekar aapko example meiN sher kah ker dikhate hai..
Ummid hai aap samjh jayengi..MaiN mouj to mere sahil ho tum
Mere khawahishoN ki manzil ho tumYeh first sher hua jisme dono hi lines meiN kafiya aur radiff use hua...Abhi secound sher dekhiye..MaiN tujhse hi milne aayi huN aaj
O jane tamanna kahaN gafil ho tumUmmid hai aap samjh gaye hongi... hum kya samjhana chah rahe the aapko...
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«Reply #22 on: August 19, 2010, 07:39:31 PM » |
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ji parwz ji samjh gai
next time dhyan rakhungi aapki ye baat.....
thnx ji aapne itne achche tarah se mujhe ye samjhaya.....
main try karti hun ab ise
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«Reply #23 on: August 20, 2010, 01:34:49 PM » |
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itni sweet wali post pe pahle hi itne aache aache replies aur comments aa chuke he ab aur me kya tariif karu.....  kis kis ke liye kya kya ho sabne bata diya ji....dil kholkar bata diya...  well   me to ye dunga apko |
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«Reply #24 on: August 20, 2010, 01:45:36 PM » |
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MG ji.....sabne apni baat kahi hai ...aur opinions diye hain...
ap bhi kuch likhte to hume achcha lagta....
plzzzzz
without ur reply on this post its meaningless
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«Reply #25 on: August 21, 2010, 06:49:39 AM » |
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MG ji.....sabne apni baat kahi hai ...aur opinions diye hain...
ap bhi kuch likhte to hume achcha lagta....
plzzzzz
without ur reply on this post its meaningless
mere reply ke bina post meaning less he   muje pata hi nahi tha ji... well kasak ji thts for u dear.  Harpal Mahakti Sham Si Lagti He
Thahre Pani Me Toofaan Si Lagti He
Dil Me Liye Hajaro Dua Sab Ke Liye
Khuda Ka Koi Farmaan Si Lagti He
Har Koi Banna Chahe Uska Apna
Wo Har Shaqs Par Meharbaan Si Lagti He
Kabhi Hasati Kabhi Rulati
Wo Ek Gudiya Nadaam Si Lagti He
Use Chukar Har Rang Nikhar Ata He
Kbhi Gul Kabhi Gulshan Kabhi Gulfaam Si Lagti He
Bikhri Zulfe Surkhi Labo Par
Ankhe Chalakte Jam Si Lagti He
Jis Naam Se Chahe Use Pukaro
Anu Kaho Ya Anamkia
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«Reply #26 on: August 21, 2010, 07:09:51 AM » |
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thnxxxxxxxxxxxxxx jiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii.......
aaj fir rula diya aapne......
kyun karte ho asia......
[/b]aur kya nahin pata wo bhi bata do..sab bata dungi.....
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«Reply #27 on: August 21, 2010, 09:00:03 AM » |
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«Reply #28 on: August 21, 2010, 10:00:40 AM » |
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bahut khoob Matrix ji... bahut bahut khoob aur ekdum sahi baat likhi hai aapne bahut sundar alfaazon me...!!!
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«Reply #29 on: August 25, 2010, 03:44:03 PM » |
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Nikhaar-di aap mujhe aap keh rahi hain......arre aapke signature ki beautiful senari ki baat kar rahi hu......wahaan ret par aap khadi ho naa......ye sunn kar achha laga aap ab roj aayengi......
Tammana hai dear aisi jagah ki....sorry for late reply....phir gayab ho gayi thi..... |
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