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Lo pawan bhee kar rahi athhkheliyein Khilee-khilee aaj meri mann kaliyein
Neeli-peeli rang-rangilee Kuchh madmaati,kuchh sharmaati Komal sunder sukhad rasilee Teetlee si wo cham-chamkilee
Mann bagiya kee hai wo laadaliyein Khilee-khilee aaj meri mann kaliyein
Aavo aavo mat sharmaavo Mann apne ko n bharmaavo Mast-mast aaj tum muskavo Yovan ki ab chhata dekhavo
Ban kar roop-rang kee Dulhanniya Khilee-khilee aaj meri mann kaliyein
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«Reply #1 on: December 21, 2010, 11:28:15 AM » |
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wow koyal.... very nice lines..... kya baat hai aaj badi khush lag rahi ho... accha laga tumhe is tarah dekh ke... bhagwan kare tum isi tarah hasti muskarati raho..
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«Reply #2 on: December 21, 2010, 12:05:39 PM » |
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aye haye--- kheele kheele mann kaliyan umangon tarangon ki banaye ladiyan rangbirangi phoolon ki samet lo saari pankhudiyan... *** bahut hi pyara sa masti se bharpoor kavita..Koyal ji. superb --maza aa gaya ji.
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«Reply #3 on: December 21, 2010, 12:23:45 PM » |
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Lo pawan bhee kar rahi athhkheliyein Khilee-khilee aaj meri mann kaliyein
Neeli-peeli rang-rangilee Kuchh madmaati,kuchh sharmaati Komal sunder sukhad rasilee Teetlee si wo cham-chamkilee
Mann bagiya kee hai wo laadaliyein Khilee-khilee aaj meri mann kaliyein
Aavo aavo mat sharmaavo Mann apne ko n bharmaavo Mast-mast aaj tum muskavo Yovan ki ab chhata dekhavo
Ban kar roop-rang kee Dulhanniya Khilee-khilee aaj meri mann kaliyein
kya baat he ......mast mast cute cute wali poetry he ye to........ too good and too sweet........bht aacha likha he koyal ji apne .........
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«Reply #4 on: December 21, 2010, 04:33:00 PM » |
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Nice poem sweetu but it cud b better...
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KOYAL46
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«Reply #5 on: December 21, 2010, 04:47:47 PM » |
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haan Geet-di mein bhi yahi feel kar rahi thee par post karne ki jaldi mai jayada mehnat nahi ki..... Nice poem sweetu but it cud b better...
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«Reply #6 on: December 21, 2010, 05:02:55 PM » |
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haan Geet-di mein bhi yahi feel kar rahi thee par post karne ki jaldi mai jayada mehnat nahi ki.....
No prob next time dhayn rakhna jaldi baazi mein kavita ka asli matlab aksar miss ho jata hai..likhna padhna samjhna then post karna..take care...
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«Reply #7 on: December 22, 2010, 09:48:19 AM » |
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Lo pawan bhee kar rahi athhkheliyein Khilee-khilee aaj meri mann kaliyein
Neeli-peeli rang-rangilee Kuchh madmaati,kuchh sharmaati Komal sunder sukhad rasilee Teetlee si wo cham-chamkilee
Mann bagiya kee hai wo laadaliyein Khilee-khilee aaj meri mann kaliyein
Aavo aavo mat sharmaavo Mann apne ko n bharmaavo Mast-mast aaj tum muskavo Yovan ki ab chhata dekhavo
Ban kar roop-rang kee Dulhanniya Khilee-khilee aaj meri mann kaliyein
Bahut Khoob Koyal Ji
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«Reply #8 on: December 22, 2010, 10:00:52 AM » |
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hmm koyaliya mast likhela he...
ek bat kahu isme maturity ki kami hai kahin kahin...
could have been better...
aisa mujhe lag raha he...
kuchh galat ho to maaf karna...
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KOYAL46
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«Reply #9 on: December 22, 2010, 12:42:23 PM » |
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aARE TUM BATAAOGE NAHI TOU MEIN KAISE THEEK KARUNGI.... Bataao kahan par aur kyu tumko aysa laga....I want to understand...jaldi bataao hmm koyaliya mast likhela he...
ek bat kahu isme maturity ki kami hai kahin kahin...
could have been better...
aisa mujhe lag raha he...
kuchh galat ho to maaf karna...
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«Reply #10 on: December 22, 2010, 01:50:05 PM » |
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chalo chalo Abhi ji na sahi to ham batate hain kahan kami hai isme--agar aapki izazat ho to.. ""kuch to gyan hamara bhi kisi ke kaam aye to kya hua jo hum musafire kabra aur aap yoindian shayar kahlaye "" izazat bas itna dijiye ke iss pyari si rachna ko tod marod kar kuch khatarnaak banaye "" hahaha
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KOYAL46
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«Reply #11 on: December 22, 2010, 01:59:42 PM » |
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NAA JI NAA NAHI DETE HUM KISI KO BEEGAADNE KI IZAAJAT....
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nirala
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«Reply #12 on: December 22, 2010, 02:15:35 PM » |
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hamare kabiliyat se kyun darte ho ya kahen apni par akadte ho !! jao ji jao na kahenge ab kuch bhi aap to gumaan me rahte ho !! kaise pata ji aapko zara sa ilm karaiye hume bigaad hi denge aapki pyari si rachna ko hum..ye kaise jaante ho!!"" thanx Koyal sahiba khus rahiye
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«Reply #13 on: December 22, 2010, 02:21:57 PM » |
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Aap he ne tou kaha...humne ba-akshar maan liya... Atishyokti mai keh rahe ho kaise jaan lete hum...
Chalo aaj dekh lete hai ilm aapka bhi hum Naa gumaan hai naa akad hai bas saadgi hai
Akad tou pehchaan murdo ki hoti hai Hum tou ek chul-buli si jaan hain...
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nirala
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«Reply #14 on: December 22, 2010, 02:37:47 PM » |
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ahahaha maza aa gaya "" bas ab aap bhi ranj na khaiye hamare mazak ko dil pr na lijiye humare badbolepan ko chama kijiye aur aise shabd nhi hamare pass jo aapki kavita ko bigaad sake. thanx
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