Phir Kyun Rahe Chup

by syednaami on May 08, 2008, 10:14:32 PM
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               GHAZAL STYLE









Ab subah ka nahin intzaar mujhe, -
Manzil khadi hai saamne mere, -
Dhoondhta hun phir bhi ajnabi raaste, -
Jo khule huey hain darvaaze unke man ke, -
Phansaata hun khud ko kyun band galiyon men, -
Jisse samjha nahin aaj tak maine, -
Uske dil men hain raaz lakhon chhupe, -

Kehne ko betaab bhi hai par na kahe, -
Aisi de qurbaani ki khud hi jale, -
Hans ke chhupaaye saare gile shikve, -
Kisiko apne gham ka ahsaas tak na hone de, -

Poochhe agar koi to baat ko golmol kare, -
Chhupa kar apni aankhon ko aansun poncche, -
Baat hai jo man men dabi kaise bole, -
Uski aah men asar hai itna ki pathar pighle, -
Khaamosh nigaahon se sada pyar ki de, -
Phir kyun rahe chup ab to kuchh bole. -
Phir kyun rahe chup ab to kuchh bole. -



(Syed Naami)

                       
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«Reply #1 on: May 09, 2008, 01:58:45 AM »
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Ab subah ka nahin intzaar mujhe, -
Manzil khadi hai saamne mere, -
Dhoondhta hun phir bhi ajnabi raaste, -
Jo khule huey hain darvaaze unke man ke, -
Phansaata hun khud ko kyun band galiyon men, -
Jisse samjha nahin aaj tak maine, -
Uske dil men hain raaz lakhon chhupe, -

Syed ji this is really very good gazal  Applause The above line
really i liked it very much. Keep up.
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«Reply #2 on: May 09, 2008, 02:36:11 AM »
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Aap ka saath raha to inshaAllah aur bhi achha likhne ki justaju par gaamzan rahenge. Hosla afzai ka tah-e-dil se mashkoor hun.
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«Reply #3 on: May 09, 2008, 04:26:10 AM »
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sayed saheb bahoot acha likhaapne


Harash
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«Reply #4 on: May 09, 2008, 04:36:48 AM »
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               GHAZAL STYLE









Ab subah ka nahin intzaar mujhe, -
Manzil khadi hai saamne mere, -
Dhoondhta hun phir bhi ajnabi raaste, -
Jo khule huey hain darvaaze unke man ke, -
Phansaata hun khud ko kyun band galiyon men, -
Jisse samjha nahin aaj tak maine, -
Uske dil men hain raaz lakhon chhupe, -

Kehne ko betaab bhi hai par na kahe, -
Aisi de qurbaani ki khud hi jale, -
Hans ke chhupaaye saare gile shikve, -
Kisiko apne gham ka ahsaas tak na hone de, -

Poochhe agar koi to baat ko golmol kare, -
Chhupa kar apni aankhon ko aansun poncche, -
Baat hai jo man men dabi kaise bole, -
Uski aah men asar hai itna ki pathar pighle, -
Khaamosh nigaahon se sada pyar ki de, -
Phir kyun rahe chup ab to kuchh bole. -
Phir kyun rahe chup ab to kuchh bole. -



(Syed Naami)

                       

Simple, Meaningful and very very Beautiful... Applause
The best thing I like about this is that, it is very different from my recent reads...

This is beyond any rating... icon_smile Marvellous work Syed ji..
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«Reply #5 on: May 09, 2008, 08:19:59 AM »
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sayed ji bohut hi simple words choose kiye hai lekin gajal mei aapne bakhoobi se piroya hai aapne shabdo ko
really its a simple gazal but lovely toooooo
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«Reply #6 on: May 09, 2008, 01:08:27 PM »
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Kehne ko betaab bhi hai par na kahe, -
Aisi de qurbaani ki khud hi jale, -
Hans ke chhupaaye saare gile shikve, -
Kisiko apne gham ka ahsaas tak na hone de, -



(Syed Naami)
                       

syed ji wah kya likhe aap ne ...sach bahot hi acha likhe....
aap k yeh rachna padh ke mann me jo aaya likh rahi...
plz galti ho to maaf karna...

raat ka andhera hi subha ki roshni mein payi
raha se anjan nahi hoon.manjil bhi saamne thi
dil kehta hai badhao kadam ruk kyun gayi
khud ko samjhane lagi wahan tujhe jana nahi...

khud ko rokne ki kosish mein har baar haari
saamne pake unhe aanshoo rok na payi
muskan ki aad mein aanshoo chhupa na chahi
khud ko samjhane lagi wahan tera basera nahi...

jab bhi kuch kehena chaha kisi ka khayal aaya
chup rehna hai mujhe kuch nahi kehena
uss raste se mukarna hai pathar rakh ke dil pe
khud ko samjha rahi wahan tera koi kaam nahi...
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«Reply #7 on: May 10, 2008, 05:36:05 AM »
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Wah Kya Khoob Mehfil Sazi Hai
Bohat Khoob Khoob Likha Hai Aapne Sayid Bhai
Aur Punam Ji Aapne Bhi Bohat Achha Rep Kiya Hai
Lagey Raho....
Shihab bhaya, aap ne iss ghazal ko dil se saraha hai, buhat shukriya.

syed ji wah kya likhe aap ne ...sach bahot hi acha likhe....
aap k yeh rachna padh ke mann me jo aaya likh rahi...
plz galti ho to maaf karna...

raat ka andhera hi subha ki roshni mein payi
raha se anjan nahi hoon.manjil bhi saamne thi
dil kehta hai badhao kadam ruk kyun gayi
khud ko samjhane lagi wahan tujhe jana nahi...


   Punam jee aap ne mujhe laajawaab kar diya hai, ab kahan se itna achha jawaab
   de paunga. Mera saath dene ka tah-e-dil se mamnoon hun.


Simple, Meaningful and very very Beautiful... Applause
The best thing I like about this is that, it is very different from my recent reads...

This is beyond any rating... icon_smile Marvellous work Syed ji..
   Mahiya jee,
   Aap ka itna umda andaaz-e-taareef hai ki aap ka shukriya main kaise ada
   karun, your words are beyond praise. Thanks so much.

sayed ji bohut hi simple words choose kiye hai lekin gajal mei aapne bakhoobi se piroya hai aapne shabdo ko
really its a simple gazal but lovely toooooo
          Kaushik saahib,
           Aap ne itne behtreen andaz men meri poetry ka rang bayaan kya ki dil
           khush hogaya, Aap ki aamad par iss mehfil ko khiraaj mila. Buhat badi
           Maherbaani.

sayed saheb bahoot acha likhaapne


Harash
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              Aap ke qadam yahaan pade sukhanwaron ke hosle buland huey.
              Buhat badi inaayat aapki.
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«Reply #8 on: May 13, 2008, 10:27:57 PM »
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Good job Sami Ji and Punam!!
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«Reply #9 on: May 14, 2008, 02:52:19 AM »
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Thanks a lot Pooja jee, aap ne hosla phirse waapas diya humen. Shukriya
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«Reply #10 on: July 23, 2008, 06:48:38 PM »
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samajh nahee aatha tareef kaise karoon...

syed ji, aap kee vocab is so extensive. isnt most of it urdu? or is it hindi?
~sidra






Ab subah ka nahin intzaar mujhe, -
Manzil khadi hai saamne mere, -
Dhoondhta hun phir bhi ajnabi raaste, -
Jo khule huey hain darvaaze unke man ke, -
Phansaata hun khud ko kyun band galiyon men, -
Jisse samjha nahin aaj tak maine, -
Uske dil men hain raaz lakhon chhupe, -

Kehne ko betaab bhi hai par na kahe, -
Aisi de qurbaani ki khud hi jale, -
Hans ke chhupaaye saare gile shikve, -
Kisiko apne gham ka ahsaas tak na hone de, -

Poochhe agar koi to baat ko golmol kare, -
Chhupa kar apni aankhon ko aansun poncche, -
Baat hai jo man men dabi kaise bole, -
Uski aah men asar hai itna ki pathar pighle, -
Khaamosh nigaahon se sada pyar ki de, -
Phir kyun rahe chup ab to kuchh bole. -
Phir kyun rahe chup ab to kuchh bole. -



(Syed Naami)

                       
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«Reply #11 on: July 23, 2008, 07:32:19 PM »
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Quote from: anjaan dharkan
samajh nahee aatha tareef kaise karoon...

syed ji, aap kee vocab is so extensive. isnt most of it urdu? or is it hindi?
~sidra

Sidra Saahiba... Sab se pahle shukriya aur yahan aa kar haosla afzai karne ki mahirbaani...

Sidra jee,,, Main ziyada tar Urdu men likhta hun kyunki Urdu yahan par national language hai... Hindi men bhi likhta hun parantu tab sirf Hindi shabdon ka prayog karta hun,,, kabhi kabhi dono bhashaon ko ek saath pro deta hun...
Baqi yeh sab mere ustaadon ka ahsaan unki duayen hain...
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«Reply #12 on: July 23, 2008, 08:46:41 PM »
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Ab subah ka nahin intzaar mujhe, -
Manzil khadi hai saamne mere, -
Dhoondhta hun phir bhi ajnabi raaste, -
Jo khule huey hain darvaaze unke man ke, -
Phansaata hun khud ko kyun band galiyon men, -
Jisse samjha nahin aaj tak maine, -
Uske dil men hain raaz lakhon chhupe, -

Kehne ko betaab bhi hai par na kahe, -
Aisi de qurbaani ki khud hi jale, -
Hans ke chhupaaye saare gile shikve, -
Kisiko apne gham ka ahsaas tak na hone de, -

Poochhe agar koi to baat ko golmol kare, -
Chhupa kar apni aankhon ko aansun poncche, -
Baat hai jo man men dabi kaise bole, -
Uski aah men asar hai itna ki pathar pighle, -
Khaamosh nigaahon se sada pyar ki de, -
Phir kyun rahe chup ab to kuchh bole. -
Phir kyun rahe chup ab to kuchh bole. -



(Syed Naami)

                       

       Wow........written amazingly syed ji!!.......

       
    Bar Bar Kehthe Kehthe Chup Rahe Gai Hum,
    Bar Bar Izhaar Karthe Karthe Rookh Gayai Hum,

    Teri Mohabbat Se Anjaan The Hum,
    Teri Hi Mohabbat Ka Intazaar Karthe The Hum,

    Teri Ankhoon Mein Dhoobna Chaahthe The Hum,
    Tujko Appni Zindagi Banana Chaahthe The Hum,
 
    Bar Bar Kehthe Kehthe Chup Rahe Gai Hum,
    Bar Bar Appne Dil Koh Takleef Di Thi Humne,
    Ajj Bar Bar Kehthe Hoon Mein,
    Teri Hoon Mein, Teri Hoon Mein, Or Teri Hi Rahoongi Mein........
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«Reply #13 on: July 23, 2008, 11:13:26 PM »
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Sabah,,, Buhat kamaal ka likha hai,,, buhat pasand aaya... Yunhi aur bhi nikhra nikhra likhte raho...
       
Honi thi muhabbat bas ho gayi,,
Par Izhaar-e-ulfat ko daba diya,,

Anjaan rahne ka sabab kya tha,,
Ki chup rah kar sab daba diya,,

Aankhon se hi kahte sab kuchh,,
Jab iqraar ko dil men chhupa diya,,

Khaamosh rah gaye ya dar gaye,,
Beqaraari men dil apna jala diya..


|Syed Naami|
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«Reply #14 on: July 24, 2008, 01:41:43 AM »
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Teinku Ji............very nice reply!!!!!

 
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