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na mera kisi sy na mujh sy kisi ka raabta hy
apny hi logon main kab sy gulzar laapata hy
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«Reply #1 on: September 11, 2008, 09:14:19 PM » |
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rabte se hi gul mil ker rehna
koe ho chup to us se bat kerna
rahega ek dusre ke pass admi
is tara ka koe pegam bejna
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«Reply #2 on: September 12, 2008, 12:48:49 PM » |
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acha likha hy ye jwab bhi mager mujhy samjh nahi aa raha main kiya jwab likhon aap ko kanta ji
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«Reply #3 on: September 12, 2008, 02:44:40 PM » |
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kyu uttar dene sharam ati he gulzar mahashay, kuch bhi likho tum ku to ata na poetry
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«Reply #4 on: September 13, 2008, 04:47:41 AM » |
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na mera kisi sy na mujh sy kisi ka raabta hy
apny hi logon main kab sy gulzar laapata hy
Gulzaar saahab..Raabta aur Laapata..!!! badhiya shayar ho aap rabte se hi gul mil ker rehna
koe ho chup to us se bat kerna
rahega ek dusre ke pass admi
is tara ka koe pegam bejna
Galiban awwal mauqa hasil hai aapk asha'ar se Roo-b-roo hazir ayaa..waqaee badhiya Misra likhe hai aapne jawaaban Kanta sahiba. aap bhi badhiya shayar lagte ho !! Gulzaar bhai aur Kanta sahiba kuch hame bhi sikhain aaisi shayri likhna.Hame to kuch ata jata nahi kuch help karege aap do no hazraat k kis tarha shayri likhi jaati hai |
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«Reply #5 on: September 13, 2008, 01:00:38 PM » |
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ashraf bhai aap sy achi shaaeri ham kesy ker sakty hain aap lafzon aor dimaagh aor ilm sy shaaeri kerty ho aor ker sakty ho
ham jo dil main aata hy likh dety hain koi ghalti ho tao aap theek ker dety ho so no problem for us
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«Reply #6 on: September 13, 2008, 01:09:27 PM » |
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ab kiya likhon jo tum ny likh diya
koi lafz nahi hy likhny ko yahaan,
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«Reply #7 on: September 13, 2008, 02:46:48 PM » |
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mere ku koe poetry nahi ata he Muhammed, mein yaha se sikhi hu ek larki se or idar toda hruday ka bat kerti gulzar mahashay ka sath acha lagta uska poetry seemit he is liye.
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«Reply #8 on: September 13, 2008, 02:50:30 PM » |
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gulzar mahashay
mere shabdo se kero baten char
mein teri juban ki divani hu yar
yun rehna chup bhi acha nahi
tum kero dil ki baton se var hajar
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«Reply #9 on: September 14, 2008, 05:10:22 AM » |
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kanta ji aap ny buht hi acha likha hy bas lafz ka istmaal change kerna jesy, aap ny likha
mery shabdon sy karo baten char
main teri juban ki diwani hun yaar
yahan juban esy likhna zuban i mean dont use j use z and next
youn rehna chup bhi acha nahi
tum karo dil ki baton sy var hajar
word hajar nahi hazar esy likhna i mean use z not j
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«Reply #10 on: September 14, 2008, 05:12:44 AM » |
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kanta ji,
aap buht achi aor khoobsorat shaaeri kerny lagi ho esy hi likhti rehna aap acha likh sakti ho
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«Reply #11 on: September 14, 2008, 02:34:03 PM » |
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han mera hindi bhasha ke anusar likhi tumara support milega to or bhi acha poetry bahega gulzar mahashay, apna gyan ese bantte raho thanks
prem ka rabta kyu nahi swikar
chalo ke sath muje na kero khwar
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«Reply #12 on: September 14, 2008, 02:39:38 PM » |
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koi tao waja hogi koi tao hogi majbori
piyaar esy kesy hota hy yeh sochna zarori\
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«Reply #13 on: September 14, 2008, 02:53:50 PM » |
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apno se ho pyar to acha nahi hota
oron ku dekh ke kyu dil he jalta
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«Reply #14 on: September 14, 2008, 02:55:50 PM » |
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nice kanta ji
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