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RADHA NAHI MEERA HO GAYEE HU MEIN......
Krishnamay ho gayee hoon mein
Kaanhaa k rang me rang gayee hu mein
Shvet se shayaam ho gayee hu mein
Dekha aaine me, tera he roop ho gayee hu mein
Jaanti hu ess yug me nahi aayega tu
Sang mere raaslila nahi rachayega tu
Milawat ka maakhan kaise khayega tu
Ess shor-shrabe me Bansuri bhi na baja paayega tu
Teri yaad me baavree ho gayee hu mein
Gori thee ab saanwree ho gayee hu mein
Baant jote-jote teri kya se kya ho gayee hu mein
Radha nahi ab Meera ho gayee hu mein.............koyal
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«Reply #1 on: September 13, 2010, 07:36:10 AM » |
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Koyal ki boli may hai ek jaadu . . .
Apki ye shair sunke kanhaiya bhi ho jayenge bekabu. . .
Apse durr woh kaise jayenge . .
Agar hai durr ,to laut is yug may bus apke liye ayenge. . . .
(koyal ji bahot khub likha hai apne. . .ek alag duniya may chala gaya tha mai apki ye shair sunke . . .wah . .bahot khub )
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«Reply #2 on: September 13, 2010, 07:41:11 AM » |
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Nice thought Koyal dear,apne zazbaaton k saath maujuda halaaton ko dikhane ki bhi dikhane ki koshish ki hai tumne. Nice.  |
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«Reply #3 on: September 13, 2010, 08:05:22 AM » |
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WAH KYA BAAT HAI KOYAL JI.....
JAANTI HUN IS YUG ME NA TUM AAOGE NA TUMSE MIL PAAYUNGI MEH
ISILIYE "KRISHNA"-- TERI "RADHA NAHI MEERA HO GAYEE HU MEIN"..
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KOYAL46
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«Reply #6 on: September 13, 2010, 10:40:39 AM » |
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Aapka bahut dhanyawaad Amar...143ji....aapke taariff karne ka andaaz pasand aaya humko....  Koyal ki boli may hai ek jaadu . . .
Apki ye shair sunke kanhaiya bhi ho jayenge bekabu. . .
Apse durr woh kaise jayenge . .
Agar hai durr ,to laut is yug may bus apke liye ayenge. . . .
(koyal ji bahot khub likha hai apne. . .ek alag duniya may chala gaya tha mai apki ye shair sunke . . .wah . .bahot khub )
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«Reply #7 on: September 13, 2010, 11:04:44 AM » |
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Tamanna-di aapka aabhaar aapne padha aur saraha....mujhe achha laga....thanks a lot di..... Nice thought Koyal dear,apne zazbaaton k saath maujuda halaaton ko dikhane ki bhi dikhane ki koshish ki hai tumne. Nice. |
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«Reply #8 on: September 13, 2010, 01:43:40 PM » |
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hehe ...143 2 ji ..hehe ...really aapne bahot achaa likha hai ...m nt kidding .
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«Reply #9 on: September 13, 2010, 02:41:45 PM » |
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«Reply #10 on: September 13, 2010, 02:56:46 PM » |
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wow ....kasak ji  |
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«Reply #11 on: September 13, 2010, 03:59:37 PM » |
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Bhut khoob Koyal jii kya baat hai........
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«Reply #12 on: September 13, 2010, 05:42:09 PM » |
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this piece of poem is quite close to sufi poetry............
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