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aaina
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Tere khato.n ko padhta ja raha hu.n
Mutawatir muskurata ja raha hu.n
Jo tune meri khatir khoon e dil se likhe
Mein un lafzo.n ko chume ja raha hu.n
Kya koi itna kisi pe marta hai?
Ye sochun to main ghabra ja raha hu.n
Wo meri dhadkano ko chu raha hai
Zakhmi ho na jaye darta ja raha hu.n
Raaton ko aur kabhi din main bhi aksar
Usi ke khaab daikha ja raha hu.n
Satata hai mujhe wo akhri pehro.n
Main un lutfo mai duba ja raha hu.n
Mana leta hu.n usko jo rooth ke aslam
Qareeb utna main hota ja raha hu.n |
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«Reply #1 on: July 09, 2009, 11:10:47 AM » |
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«Reply #3 on: July 09, 2009, 11:41:33 AM » |
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 Bohot bohot khoob Aslam Ji...bohot hi haseen ghazal...aur khaas kar ye asha'ar behad achche hain :
Kya koi itna kisi pe marta hai?
Ye sochun to main ghabra ja raha hu.n
Wo meri dhadkano ko chu raha hai
Zakhmi ho na jaye darta ja raha hu.nMashallah kya kamal hai aapki qalam main...Allah is ki kashish yunhi barqarar rakhe, ameen.
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«Reply #4 on: July 09, 2009, 02:44:38 PM » |
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Fantastic.. Bahoot bahoot Khoob Aslam ji.. Bahoot hi behtareen Qalam pesh kiya hai.. Bahoot Khoob!
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shayara
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«Reply #6 on: July 09, 2009, 04:20:21 PM » |
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Aaina Ji,
Khoobsurat ghazal
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«Reply #7 on: July 09, 2009, 05:25:56 PM » |
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Tere khato.n ko padhta ja raha hu.n - Tere khutoot jo padhta ja raha hun main
Mutawatir muskurata ja raha hu.n - Jaise aik nayee zindage pa raha hun main
Jo tune meri khatir khoon e dil se likhe- apne lahu se jinko sawara hai tune
Mein un lafzo.n ko chume ja raha hu.n- apne labon se unko jila de raha hun main
Kya koi itna kisi pe marta hai?
Ye sochun to main ghabra ja raha hu.n- yehi sooch ker jiye ja raha hun main
Wo meri dhadkano ko chu raha hai - jo bangaye hain dhadkanain dil ki mere
Zakhmi ho na jaye darta ja raha hu.n - khushi mer na jaun der raha hun main
Raaton ko aur kabhi din main bhi aksar- rat ho din ho saher ho ke shaam
Usi ke khaab daikha ja raha hu.n - tere hi khuwaab dekh raha hun main
Satata hai mujhe wo akhri pehro.n
Main un lutfo mai duba ja raha hu.n
Mana leta hu.n usko jo rooth ke aslam
Qareeb utna main hota ja raha hu.n[/size][/b][/center]
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bahut khoob
just as u ask , I write few ashar for your advice
tx
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aaina
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«Reply #8 on: July 10, 2009, 07:57:44 AM » |
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thnxx so much madhu for ur appriciation
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salil2002
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«Reply #9 on: July 10, 2009, 08:15:42 AM » |
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bahut achche aslam bhai ..........dil khush ho gaya aapki poem padkar......kya lajawaab peshkash hai ishq kii chaasni main doobi huyi
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Rajesh Harish
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«Reply #10 on: July 10, 2009, 09:11:42 AM » |
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Tere khato.n ko padhta ja raha hu.n
Mutawatir muskurata ja raha hu.n
Jo tune meri khatir khoon e dil se likhe
Mein un lafzo.n ko chume ja raha hu.n
Kya koi itna kisi pe marta hai?
Ye sochun to main ghabra ja raha hu.n
Wo meri dhadkano ko chu raha hai
Zakhmi ho na jaye darta ja raha hu.n
Raaton ko aur kabhi din main bhi aksar
Usi ke khaab daikha ja raha hu.n
Satata hai mujhe wo akhri pehro.n
Main un lutfo mai duba ja raha hu.n
Mana leta hu.n usko jo rooth ke aslam
Qareeb utna main hota ja raha hu.n Nice one Aslam Ji |
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Rajesh Harish
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«Reply #11 on: July 10, 2009, 09:12:19 AM » |
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Good response Javed Ji
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aaina
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«Reply #13 on: July 10, 2009, 04:27:32 PM » |
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Fantastic.. Bahoot bahoot Khoob Aslam ji.. Bahoot hi behtareen Qalam pesh kiya hai.. Bahoot Khoob!
[thnxxx so much sophi ji[/b] |
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