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KOYAL46
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Teri Nazar...Meri Nazar
Takra he gayee teri nazar se meri nazar
Kaise kitna beeta samay hui naa khabar
Kaunsi manzil k hum-dono they hum-safar
Bada rangeen ho gaya tha hamaara ye safar
Bichhad gaye raah mai hum-dono kyu magar
Baichain ho k Bhatakne lage hum dagar-dager
Likha tha naseeb mai tere aur mere yahi agar
Tou bataa tu kyu mili Teri nazar se Meri nazar
Ek din Takra he gayee teri nazar se meri nazar
Kaise kitna beeta samay hui naa hamei khabar
-koyal-
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«Reply #1 on: February 09, 2010, 10:41:25 AM » |
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Koyal ji ab aap ek nai style ki poems likh rahi hai. Ye aapki vast creativity ka ek achha symbol hai. "Meri Pyal" ki tarah ye ghazal rupi rachna bhi bahut achhi lagi.
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«Reply #2 on: February 09, 2010, 11:11:31 AM » |
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KYA BAAT HAI KOYAL JI......
TERI NAZAR--MERI NAZAR MILNE KA HUA THA YE ASAR
NIKAL PADE THE DONO PYAR KI RAHA PAR
CHALTE CHALTE KISKO THI KHABAR
BICHAD JAAYENGE HUM DONO KI ALAG HOGI DAGAR..
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«Reply #3 on: February 09, 2010, 01:06:21 PM » |
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Waah Bahoot Bahoot Khoob Koyal.. I really appreciate your effort. This is really beautiful..
Aur aage bhi yuhin likhte rehna...
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«Reply #4 on: February 09, 2010, 01:52:32 PM » |
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Bahut Khoob Koyal..
Bahut Achi Koshish Ki Hai Aapne 
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«Reply #5 on: February 09, 2010, 01:55:46 PM » |
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Bahut Khub Koyal JI
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KOYAL46
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«Reply #6 on: February 09, 2010, 02:04:11 PM » |
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Riyaz-bhai aapki samiksha se mann prasann ho jaata hai.... Tariff k liye dhanaywaad....  Koyal ji ab aap ek nai style ki poems likh rahi hai. Ye aapki vast creativity ka ek achha symbol hai. "Meri Pyal" ki tarah ye ghazal rupi rachna bhi bahut achhi lagi.
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KOYAL46
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«Reply #7 on: February 09, 2010, 02:06:21 PM » |
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Baat kuchh nahi hai Caraji... aapki hazirjwabi k kaayal hai hum... KYA BAAT HAI KOYAL JI......
TERI NAZAR--MERI NAZAR MILNE KA HUA THA YE ASAR
NIKAL PADE THE DONO PYAR KI RAHA PAR
CHALTE CHALTE KISKO THI KHABAR
BICHAD JAAYENGE HUM DONO KI ALAG HOGI DAGAR..
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«Reply #8 on: February 09, 2010, 02:08:59 PM » |
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Aapke ye peeth thap-thapaate huye shabd meri taakat ban jaate hain Thanks a lot for appriciation... Waah Bahoot Bahoot Khoob Koyal.. I really appreciate your effort. This is really beautiful..
Aur aage bhi yuhin likhte rehna...
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«Reply #9 on: February 09, 2010, 02:10:31 PM » |
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KOYAL46
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«Reply #10 on: February 09, 2010, 02:11:24 PM » |
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Thanks Rishi-bhai.... Bahut Khub Koyal JI
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«Reply #11 on: February 09, 2010, 07:47:05 PM » |
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Teri Nazar...Meri Nazar
Takra he gayee teri nazar se meri nazar
Kaise kitna beeta samay hui naa khabar
Kaunsi manzil k hum-dono they hum-safar
Bada rangeen ho gaya tha hamaara ye safar
Bichhad gaye raah mai hum-dono kyu magar
Baichain ho k Bhatakne lage hum dagar-dager
Likha tha naseeb mai tere aur mere yahi agar
Tou bataa tu kyu mili Teri nazar se Meri nazar
Ek din Takra he gayee teri nazar se meri nazar
Kaise kitna beeta samay hui naa hamei khabar
-koyal-
Koyal ji bahut khoob!..kuchh main bhi koshish karta hun...
Nazar nazar ki baat hai nazar hui nazar-nazar,
Ye dil kiya use nazar jo mil gai nazar nazar. |
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jamshed.khan
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«Reply #12 on: February 09, 2010, 10:04:48 PM » |
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hi koyal your creation is not a tipical meaningfull urdu sayeri its like abollywood song .as a true friend i suggest you creat a meaningfull urdu poetry and i know you can do it.so koyel i hope you take positive my suggesion and i promis i always give reply for your every poetry. so take care
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malli
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«Reply #13 on: February 10, 2010, 02:58:51 AM » |
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Teri Nazar...Meri Nazar
Takra he gayee teri nazar se meri nazar
Kaise kitna beeta samay hui naa khabar
Kaunsi manzil k hum-dono they hum-safar
Bada rangeen ho gaya tha hamaara ye safar
Bichhad gaye raah mai hum-dono kyu magar
Baichain ho k Bhatakne lage hum dagar-dager
Likha tha naseeb mai tere aur mere yahi agar
Tou bataa tu kyu mili Teri nazar se Meri nazar
Ek din Takra he gayee teri nazar se meri nazar
Kaise kitna beeta samay hui naa hamei khabar
-koyal-
Bahut accha likha hai aapne Koyal. Nice feelings  |
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KOYAL46
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«Reply #14 on: February 10, 2010, 10:35:02 AM » |
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Thanks a lot Sihab-bhai.... Waqai Mein Bahut Achhey Se Lafzon Ko Sajhaye Hain Aapne
Bahut Pyara Likha Hai Koyal Sis....
Khush Rahiye
~Shihab~
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