Tum Paas Aao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!...Shireen Hakani

by Shireen Hakani on May 15, 2013, 06:25:43 PM
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Tum Paas Aao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN,
Zara Muskuraao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Hai BarsoN Ki Tamanna Meri Aye Jaan,
Saath Gungunaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Chale Aao Meri Zindagi Ki Mehfil MeiN,
Dil Se Dil Milaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Chupaa Lo Mujh Ko Apni BaahoN MeiN,
Gale Se Lagaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Mujhe Chum Lene Do Peshaani Tumhari,
PalkeiN Jhukaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Taras RaheN HaiN Mere Khwaab Sabhi,
Inhe Tum Sajaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Thaam Lo Haath Mera Umar Bhar Ke Liye,
Apna Tum Banaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Shireen Hakani
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«Reply #1 on: May 15, 2013, 06:33:25 PM »
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Quote from: Shireen Hakani on May 15, 2013, 06:25:43 PM
Tum Paas Aao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN,
Zara Muskuraao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Hai BarsoN Ki Tamanna Meri Aye Jaan,
Saath Gungunaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Chale Aao Meri Zindagi Ki Mehfil MeiN,
Dil Se Dil Milaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Chupaa Lo Mujh Ko Apni BaahoN MeiN,
Gale Se Lagaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Mujhe Chum Lene Do Peshaani Tumhari,
PalkeiN Jhukaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Taras RaheN HaiN Mere Khwaab Sabhi,
Inhe Tum Sajaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Thaam Lo Haath Mera Umar Bhar Ke Liye,
Apna Tum Banaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Shireen Hakani


ma'am

this is more or less followed to the pattern of  MR.sudhir ashq
therefore you should give credit as tthaks to MR.SUDHIR as i hope
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«Reply #2 on: May 15, 2013, 06:59:06 PM »
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Quote from: marhoom bahayaat on May 15, 2013, 06:33:25 PM

ma'am

this is more or less followed to the pattern of  MR.sudhir ashq
therefore you should give credit as tthaks to MR.SUDHIR as i hope

I have discussed this with him and with his permission only I have used this radeef. Before posting here; I have shown this poetry to him. I didn't think that i have to mention it over here. Also I would like to add that Radeef & kafiyas can be used by anyone...Anyone can use mine and I can use theirs. One can't call it as plagiarism. I hope i cleared your doubt!
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«Reply #3 on: May 15, 2013, 07:04:03 PM »
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Quote from: Shireen Hakani on May 15, 2013, 06:59:06 PM
I have discussed this with him and with his permission only I have used this radeef. Before posting here; I have shown this poetry to him. I didn't think that i have to mention it over here. Also I would like to add that Radeef & kafiyas can be used by anyone...Anyone can use mine and I can use theirs. One can't call it as plagiarism. I hope i cleared your doubt!

gr888 ,ma'am then i will go for it next i will take yours with your kind permission now it is easy for me because i am finding difficulty to find suitable radeef and kafia for a nice composition. any ways apart from joke you composition is nice
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«Reply #4 on: May 15, 2013, 07:11:49 PM »
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Quote from: marhoom bahayaat on May 15, 2013, 07:04:03 PM
gr888 ,ma'am then i will go for it next i will take yours with your kind permission now it is easy for me because i am finding difficulty to find suitable radeef and kafia for a nice composition. any ways apart from joke you composition is nice



You know what I think about you?....U like insulting people upfront..I suppose that pleases you to the core! Earlier i had kept quiet, but not anymore. You could have PMed me, but NO...!! How could you miss a chance to insult someone out in front of everyone..!! I should say...Great Going Mr. Marhoom Bahayat! It's not only me, i have seen you do this to others also...

I told sudhir jee i will write a reply to his ghazal; and I did it with his permission. My post is a reply to his composition..we decided to use same radeef...!!  What's ur problem?Huh?


One More Thing...There's a difference between being Righteous And Vicious...FYI
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«Reply #5 on: May 15, 2013, 07:22:07 PM »
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Quote from: Shireen Hakani on May 15, 2013, 07:11:49 PM
You know what I think about you?....U like insulting people upfront..I suppose that pleases you to the core! Earlier i had kept quiet, but not anymore. You could have PMed me, but NO...!! How could you miss a chance to insult someone out in front of everyone..!! I should say...Great Going Mr. Marhoom Bahayat! It's not only me, i have seen you do this to others also...

I had told sudhir jee i will write a reply to his ghazal; and I did it with his permission. My post is a reply to his composition..we decided to use same radeef...!!  What's ur problem?Huh???

keep writing ma'am don't dis heart yourself.i don't insult anyone just pointing out the related work my comments is never be a personal attack. it is sounding gr888 that you have started  reacting so carry on now i will be more alert to listen and learn from you ma'am and remember any body comments on you poem sometimes you need to clarify also but i always noticed clarification from your end is a far away story. you don't even give thank to the reader who appreciate your poem.

well i am not your enemy , positive reaction is appreciated but you react  negatively shall show your lankness in dealing in the forum.
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«Reply #6 on: May 15, 2013, 07:30:44 PM »
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Quote from: marhoom bahayaat on May 15, 2013, 07:22:07 PM
keep writing ma'am don't dis heart yourself.i don't insult anyone just pointing out the related work my comments is never be a personal attack. it is sounding gr888 that you have started  reacting so carry on now i will be more alert to listen and learn from you ma'am and remember any body comments on yue poem sometimes you need to clarify also but i always noticed clarifiacation from your end is a far away story. you don't even gine thank to the reader who appreciate your poem.

well i am not your enemy , positive reaction is appreciated but you react  negatively shall show your lankness in dealing in the forum.

Oh Yeah...? Why didn't you show ur tactfulness and good manners by sending me a PM? This shows how and what you think of others. You wanted a scene and u got one..!! YOU DO LIKE INSULTING PEOPLE..!! AND THAT'S UR VICIOUSNESS..!! U better don't practice that on me..!! Becz I'm not going to take it..!!

And yes i Don't thank each and every one becz it takes my post right at the top of the forum..And i don't like it..!! And it's my personal choice...if i don't thank you, u don't comment. I've never commented on anyone's post expecting them to thank me.
 
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«Reply #7 on: May 15, 2013, 07:35:13 PM »
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Oh Yeah...? Why didn't you show ur tactfulness and good manners by sending me a PM? This shows how and what you think of others. You wanted a scene and u got one..!! YOU DO LIKE INSULTING PEOPLE..!! AND THAT'S UR VICIOUSNESS..!! U better don't practice that on me..!! Becz I'm not going to take it..!!

And yes i Don't thank each and every one becz it takes my post right at the top of the forum..And i don't like it..!! And it's my personal choice...if i don't thank you, u don't comment. I've never commented on anyone's post expecting them to thank me.
 


please don't be vociferous ma'am ,i am not a cruel person . you should accept the fact with cool mind

 
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«Reply #8 on: May 15, 2013, 07:52:02 PM »
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bahut achcha ghazal kahi hai shireen ji aapne. mujhe pasand aayi. dheron daad.
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«Reply #9 on: May 15, 2013, 07:55:39 PM »
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Quote from: marhoom bahayaat on May 15, 2013, 07:35:13 PM

please don't be vociferous ma'am ,i am not a cruel person . you should accept the fact with cool mind

  
There's a difference between being Righteous and Vicious.I hope you understand the difference someday.
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«Reply #10 on: May 15, 2013, 08:09:25 PM »
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Shireen Sahibaa Aadaab...!


Bahut khoob jee bahut khoob badi achchi kalaam kahi hai aapne, awwal toH aik umdaa kavish hai aur uspar aik se badhkar aik khayaal bahut khoob... Usual Smile

Humari dheroN dili daad O mubbarakbad kabul kijiye... Badi pyaari aur umdaa kalaam huyi hai... Usual Smile

Likhate rahiye... Shaad O aabaad rahiye...
Khuda Hafez... Usual Smile
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«Reply #11 on: May 15, 2013, 08:40:07 PM »
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Khoobsurat Peshkash Shireen Ji. : Clapping Smiley


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«Reply #12 on: May 15, 2013, 08:54:47 PM »
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Quote from: Shireen Hakani on May 15, 2013, 06:25:43 PM
Tum Paas Aao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN,
Zara Muskuraao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Hai BarsoN Ki Tamanna Meri Aye Jaan,
Saath Gungunaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Chale Aao Meri Zindagi Ki Mehfil MeiN,
Dil Se Dil Milaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Chupaa Lo Mujh Ko Apni BaahoN MeiN,
Gale Se Lagaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Mujhe Chum Lene Do Peshaani Tumhari,
PalkeiN Jhukaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Taras RaheN HaiN Mere Khwaab Sabhi,
Inhe Tum Sajaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Thaam Lo Haath Mera Umar Bhar Ke Liye,
Apna Tum Banaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Shireen Hakani


Wah,Wah,Wah Shireenji,
Very nice.You have completed ur promise to me.You have given a nice reply to my ghazal.Perheps,it is more influencial and emotional than that,I have posted some days ago.Please accept my good wishes.

One think more I have to clear to all users of yoindia,especially to Mr. Marhoomji ,That miss. Shireenji have taken my prior concent to use this radeef.
It is undoubtly a great pleasure to me that other user want to use my pattern.I have no objection for this concern.One think more I want to declare that Any Kafia or radeef,I use in my ghazal,is not my personal property.
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«Reply #13 on: May 15, 2013, 08:55:35 PM »
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Quote from: Shireen Hakani on May 15, 2013, 06:25:43 PM
Tum Paas Aao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN,
Zara Muskuraao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Hai BarsoN Ki Tamanna Meri Aye Jaan,
Saath Gungunaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Chale Aao Meri Zindagi Ki Mehfil MeiN,
Dil Se Dil Milaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Chupaa Lo Mujh Ko Apni BaahoN MeiN,
Gale Se Lagaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Mujhe Chum Lene Do Peshaani Tumhari,
PalkeiN Jhukaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Taras RaheN HaiN Mere Khwaab Sabhi,
Inhe Tum Sajaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Thaam Lo Haath Mera Umar Bhar Ke Liye,
Apna Tum Banaao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

Shireen Hakani


Wah,Wah,Wah Shireenji,
Very nice.You have completed ur promise to me.You have given a nice reply to my ghazal.Perheps,it is more influencial and emotional than that,I have posted some days ago.Please accept my good wishes.

One think more I have to clear to all users of yoindia,especially to Mr. Marhoomji ,That miss. Shireenji have taken my prior concent to use this radeef.
It is undoubtly a great pleasure to me that other user want to use my pattern.I have no objection for this concern.One think more I want to declare that Any Kafia or radeef,I use in my ghazal,is not my personal property.
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«Reply #14 on: May 15, 2013, 09:03:12 PM »
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Tum Paas Aao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN,
Zara Muskuraao ToH Ghazal Keh DooN..!!

very very nice shireen ji,
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