ai falak yeh batla de kya quSoor tha mera ?

by mistufer on June 02, 2009, 04:11:23 PM
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apni phooTee qismet se ro ke boli ik bewah
Kya Khata huuwee mujhse jo bana diya vidhwa

maaNg ka sindoor ujRa khali hai kalayee bhee
ab tou bus muqaddar meN hai sufaid ik saRee

haath meN nah chooRee hai aur nah paaoN meN payal
miT gaya mera har sukh ho gaya hai dil ghayal

ab kahaN raha bister main hooN aur chaTaayee hai
ghar ka ek kona hi bus meri Khudaiee hai

mujh se har Khushee rooThee runj-o-gham ne ghera hai
kuch nazar nahiN aata har taraf andhera hai

ik siNdoor miTte hi maNg ho gayee soonee
ab Khmosh rahtee hooN pahle thee maiN batoonee

apni apni KhushiyoN meN log choor rahte haiN
ab tou mere apne bhi mujh se door rahte haiN

kitni sadaa-o-beruNg ab meree kahani hai
bus safaid kapRoN meN zindagee bitani hai

deke ranj-e tanhayee umr bhar ka gham bakhsha
ai falak yeh batla dey kya quSoor tha mera

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«Reply #1 on: June 02, 2009, 04:30:33 PM »
Bahut bahut Khoob Nira!!

Kya Kahoon,Kitna Dard Tha Aapki iss Nazm mein..

Aapne Ek Kadwe Sach Ko Alfaazo Mein Bayaan Kiya hai..

Bahut Ache Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
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«Reply #2 on: June 02, 2009, 04:31:38 PM »
apni phooTee qismet se ro ke boli ik bewah
Kya Khata huuwee mujhse jo bana diya vidhwa

maaNg ka sindoor ujRa khali hai kalayee bhee
ab tou bus muqaddar meN hai sufaid ik saRee

haath meN nah chooRee hai aur nah paaoN meN payal
miT gaya mera har sukh ho gaya hai dil ghayal

ab kahaN raha bister main hooN aur chaTaayee hai
ghar ka ek kona hi bus meri Khudaiee hai

mujh se har Khushee rooThee runj-o-gham ne ghera hai
kuch nazar nahiN aata har taraf andhera hai

ik siNdoor miTte hi maNg ho gayee soonee
ab Khmosh rahtee hooN pahle thee maiN batoonee

apni apni KhushiyoN meN log choor rahte haiN
ab tou mere apne bhi mujh se door rahte haiN

kitni sadaa-o-beruNg ab meree kahani hai
bus safaid kapRoN meN zindagee bitani hai

deke ranj-e tanhayee umr bhar ka gham bakhsha
ai falak yeh batla dey kya quSoor tha mera

Nira

Bahut bahut accha likha hai Nira sis.... Bahut dard hai aur sacchayi b.
Very good work Nira sis

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«Reply #3 on: June 02, 2009, 05:18:44 PM »
Bhaut Bahut Bhaut Hi acha Likha Hai apne Mere Pass Alfaz hi nahi hai apki Shan Main Kuch Bolneko Bus itna hi bolunga ki Apki Likhi Poem Hum logo bhi isi hi tarhan Milt Rahegi..
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punam
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«Reply #4 on: June 02, 2009, 05:42:30 PM »
bahut khoob Nira ji...labz to dil ko choo gaye ..
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Sammual
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«Reply #5 on: June 02, 2009, 06:37:16 PM »
Bahut Khoob Nira Ji.Bahut Hi Acha Likha Hai Aapne.
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«Reply #6 on: June 02, 2009, 06:44:49 PM »
 Applause Applause Applause ApplauseWaise toh yeh puri nazm mujhe bahaut pasand ayi lekin kuch lines toh dil ko choo jati thi..Bahaut bahaut khubsoorat aur sach likha hai apne...bas yunhi likte rahiyega!!!
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«Reply #7 on: June 02, 2009, 07:29:29 PM »
Nira Didi.. Aapki har Nazm me Koi Sandesh Chipa hota hai.. Kuch sawalaat hote hain... aur is Rachana Me to Dard Bhare wo Sucche sawal hain.. Jo Beinthehaan dard Bayan kar rahe Hain..!!!

Lajwab Peshkash Hain didi.. Great work & Great Words.. Applause Applause


 Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley


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«Reply #8 on: June 02, 2009, 10:25:44 PM »
Bahut bahut Khoob Nira!!

Kya Kahoon,Kitna Dard Tha Aapki iss Nazm mein..

Aapne Ek Kadwe Sach Ko Alfaazo Mein Bayaan Kiya hai..

Bahut Ache Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley


khwaish ji
sach hi toh hai kuch sachaiyen bahut kadvi hoti hain
aapko nazm pasand aayi aapki shukrguzaar hoon
yunhi saath dete rahiyega.
apna khayal rakhiyega.
nira
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«Reply #9 on: June 02, 2009, 10:26:57 PM »

Bahut bahut accha likha hai Nira sis.... Bahut dard hai aur sacchayi b.
Very good work Nira sis



roja sis aapko pasand aayi nazam
dilse shukriya adaa karti hoon.
nira
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«Reply #10 on: June 02, 2009, 10:28:15 PM »
Bhaut Bahut Bhaut Hi acha Likha Hai apne Mere Pass Alfaz hi nahi hai apki Shan Main Kuch Bolneko Bus itna hi bolunga ki Apki Likhi Poem Hum logo bhi isi hi tarhan Milt Rahegi..

mere bete ko pasand aayi nazm
bara likhna safal hua
khush raho
maa
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«Reply #11 on: June 02, 2009, 10:29:33 PM »
bahut khoob Nira ji...labz to dil ko choo gaye ..

punam ji
aapko yahan dekhkar acha laga
aapko nazm pasand aayi, hausla afzaayi ka shukriya
nira
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«Reply #12 on: June 02, 2009, 10:31:07 PM »
Applause Applause Applause ApplauseWaise toh yeh puri nazm mujhe bahaut pasand ayi lekin kuch lines toh dil ko choo jati thi..Bahaut bahaut khubsoorat aur sach likha hai apne...bas yunhi likte rahiyega!!!

Rahim ji aadaab

aapki saharna ka dilse shukriya adaa karti hoon
yunhi saath yahan dete rahiyega muje acha lagega.
nira
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«Reply #13 on: June 02, 2009, 10:33:32 PM »
Nira Didi.. Aapki har Nazm me Koi Sandesh Chipa hota hai.. Kuch sawalaat hote hain... aur is Rachana Me to Dard Bhare wo Sucche sawal hain.. Jo Beinthehaan dard Bayan kar rahe Hain..!!!

Lajwab Peshkash Hain didi.. Great work & Great Words.. Applause Applause


 Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley


**~** Mann **~**



vickyyyyyyyyy
dard ke kitne rang kitne roop hain
kuch nazaar aate hain kuch deewaron ke piche chhup jate hain
tumhe nazm pasand aayi shukriya bhai
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«Reply #14 on: June 02, 2009, 10:39:01 PM »
Bahut Khoob Nira Ji.Bahut Hi Acha Likha Hai Aapne.

sammual ji
hausla afzaayi ka bahut bahut shukriya
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