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Aapke bina nahi jee paayenge
Dil ka dard kaise mitta paayenge
Aankhon se ashq ki leher bahate rahenge
Aapke yaadon ko hum palkon se sajate rahenge
Dard dil mein dafnaya hai hoton se hanste rahenge
Aapka saath nahi raha phir bhi gum chupate rahenge
Humse ladte ladte aap zindagi se har jaaoge
Nahi chain nahi khushi zindagi se paaoge
Kaha tha aapne aakhiri saason tak saath hai humara
Aaj tanha hun mein dekh raha hai saara zamana
Saja ke aapne ghar ashqon mein dube hue hun
Aapki yaaden dil me.n lekar zindagi se jaa rahi hun
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«Reply #1 on: August 12, 2008, 09:56:40 AM » |
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Humse ladte ladte aap zindagi se har jaaoge
Nahi chain nahi khushi zindagi se paaoge
Kaha tha aapne aakhiri saason tak saath hai humara
Aaj tanha hun mein dekh raha hai saara zamana
Saja ke aapne ghar ashqon mein dube hue hun
Aapki yaaden dil me.n lekar zindagi se jaa rahi hun
aap ka Laikha Hua Ye Kalaam bahot Khoob Hai..
Is k Jo Alfaaz aapne Liye Hai saaf va suffaf Hai..aur Koi Kalaam Likhna Kitna Mushkil Hota Hai Main Jaanta Hun..Mujse To Chaar Line bhi badi mushkil se likh paata hun..
Kaafi Dard bhi Mehsoos Karwaya Hai Kalaam Me..aur Har Sher k Ma'na Bhi aasani se Samaz me aa jata Hai..Badhiya. |
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«Reply #2 on: August 12, 2008, 11:22:11 AM » |
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Aapke bina nahi jee paayenge
Dil ka dard kaise mitta paayenge  VERY NICE CREATION, HONEY DI.... KEEP GOING.... BY. K.SHAEL
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honeyrose
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«Reply #3 on: August 12, 2008, 11:59:56 AM » |
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aap ka Laikha Hua Ye Kalaam bahot Khoob Hai..
Is k Jo Alfaaz aapne Liye Hai saaf va suffaf Hai..aur Koi Kalaam Likhna Kitna Mushkil Hota Hai Main Jaanta Hun..Mujse To Chaar Line bhi badi mushkil se likh paata hun..
Kaafi Dard bhi Mehsoos Karwaya Hai Kalaam Me..aur Har Sher k Ma'na Bhi aasani se Samaz me aa jata Hai..Badhiya.
Shukriya Muhammed ji joh aapne mera kalaam pasand kiya..  Aapke bina nahi jee paayenge
Dil ka dard kaise mitta paayenge VERY NICE CREATION, HONEY DI.... KEEP GOING.... BY. K.SHAEL
Shukriya shally sis.. |
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«Reply #4 on: August 12, 2008, 12:40:59 PM » |
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Aapke bina nahi jee paayenge
Dil ka dard kaise mitta paayenge
Aankhon se ashq ki leher bahate rahenge
Aapke yaadon ko hum palkon se sajate rahenge
Dard dil mein dafnaya hai hoton se hanste rahenge
Aapka saath nahi raha phir bhi gum chupate rahenge
Humse ladte ladte aap zindagi se har jaaoge
Nahi chain nahi khushi zindagi se paaoge
Kaha tha aapne aakhiri saason tak saath hai humara
Aaj tanha hun mein dekh raha hai saara zamana
Saja ke aapne ghar ashqon mein dube hue hun
Aapki yaaden dil me.n lekar zindagi se jaa rahi hun
really nice jaya di
bahut accha likha hai aapne...  |
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honeyrose
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«Reply #5 on: August 12, 2008, 01:42:08 PM » |
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Shukriya diya dear...
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«Reply #6 on: August 12, 2008, 02:03:29 PM » |
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honeyrose
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«Reply #7 on: August 12, 2008, 02:30:41 PM » |
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.. Shukriya aapka Sanjeev ji..joh aapne mera likha pasand kiya.. |
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«Reply #8 on: August 12, 2008, 03:01:40 PM » |
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woooow Honey dear bahut badiya likha hai tumne... wah wah..
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«Reply #9 on: August 12, 2008, 04:22:09 PM » |
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boht khoob likha hai honey rose ji
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honeyrose
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«Reply #11 on: August 12, 2008, 05:54:50 PM » |
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honeyrose ji "shayri-e-dard" mein aap ka ye kalaam "aapke bina nahi jee paayenge" bohot pasand aaya, isi tarah likhte rahiye. ..
Shukriya Sayyid ji..aapne ye topic pasand kiya..
woooow Honey dear bahut badiya likha hai tumne... wah wah..
Thanks Roja dear bohat bohat shukriya ...boht khoob likha hai honey rose ji
Thanks goldy ji... |
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«Reply #12 on: August 25, 2008, 06:53:27 PM » |
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Hothon par muskurate hue dil se jaal rahe hain
Aankhon se ashq bahaye hum tumen doondte hain
Har taraf khushiyan hai magar tumari kami si hain
Zindagi ke zayake kho gaye hain kahin tumare bina
Rokh lo mere aansu kahin bhar na jaaye zakhm purana
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«Reply #13 on: August 25, 2008, 07:11:37 PM » |
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nice honey
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honeyrose
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«Reply #14 on: August 25, 2008, 07:15:10 PM » |
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Thank you Pooja dear..
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on eTI community..
