rashmisangeeta
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zindgaani be asar si ho gaii hai har kahaani be asar si ho gaii hai
har ghadDi kayon aajmaate o sakha tum aajmaanii be asar si ho gaii hai
baantne chaahe tere jo dard hum dum meharbaani be asar si ho gaii hai
kyon na mujh ko samajh paate sahajta se akaldaani be asar si ho gaii hai
lipat jaauN dard se main jakham kha looN dard-daani be asar si ho gaii hai
aarzoo thi do kadam mil ke chalenge arazdaani be asar si ho gaii hai
tum n "rashmi" ko kabhi pahchhaan paaye har viyaani be asar si ho gaii hai
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«Reply #1 on: May 21, 2013, 08:30:41 PM » |
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zindgaani be asar si ho gaii hai har kahaani be asar si ho gaii hai
har ghadDi kayon aajmaate o sakha tum aajmaanii be asar si ho gaii hai
baantne chaahe tere jo dard hum dum meharbaani be asar si ho gaii hai
kyon na mujh ko samajh paate sahajta se akaldaani be asar si ho gaii hai
lipat jaauN dard se main jakham kha looN dard-daani be asar si ho gaii hai
aarzoo thi do kadam mil ke chalenge arazdaani be asar si ho gaii hai
tum n "rashmi" ko kabhi pahchhaan paaye har viyaani be asar si ho gaii hai
verii gud-RS
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«Reply #2 on: May 21, 2013, 10:26:36 PM » |
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bahut bahut khoob...
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Advo.RavinderaRavi
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«Reply #3 on: May 21, 2013, 10:29:30 PM » |
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Bahut Khoob Likha Apne.
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«Reply #4 on: May 22, 2013, 12:29:12 AM » |
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zindgaani be asar si ho gaii hai har kahaani be asar si ho gaii hai
har ghadDi kayon aajmaate o sakha tum aajmaanii be asar si ho gaii hai
baantne chaahe tere jo dard hum dum meharbaani be asar si ho gaii hai
kyon na mujh ko samajh paate sahajta se akaldaani be asar si ho gaii hai
lipat jaauN dard se main jakham kha looN dard-daani be asar si ho gaii hai
aarzoo thi do kadam mil ke chalenge arazdaani be asar si ho gaii hai
tum n "rashmi" ko kabhi pahchhaan paaye har viyaani be asar si ho gaii hai
V. Nice rashmi jee..
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«Reply #5 on: May 22, 2013, 12:51:08 AM » |
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rashmisangeeta
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«Reply #6 on: May 22, 2013, 02:15:11 AM » |
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verii gud-RS
ji behad shukarguzar hoon aapne saath diya
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rashmisangeeta
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«Reply #7 on: May 22, 2013, 02:16:37 AM » |
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bahut bahut khoob...
ji shukriya aqsh ji aise hi housle badate rahein
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«Reply #8 on: May 22, 2013, 02:23:56 AM » |
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kaafi interesting sa tareeka laga aapka mujhe khaas taur se shabdoN ka chayan, kuch alag hi andaaz ka tha, ahchi kosish rahi, umeed karta hun aapki kalam se aur padhne ko milegaa...!!
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«Reply #9 on: May 22, 2013, 02:50:34 AM » |
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zindgaani be asar si ho gaii hai har kahaani be asar si ho gaii hai
har ghadDi kayon aajmaate o sakha tum aajmaanii be asar si ho gaii hai
baantne chaahe tere jo dard hum dum meharbaani be asar si ho gaii hai
kyon na mujh ko samajh paate sahajta se akaldaani be asar si ho gaii hai
lipat jaauN dard se main jakham kha looN dard-daani be asar si ho gaii hai
aarzoo thi do kadam mil ke chalenge arazdaani be asar si ho gaii hai
tum n "rashmi" ko kabhi pahchhaan paaye har viyaani be asar si ho gaii hai
Beutiful lines
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«Reply #10 on: May 22, 2013, 12:59:37 PM » |
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bahut khoob
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«Reply #11 on: May 22, 2013, 01:01:38 PM » |
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bohut khub rashmi ji very nice keep writing and welcome
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«Reply #12 on: May 22, 2013, 05:56:08 PM » |
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Bahut Khoob Likha Apne.
shukriya ravindr ji bahut khushi hui aap ne humein honsla diya
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«Reply #13 on: May 23, 2013, 06:26:12 PM » |
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V. Nice rashmi jee.. [/quote ji shukriya aapka tah-e-dil se aap ne humeiN is duniya mein kaboola ye humare liye gourab ki baat hai
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rashmisangeeta
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«Reply #14 on: May 25, 2013, 04:23:45 PM » |
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shukriya sudhir ji aise hi nimat badate rahein
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