Beshumar pyaar kiya!!

its my first time here & my first sher...so plz let me know how it is..thx

jabh jabh chaha tune dil se kehla
ilzam aur shaq kiya
na kabhi qadr aur na hi aitbaar kiya
pir bhi sehe tere har sitam
aur tuje beshumar pyaar kiya!

one more from me:

hamesha shaq kiya
kabhi na sacha pyaar kiya
choro yaar bahane bana na
tera kabh tha sacha irada muje pana!!