Gaaz gire ya raaz khule hur.....

by Prateek Mardia on April 22, 2008, 03:07:17 AM
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«Reply #15 on: June 02, 2008, 08:04:06 PM »
celm
Quote from: Celmira on June 02, 2008, 07:34:43 PM
Bohot Khoob Prateek Ji, Pooja and S.Naami !
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celmira ji-dhanyavaad aapne padha aur saraaha.

Quote from: khwaish on June 02, 2008, 07:29:30 PM
Bahut Bahut Khoob Prateek ji..hamesha ki tarah..aapki kavita padhkar anand sa aata hai..bahut acha likha hai aapne..khaas kar yeh line bahut khoobsurat likhi hai...

Dard utha seene mein aisa
Moti bante hein akshar
Khoon baha hein armaano ka
Kya khoob saje tere khanjar

  Applause Applause Applause


khwaish ji-aapki daad mil jaati to hawa mein udane lagta hu mein..jaise surya deepak ka hausla badha raha ho..shukriya.
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«Reply #16 on: June 02, 2008, 08:19:40 PM »
Quote from: Pooja on June 02, 2008, 07:59:47 PM
wah kaya baat hai.. bahoot khoob Prateek ji....

Her baat per mujhko nasamjh thahraya hai
Phir kaise apne khayalo ko  main lubo per laau
Dil mai rahta hai khayal her pal tera he
Per samne dekh tujhe, apni haya main apne se he simat jaau

Awaz hu main magar sawar tum bin adhura hai
Do jo sath ab, tabhi yah janam poora hai


wah pooja ji-aapki gati sadev superfast chalti he,kub sikhayengi?(gyaan baatne se bhadta he)

ek janam ka saath bhee koi saath he
mrityu ki yeh zindgi ko maat he
jodna he rooh se rooh ki jaron ko
khuda bhee kahe-kya baat he-kya baat he!

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«Reply #17 on: June 02, 2008, 08:28:56 PM »
Dil mai har dum, wo samaye hue hai
Her roop apna dikhaye hue hai
Parra kuch aor najar mai wo aa gaye
Khayal phir mere shabdo mai sama gaye

Mana gyan badta hai sabko sikhla kar
Uske yah roop kaise dikhau, chahne per bhi chah kar
Khayal hai mere, mujh main yah sab baste hai
Kabhi khumar, kabhi dard, kabhi juda se, bewafa se mujh mai tadpate hai!!!!
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«Reply #18 on: June 02, 2008, 08:31:20 PM »
Quote from: Prateek Mardia on June 02, 2008, 08:04:06 PM
celm
khwaish ji-aapki daad mil jaati to hawa mein udane lagta hu mein..jaise surya deepak ka hausla badha raha ho..shukriya.


prateekji..aap ne bahut kuch keh diya..jab ki sach to yeh hai ki hum khud aap se seekhte hai..bahut bahut shukriya uss tareef ki,jiske main laayak nahi...bahut khoob prateekji aur pooja..

Rehne de aasman, zameen ki talaash kar
sab kuch yehi hai,
naa kahin aur kuch talaash kar....

mohabbat mar chuki hai,
aaj ke iss daur mein "KHWAISH"
Phir bhi himmat na haar,
kahin to waffa Zinda hogi aaj bhi
bas uss wafaa bhari nazar ki talaash kar....

har khwaish mukamal ho jaati,
to jeene ka kya mazaa??
jeene ke liye,
bas ek kami ki talaash kar...

Chehre pe muskaan saja kar,
andar hi andar ro leta hai insaan,
jo tere aansuo ki kadar kar sake,
aise koi shaks ki talaash kar....
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«Reply #19 on: June 02, 2008, 08:38:43 PM »
wah kaya baat hai khwaish ji... bahoot khoob.....yah lines dil ko kahi ched gai hai...

Chehre pe muskaan saja kar,
andar hi andar ro leta hai insaan,
jo tere aansuo ki kadar kar sake,
aise koi shaks ki talaash kar....
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«Reply #20 on: June 02, 2008, 08:45:10 PM »
I am not sure, if these lines make any sense for anyone... just a reply after reading khawaish's poem!!
Adat se majboor, jo man mai ayya ek saans mai likh diya!!

Kisi ki kaya talash, khud ko bhool chuki hu
Apne he ansuo main, apne ansoo bhool chuki hu
Kisi ki banu main kaise, khud ki jab main na ban paai
Ek insaan ke dard main, insaaniyat bhool chuki hu

Muhobbat se lagta hai dar, khud per vishwaas nahi hai
Itne diye imteehan, ke khud ka rasta bhool chuki hu
Kis ke liye tlaashu, her talaash ab adhuri
Zindagi ki chaht main, ajj Pooja ko maar chuki hu!!
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«Reply #21 on: June 02, 2008, 09:03:59 PM »
khud ko bhool kar jee na paaoge,
uss shaks ki yaad mein khud ko tadpaoge...

woh ek guzra kal tha jo beet gaya,
guzre hue palo ko yaad kar,
ek kadam bhi na aage chal paaoge....

na do khud ko yuh saza
kisi aur ki bewafai ke sadke,
apne aansuo ko apni hi aankhon mein qaid karna seekhlo "pooja"
phir dekhna gham mein bhi muskuraoge...

khud ko bhool kar jee naa paaoge,
uss shaks ki yaad mein khud ko tadpaaoge...
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«Reply #22 on: June 02, 2008, 09:12:59 PM »
Uski tadap mai tadapati hu to wo apna sa lagta hai
Beeta waqat us waqat, ek sapna sa lagta hai
Mana thahar gai hai yah zindagi meri
Per bin uske, nahi hai koi bhi zindagi meri

Bin uske chalu kis taraf, jaana hai mujhe kaha
Bin uske nahi hai mera koi thikana yaha
Apni is saza main he maza mujhko hai ane laga
Usse mili doorio ka fasla ghataane laga

Khud ko bhoola kar jee lu, usko bhoola kar na jee payegi
Such kahti hu dost, yah Pooja, jalad he mer jayegi...............
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«Reply #23 on: June 02, 2008, 09:15:13 PM »
Quote from: Pooja on June 02, 2008, 08:28:56 PM
Dil mai har dum, wo samaye hue hai
Her roop apna dikhaye hue hai
Parra kuch aor najar mai wo aa gaye
Khayal phir mere shabdo mai sama gaye

Mana gyan badta hai sabko sikhla kar
Uske yah roop kaise dikhau, chahne per bhi chah kar
Khayal hai mere, mujh main yah sab baste hai
Kabhi khumar, kabhi dard, kabhi juda se, bewafa se mujh mai tadpate hai!!!!


bahut khoob pooja ji.

gila ub iska mujhko nahi-ke mila nahi tera pyaar
sakoon kuch khaas de gayi -tu deke dard hazaar
kya hua jo likh na paaya main shringaar aur khumaar
teri aarzo he bun gayi meri kalam ka aadhaar
aur berukhi ne teri kar diya-mujhme geeton ka sanchaar
ek choti si khwaaish kya tooti-bun gaya kalamkaar!

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«Reply #24 on: June 02, 2008, 09:20:29 PM »
Meri kalam ko na rok dost, yah pahle se he gunehgaar hai
Shabdo meri per na laga rok, yah pahle se he jaar jaar hai
Hui kaya berukhi mujhse, mere ahsaas, tere ahsaas se anjaan hai
Hui agar mujhse koi khata, dost yah pooja uske liye sharmsaar hai!!
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«Reply #25 on: June 02, 2008, 09:24:33 PM »
Quote from: khwaish on June 02, 2008, 08:31:20 PM
prateekji..aap ne bahut kuch keh diya..jab ki sach to yeh hai ki hum khud aap se seekhte hai..bahut bahut shukriya uss tareef ki,jiske main laayak nahi...bahut khoob prateekji aur pooja..

Rehne de aasman, zameen ki talaash kar
sab kuch yehi hai,
naa kahin aur kuch talaash kar....

mohabbat mar chuki hai,
aaj ke iss daur mein "KHWAISH"
Phir bhi himmat na haar,
kahin to waffa Zinda hogi aaj bhi
bas uss wafaa bhari nazar ki talaash kar....

har khwaish mukambal ho jaati,
to jeene ka kya mazaa??
jeene ke liye,
bas ek kami ki talaash kar...

Chehre pe muskaan saja kar,
andar hi andar ro leta hai insaan,
jo tere aansuo ki kadar kar sake,
aise koi shaks ki talaash kar....



kya baat he khwaish ji-kya baat he!

aansu jub jub aasmaan ne tapkaye he
is dhara ne khule dil se unhe dabaaye he
'khwaish' aasmaan ki karu ya talashu main zameen
haal sabka ek sa he-bandon ne samjhaaye he !

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«Reply #26 on: June 02, 2008, 09:27:52 PM »
Quote from: Pooja on June 02, 2008, 09:20:29 PM
Shabdo meri per na laga rok, yah pahle se he jaar jaar hai


behad sundar pankti he yeh..bahut khoob pooja ji.

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«Reply #27 on: June 02, 2008, 09:35:33 PM »
Pooja, Prateek, Khwaish

Excellent work by all of you Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #28 on: June 02, 2008, 09:40:11 PM »
Quote from: Rajbir on June 02, 2008, 09:35:33 PM
Pooja, Prateek, Khwaish

Excellent work by all of you Applause Applause Applause

dhanyawaad rajbir ji.
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«Reply #29 on: June 02, 2008, 10:08:08 PM »
Quote from: Rajbir on June 02, 2008, 09:35:33 PM
Pooja, Prateek, Khwaish

Excellent work by all of you Applause Applause Applause

shukaria Veer ji, main to sirf Prateek ji aor khwaish ji ki shayri pard kar jawab de rahi hu.. kamal to in dono ki shayri ka hai!!
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