Gum dekhe hai...

by brokenbyluv on February 26, 2010, 03:25:23 PM
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Iss chhoti si umar mein bahut se mausam dekhe hai,
kabhi khushi bepanah tou kabhi dard bhare gum dekhe hai,

pal mein jism se juda hoti ruho k maatam dekhe hai,
kabhi khushi bepanah tou kabhi dard bhare gum dekhe hai,

Barasti hui bundo mein bhi kayi registan nam dekhe hai,
kabhi khushi bepanah tou kabhi dard bhare gum dekhe hai,

APNO K SAAYE MEIN DIL KO DEHELA DENE WALE ZULM-O-SITAM DEKHE HAI,
kabhi khushi bepanah tou kabhi dard bhare gum dekhe hai......
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«Reply #1 on: February 26, 2010, 03:28:01 PM »
Bahut Bahut Khoob Geetji.. Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley

Bahut Ache Jazbaat!!! Thumbs UP
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«Reply #2 on: February 26, 2010, 03:28:56 PM »
thnx alot khwaish ji...
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Talat
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«Reply #3 on: February 26, 2010, 03:42:38 PM »
Achcha likha hai....Bohot Khoob BBL ji
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«Reply #4 on: February 26, 2010, 03:51:56 PM »
thnx alot celmira ji...
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«Reply #5 on: February 26, 2010, 05:18:24 PM »
Waaah BBL ji bahut behtreen poem likhi hai aapne. Its very nice and effective poem. I congrat for such beatiful creation. Isi mizaaj ki kuchh lines abhi likhi hain, mulaheza farmayen:

Khushi mukhtasar si,bahut gham mile
Wafaa jinse ki unse maatam mile
Baharein to aain, na gul khil sake
Hamein jaane kaise ye mausam mile
Bahaana banaakar kinara kiya
Sabhi doston se hamein gham mile
(riyaz)
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«Reply #6 on: February 26, 2010, 05:40:54 PM »
BAHUT UMDA,EKDUM DYNAMITE.
Quote from: brokenbyluv on February 26, 2010, 03:25:23 PM
Iss chhoti si umar mein bahut se mausam dekhe hai,
kabhi khushi bepanah tou kabhi dard bhare gum dekhe hai,

pal mein jism se juda hoti ruho k maatam dekhe hai,
kabhi khushi bepanah tou kabhi dard bhare gum dekhe hai,

Barasti hui bundo mein bhi kayi registan nam dekhe hai,
kabhi khushi bepanah tou kabhi dard bhare gum dekhe hai,

APNO K SAAYE MEIN DIL KO DEHELA DENE WALE ZULM-O-SITAM DEKHE HAI,
kabhi khushi bepanah tou kabhi dard bhare gum dekhe hai......
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«Reply #7 on: February 27, 2010, 05:28:17 AM »
Dard Bhari Yeh Rachna Dil Ko Chhoo Gai Geet Ji.. Ek Ek Lafz Apni Kahani si Kahata Nazar aa Raha hai... Bahut Lajawab Peshkash Hai.. Applause Applause



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daljeet_faqeer
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«Reply #8 on: February 27, 2010, 03:20:22 PM »
Bahu hi behtar likha hai janab aapne. Applause
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brokenbyluv
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«Reply #9 on: February 27, 2010, 04:20:43 PM »
thnx alot suresh ji,mann ji,daljeet ji n shihab ji...

riyaz ji bahut hi badhiya likha hai apne...


Aese aese jahan mein manzar dekhe hai,
jahan bhi gye wahiin ujde sheher dekhe hai,
kahiin sawan ne saalo saal dastak nhi di..
tou kahiin badhawas samunder dekhe hai......

badhawas-senseless,bematlab...
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«Reply #10 on: February 28, 2010, 12:11:46 AM »
Wah Geet ji bahut dard aur khoobsurti se aapne likhi hai.great work.dil ko chu gayi.Riyaz bhai aapne bhi bahut khoob likha Hats off to you! Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Thumbs UP

ISS BEMATLAB DUNIYA MEIN SIRF
ZAKHM AUR ZAHER DENE WAALE DEKHI HAI HUMNE
HAR PYAR KARNE WAALE KO TOOT KAR BHIKARTE DEKHE HAI HUMNE.
NA KARNA KABHI KISISE KOI UMMEED GEET
WAFA KARNE WAALO KO SIRF MILI HAI BEWAFAI, YAHI
DEKHI HUMNE.

Geet ji meri ek koshish hai.galti maaf ok.dilse nikli hui awaaz hai meri.


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«Reply #11 on: February 28, 2010, 12:58:33 PM »
thnx alot madhu ji....aur dil se keh rah hu bahut bahut bahut hi khoob likha hai apne...amazing n thnx alot... Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley

Main bhi kuch likhna chahungi...


Sahi kaha dost {madhu ji} iss duniya mein sab matlabi hai,
har kisi ko bus ek duje se aage jane ki lagi hai,
zamane wale kahan kisi k zakhmo ko sehelate hai..
log tou aajkal marne per bhi jhuthe ansu bahate hai......
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«Reply #12 on: February 28, 2010, 01:08:49 PM »
Wah Kya Baat hai Madhu Ji & Geet Ji.. Aap Dono Ne Kamaal Likha hai..!!

Madhu Ji Aapki Yeh Koshish Waqai Behad Khubsoorat thi.. aur Geet ji ne Utna Hi Betreen Jawab diya hai.. Applause Applause



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«Reply #13 on: February 28, 2010, 01:24:18 PM »
bahut bahut shukriya mann ji itna sarahne k liye...
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«Reply #14 on: February 28, 2010, 09:31:03 PM »
Wah bahut sachai aur khoobsurti se likha aapne Geet ji. Thumbs UP Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause
bahut bahut shukriya Geet ji and Mann ji. Thankyou !
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