-----/// Koi sazaa dijiye ///-----Hriday

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jeene  ke   liye   humein  koi  wajaah   dijiye
naa  de   saken  agar, to   koi  sazaa   dijiye

aadat  si  ho  chuki hai  andhere  ki humein
jo  ek  chiraag   hai  woh  bhi  bujhaa dijiye

baaton  par kisi   ke,  naa  bharosaa  rahaa
naa  kijiye   wafaa,  bas    koi  dagaa  dijiye

hai aansuon ko kab se humne rokaa huwaa
ab  deke  thodaa  dard  humein  rulaa dijiye

bas  jaagte rahe  hain  kai  barson  se  hum
humein   neend  chain   ki   abb sulaa  dijiye






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«Reply #1 on: March 30, 2015, 03:33:57 PM »
waah waah waah Hriday Jee bas mazaa aa.gayaa bahut bahut sunder likhaa hai. Dheron dheroooooN daaaaaaaaaaaaaaad Rau ke saath.
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humein   neend  chain   ki  aap  sulaa  dijiye

Just a personal choice it is not a criticism, I think in this line when you say aap, it is like you are refering to someone in particular, I would change it to abb.
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«Reply #2 on: March 30, 2015, 04:27:16 PM »
Quote from: ~Hriday~ on March 30, 2015, 02:52:01 PM


jeene  ke   liye   humein  koi  wajaah   dijiye
naa  de   saken  agar, to   koi  sazaa   dijiye

aadat  si  ho  chuki hai  andhere  ki humein
jo  ek  chiraag   hai  woh  bhi  bhujaa dijiye

baaton  par  kisi   ke,  naa  bharosaa  rahaa
naa  kijiye   wafaa,  bas    koi  dagaa  dijiye

hai aansuon ko kab se humne rokaa huwaa
ab  deke  thodaa  dard  humein  rulaa dijiye

bas jaagte rahe  hain  kai  barson   se  hum
humein   neend  chain   ki  abb sulaa  dijiye






*****HRIDAY*****




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«Reply #3 on: March 30, 2015, 06:48:24 PM »
Behtreen peshkash. Waaahhh dheroooo daaaddd
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«Reply #4 on: March 31, 2015, 01:07:41 AM »
wah wah Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #5 on: March 31, 2015, 01:32:22 AM »
bahut khob waah waah
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«Reply #6 on: March 31, 2015, 04:43:36 AM »
 Applause Applause Applause Applause

kya baat hai.....
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«Reply #7 on: March 31, 2015, 05:28:36 AM »
Bahut badya ehsas hain aur khub likha hai. Bahut si daad
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«Reply #8 on: March 31, 2015, 07:19:25 AM »
बहुत बहुत खूब.....

ढेरों दाद......
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«Reply #9 on: March 31, 2015, 08:22:56 AM »
Bahut umda jazbaat...umda adayegi Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #10 on: March 31, 2015, 03:16:16 PM »
Lajawab peshkash..
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«Reply #11 on: April 01, 2015, 05:33:07 PM »
ApplauseApplauseApplauseApplauseApplauseApplauseApplauseApplauseApplause speechless ApplauseApplauseApplauseApplauseApplauseApplauseApplauseApplauseApplause
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«Reply #12 on: May 04, 2015, 06:57:21 PM »
bahut bahut shukriyaaa Surindar ji....!!!


Quote from: surindarn on March 30, 2015, 03:33:57 PM
waah waah waah Hriday Jee bas mazaa aa.gayaa bahut bahut sunder likhaa hai. Dheron dheroooooN daaaaaaaaaaaaaaad Rau ke saath.
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«Reply #13 on: May 07, 2015, 04:43:54 AM »
bahut bahut shukriyaaa M_B ji....!!!


Quote from: marhoom bahayaat on March 30, 2015, 04:27:16 PM
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«Reply #14 on: May 07, 2015, 07:25:37 PM »
bahut bahut shukriyaaa Jeet ji...!!!

Quote from: jeet jainam on March 30, 2015, 06:48:24 PM
Behtreen peshkash. Waaahhh dheroooo daaaddd
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