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khilona samjhakar kisi ne is dil ko
kuch der khela aur fir chhor diya
aaj aansoo bhi nahi in aankhon me
toofan ke baad ka haal hai is dil ka
haath pakad saath chalne ka wada jo kiya
bich raah me tanha chhod apna muh mod liya
khadi reh gayi wahi ke wahi main bebas ho ke
suni hogayi zindagi charo aur andhera dikha
bewafaa hoga woh kabhi aisa socha na tha
phir bhi uske khilaf dilse Kuch Bura na nikla
maine toh ki the mohabbat usse sache dil se
aey khuda phir woh mere sath aisa kyun kiya..
kyun khela is dil se kyun is qadar daga kiya
meri mohabbat me kya kami thi jo aisa sila diya...
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«Reply #1 on: August 05, 2008, 08:54:10 AM » |
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 dil se likhi hui..har line....apne aap me beintaha dard samete hue hai.... a nice and touching creation punam 
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«Reply #2 on: August 05, 2008, 09:03:03 AM » |
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sukriya sanjeev bhaiya...
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«Reply #3 on: August 05, 2008, 09:07:01 AM » |
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bahut hi umda likha hai punam ji wah
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«Reply #4 on: August 05, 2008, 09:09:22 AM » |
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sukriya baadal ji....
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«Reply #5 on: August 05, 2008, 11:12:04 AM » |
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khilona samjhakar kisi ne is dil ko
kuch der khela aur fir chhor diya
aaj aansoo bhi nahi in aankhon me
toofan ke baad ka haal hai is dil ka
haath pakad saath chalne ka wada jo kiya
bich raah me tanha chod apna muh mod liya
khadi reh gayi wahi ke wahi main bebas ho ke
suni hogayi zindagi charo aur andhera dikha
bewafaa hoga woh kabhi aisa socha na tha
phir bhi uske khilaf dilse Kuch Bura na nikla
maine toh ki the mohabbat usse sache dil se
aey khuda phir woh mere sath aisa kyun kiya..
kyun khela is dil se kyun is qadar daga kiya
meri mohabbat me kya kami thi jo aisa sila diya...
bahut hi accha likha hai punam di
har ek line mein dard hai bahut khoob... |
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«Reply #6 on: August 05, 2008, 02:59:40 PM » |
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BAHUT KHOOB BAIYAN KIYA HAIN AAPNE APNE DARD KO. VERY GOOD SACHMUCH ADBOOT.  |
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«Reply #7 on: August 05, 2008, 03:08:01 PM » |
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Bahut Khoob dard aur haale dil bayaan kia gaya hai. -
Zahir hai har ishq ki
intaha nahin hoti -
Jo chhod de tanha
Par zindagi fana nahin hoti -
Ishq kare aur nikle jaan
To muhabbat nahin hoti -
Zabt jab toot jaye to
Wafa ki umeed nahin hoti -
Rishta nahin hota jab tak
Bin rishte wafa nahin hoti. -
**Syed Naami**
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«Reply #8 on: August 05, 2008, 03:13:25 PM » |
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khilona samjhakar kisi ne is dil ko
kuch der khela aur fir chhor diya
aaj aansoo bhi nahi in aankhon me
toofan ke baad ka haal hai is dil ka
haath pakad saath chalne ka wada jo kiya
bich raah me tanha chod apna muh mod liya
Bahut accha likha hai punam. (magar kisne khela tere dilse?  ) |
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«Reply #9 on: August 05, 2008, 03:16:12 PM » |
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«Reply #11 on: August 05, 2008, 05:33:14 PM » |
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BAHUT KHOOB BAIYAN KIYA HAIN AAPNE APNE DARD KO. VERY GOOD SACHMUCH ADBOOT. |
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«Reply #12 on: August 05, 2008, 05:58:54 PM » |
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is topic ko padhkar ek bahoot purana sher yaad aa gaya
gum na kar aye dost koun kiska hota hai,
dhokha wahi dete hain jinpe bharosa hota hai
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«Reply #13 on: August 05, 2008, 06:04:05 PM » |
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Nice sharing Bekarar ji
bharose main jab bewafai ka rang hota hai
pyar ka naam bhi waha, bahoot sharmsaar hota hai
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«Reply #14 on: August 05, 2008, 06:41:31 PM » |
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Bahut Khoob dard aur haale dil bayaan kia gaya hai. -
Zahir hai har ishq ki
intaha nahin hoti -
Jo chhod de tanha
Par zindagi fana nahin hoti -
Ishq kare aur nikle jaan
To muhabbat nahin hoti -
Zabt jab toot jaye to
Wafa ki umeed nahin hoti -
Rishta nahin hota jab tak
Bin rishte wafa nahin hoti. -
**Syed Naami**
Zaberdast ... very good work |
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on eTI community..
