**Mat chaho kisi ko toot kar** by Rahim

by dead heart on April 13, 2010, 09:24:46 PM
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Kuch dinn pehle ek kalam parra 'chala hoon'...im using this two words in this poem of mine...

Kuch alfazon main apna dard bayan karne chala hoon,
Guzre hue kal ko bhool kar ane wala kal bayan karne chala hoon…

Uska mujhe thukra dena ek gehra zakhm chorr gaya dil pe,
Aj uss zakhm ka marham dhundne chala hoon…

Kal jahan maine ashiyane banaye the uss hamsafar ke saath,
Aj wahin uski yaadon ko dafnane chala hoon…

Woh toh na de saka mujhe pyaar jiski khwahish rakta tha dil,
Aj ghairon main mohobat mangne chala hoon…

Ashk kahin koi dekh na le meri inn ankhon main,
Nadi ke kinare baith aj inhe yahin bahane chala hoon…

‘Rahim’ kehta hai mat chahna kisi ko toot kar doston,
Bikhar kar raahon main mohobat ki aj yehi sabak sabko dene chala hoon…


~Rahim~
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«Reply #1 on: April 13, 2010, 10:49:24 PM »
bahut khoob likha hai Rahim bhai... bahut pyaari kavita hai... simply superb... kuch lines maine bhi likhne ki koshish ki hai...

kal tak tere mohabbat me bas ashk bahaye maine,
aaj un ashko ko mitaane chala hoon,

kal tak meri zindagi me naam bas tera tha,
aaj main usi naam ko mitaane chala hoon,

lagta tha ki dard me hi qaid hai zindagi meri,
aaj main usi dard ko mitaane chala hoon,

tere jaane k baad yun tanha tha main jeewan me,
aaj unhi tanhayion ko mitaane chala hoon,

haan aaj ek naye safar pe main chala hoon,
aaj main har ghum ko mitaane chala hoon....
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«Reply #2 on: April 14, 2010, 12:25:06 AM »
Wah wah Rahim bhai n Kapil ji,sirf dard hi dard hai aap dono ke poem mein.bahut khoob.marvelous creation.keep it up.really touched. Hats off to you! icon_thumleft Applause Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #3 on: April 14, 2010, 12:32:35 AM »
Bahut bahut shukriya Madhu ji...!!!

Wah wah Rahim bhai n Kapil ji,sirf dard hi dard hai aap dono ke poem mein.bahut khoob.marvelous creation.keep it up.really touched. Hats off to you! icon_thumleft Applause Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #4 on: April 14, 2010, 06:39:09 AM »
Kuch dinn pehle ek kalam parra 'chala hoon'...im using this two words in this poem of mine...

Kuch alfazon main apna dard bayan karne chala hoon,
Guzre hue kal ko bhool kar ane wala kal bayan karne chala hoon…

Uska mujhe thukra dena ek gehra zakhm chorr gaya dil pe,
Aj uss zakhm ka marham dhundne chala hoon…

Kal jahan maine ashiyane banaye the uss hamsafar ke saath,
Aj wahin uski yaadon ko dafnane chala hoon…

Woh toh na de saka mujhe pyaar jiski khwahish rakta tha dil,
Aj ghairon main mohobat mangne chala hoon…

Ashk kahin koi dekh na le meri inn ankhon main,
Nadi ke kinare baith aj inhe yahin bahane chala hoon…

‘Rahim’ kehta hai mat chahna kisi ko toot kar doston,
Bikhar kar raahon main mohobat ki aj yehi sabak sabko dene chala hoon…


~Rahim~

Bahut Bahut Khoob Bhai Rahim..Dard Ke Saath-Saath,

Beete Hue Waqt Ko Bhoolkar Aage Chalne Ka Haulsa BhI deti hai Yeh Peshkash Aapki..

Bahut Ache.. Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
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«Reply #5 on: April 14, 2010, 06:51:05 AM »
Wah wah Abdul Rahim Bhai bahot khoob. Darde-dil bahot khoobsurti se bayaan kiya hai. Marhaba.
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«Reply #6 on: April 14, 2010, 06:59:06 AM »
alfaj nahi he is ke liye rahim ji..... Clapping Smiley
 

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«Reply #7 on: April 14, 2010, 07:04:07 AM »
wah wah bahut khoob Rahim ji.
dil ki gehrai se aai hai ye ghazal .
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«Reply #8 on: April 14, 2010, 10:55:09 AM »
Shukriya Kapil dost, Madhu di, Suresh jee, Khwahish jee, Riyaz jee aur Thinkhattk jee..
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«Reply #9 on: April 14, 2010, 10:56:37 AM »
Bahaut bahaut khubsoorat likha hai apne Kapil dost!
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«Reply #10 on: April 14, 2010, 11:25:35 AM »
Kuch dinn pehle ek kalam parra 'chala hoon'...im using this two words in this poem of mine...

Kuch alfazon main apna dard bayan karne chala hoon,
Guzre hue kal ko bhool kar ane wala kal bayan karne chala hoon…

Uska mujhe thukra dena ek gehra zakhm chorr gaya dil pe,
Aj uss zakhm ka marham dhundne chala hoon…

Kal jahan maine ashiyane banaye the uss hamsafar ke saath,
Aj wahin uski yaadon ko dafnane chala hoon…

Woh toh na de saka mujhe pyaar jiski khwahish rakta tha dil,
Aj ghairon main mohobat mangne chala hoon…

Ashk kahin koi dekh na le meri inn ankhon main,
Nadi ke kinare baith aj inhe yahin bahane chala hoon…

‘Rahim’ kehta hai mat chahna kisi ko toot kar doston,
Bikhar kar raahon main mohobat ki aj yehi sabak sabko dene chala hoon…


~Rahim~

Bohot Khoob Rahim...bohot achcha likha hai aapne....
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«Reply #11 on: April 14, 2010, 01:16:31 PM »
Bahut bahut shukriya Rahim bhai...!!!

Bahaut bahaut khubsoorat likha hai apne Kapil dost!
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«Reply #12 on: April 14, 2010, 06:24:01 PM »
Shukriya Talat di!
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«Reply #13 on: April 16, 2010, 05:26:51 AM »
Kuch dinn pehle ek kalam parra 'chala hoon'...im using this two words in this poem of mine...

Kuch alfazon main apna dard bayan karne chala hoon,
Guzre hue kal ko bhool kar ane wala kal bayan karne chala hoon…

Uska mujhe thukra dena ek gehra zakhm chorr gaya dil pe,
Aj uss zakhm ka marham dhundne chala hoon…

Kal jahan maine ashiyane banaye the uss hamsafar ke saath,
Aj wahin uski yaadon ko dafnane chala hoon…

Woh toh na de saka mujhe pyaar jiski khwahish rakta tha dil,
Aj ghairon main mohobat mangne chala hoon…

Ashk kahin koi dekh na le meri inn ankhon main,
Nadi ke kinare baith aj inhe yahin bahane chala hoon…

‘Rahim’ kehta hai mat chahna kisi ko toot kar doston,
Bikhar kar raahon main mohobat ki aj yehi sabak sabko dene chala hoon…


~Rahim~

Bahut khoob Rahim Ji
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«Reply #14 on: April 16, 2010, 12:47:12 PM »
Bahaut bahaut shukriya Rajesh jee!
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