M. Rahman
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Deewana koi mujhsa nahi, yeh kaise kahein hum Deewano ki aakhir koi kaami to nahi hai Bus ek tuta hua dil hi to chahiye Apne aapko tum bhi is kataar mein shaamil paaoge
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anjaan dharkan
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«Reply #1 on: November 06, 2008, 02:38:14 PM » |
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it was a bit confusing... but nonetheless... keep it up!
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«Reply #2 on: November 06, 2008, 04:17:08 PM » |
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Deewana koi mujhsa nahi, yeh kaise kahein hum Deewano ki aakhir koi kaami to nahi hai Bus ek tuta hua dil hi to chahiye Apne aapko tum bhi is kataar mein shaamil paaoge
Nice one Rahman...Keep it UP
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M. Rahman
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«Reply #3 on: November 06, 2008, 04:26:53 PM » |
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Thanks anjaan dharkan.
Agar confused hoto bhai khulke kaho Koi baat dil mein hai to samne rakho 'Keep it up' kehke chorto diya Ab phirse confused karoon to maaf kar dena.
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M. Rahman
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«Reply #4 on: November 06, 2008, 04:38:57 PM » |
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Shukriya Celmiraji.
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«Reply #5 on: November 06, 2008, 08:15:36 PM » |
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nice try...not bad....but wat i wana say is that if ur riting a 4 line sher...make sure the first,third and fourth rhyme...well i am not teaching u coz myself im not a great writer but thats wat a great shaer told me so i told u dat...dnt mind bro...tc
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M. Rahman
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«Reply #6 on: November 07, 2008, 02:22:37 PM » |
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Shukriya dead heart
Mein shayar to nahin Magar aye dost Tere comment se mujhe Shayeri aagayee
Thanks for the comment
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«Reply #7 on: November 07, 2008, 02:31:46 PM » |
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Deewana koi mujhsa nahi, yeh kaise kahein hum Deewano ki aakhir koi kaami to nahi hai Bus ek tuta hua dil hi to chahiye Apne aapko tum bhi is kataar mein shaamil paaoge
Padkar hum b huwe diwana ... Accha likha hai aapne Rahman jii
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M. Rahman
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«Reply #8 on: November 07, 2008, 02:56:06 PM » |
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Shukriya Soniaji
Deewana hoon to kya hua Aab mein akela nehi hoon Chalte hue raho mein Koi to jaroor milega
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«Reply #9 on: November 07, 2008, 03:59:14 PM » |
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nice one m.rehman.. keep writing..
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«Reply #10 on: November 08, 2008, 04:36:50 PM » |
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Bohat khoob Rahman ji...
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M. Rahman
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«Reply #11 on: November 08, 2008, 04:42:27 PM » |
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Shukriya Sanyaji
Deewana hoon mein Par ab nehi hai koi gum Yoindia par kuch kalam likhke Tanhayee bhul jayenge hum
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M. Rahman
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«Reply #12 on: November 08, 2008, 04:50:16 PM » |
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Shukriya Honeyroseji
Dil mein ek aarju thi Jo kabhi bayaan na kar sakha Agar bayaan karte to Yoindia par 'mein deewana' na hota
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«Reply #13 on: November 08, 2008, 05:56:10 PM » |
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Nice ones M. Rahman
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«Reply #14 on: November 08, 2008, 06:02:23 PM » |
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Shukriya Soniaji
Deewana hoon to kya hua Aab mein akela nehi hoon Chalte hue raho mein Koi to jaroor milega
Haan jii zarur milega... (Saati mil jaye toh Card dena nahi bhoolna )
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