Mere lie..................Mann

mann ji , aapne apna mureed bana liya hai humko.....teri aankho men aasu kyun ke baad aapki is ghazal ke dard ne phir se dil ko chhoo liya..........great english poet p b shelley ne sach kahaa hai our sweetest song are those that tell of saddest thought......aik khoobsurat radeef ghazal ko bahut khoobsurat banaa deta hai....."mere lie".....bahut sundar radeef hai......khyaal bhi umda rahe........rahi baat technical aspects ki to is baar qaafiye men koi ghalti nahi...........ghazal ka meter bhi perfect hai.. siwaay second last sher men saani ke.....aap kahte hai ki aapko beh'r ki jaankaari nahi hai lekin aapki ghazal beh'r men hi hai .......iska reason jahaan tak meri samajh men aata hai ye hai ki aap apne khyaalo ko kisi geet ya ghazal ki dhun men piro lete hai maslan is ghazal ki dhun hai tumko dekha to ye khyaal aaya.........beh'r aur kuch nahi yahi hai.......aake qalaam men rawaanagi honi chaahiye.....bas aik baat ka khyaal rakhiye......apne lafzo ke liye dhun ke saath koi samjhauta mat kariye balki dhun men fit karne ke liye apne lafzo men ferbadal kariye.......aap agar itnee si baat ko follow karengi to aapka qalaam kabhi beh'r se khaarij nahi hoga......aakhir men is umda ghazal ke liye aapko dhero daad............