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mujhse mera haal na pucho
kaed hai sab kuch koi zajbaat na pucho
ek masihaa mera jisne diye itne gam
kyu usne kiya aisa mujhse koi sawaal na pucho
hai khuda wo ab bhi mere liye
aankho se kyu barsi barsaat na pucho
hoga dard unko bhi itna bichadjaane ka pata hai
meri khamoshi mei chupe haalaat na pucho
ho sake to dena bas duaayein unke liye
kyu hai khaali mere haath bas ye mujhse aaj koi baat na pucho
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«Reply #1 on: February 25, 2009, 02:12:40 PM » |
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Poochna zaruri hain bevafa kaun tha
Dono bawafa ho aur juda ho yeh mumkeen nahi
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«Reply #2 on: February 25, 2009, 02:14:53 PM » |
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mujhse mera haal na pucho
kaed hai sab kuch koi zajbaat na pucho
ek masihaa mera jisne diye itne gam
kyu usne kiya aisa mujhse koi sawaal na pucho
hai khuda wo ab bhi mere liye
aankho se kyu barsi barsaat na pucho
hoga dard unko bhi itna bichadjaane ka pata hai
meri khamoshi mei chupe haalaat na pucho
ho sake to dena bas duaayein unke liye
kyu hai khaali mere haath bas ye mujhse aaj koi baat na pucho
Bahut khoob Bhawana ji |
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«Reply #3 on: February 25, 2009, 02:16:38 PM » |
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[b[BOhat Achche Kuashik Ji,. Nice One,.
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«Reply #4 on: February 25, 2009, 04:16:35 PM » |
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«Reply #5 on: February 25, 2009, 04:29:37 PM » |
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bahoot dil se apne is kavita ko likha hai bhawna... good work!!
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«Reply #6 on: February 25, 2009, 04:35:57 PM » |
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WAH BAHUT KHOOB BHAWNA
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«Reply #7 on: February 25, 2009, 07:57:19 PM » |
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Bohot Khoob Bhawna
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«Reply #8 on: February 27, 2009, 05:24:35 AM » |
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waah bahot acha likha hai aapne Bhawna ji...  very nice.. shukriya dost |
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«Reply #9 on: February 27, 2009, 05:26:50 AM » |
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Poochna zaruri hain bevafa kaun tha
Dono bawafa ho aur juda ho yeh mumkeen nahi
-SG-
dil ab tak maanta jise khuda hai
wo rahe bedaag bas yahi hai ab dua
ye dil har sitam swikarta haishukriya sajid ji thnks for ur coments |
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«Reply #10 on: February 27, 2009, 05:29:01 AM » |
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roja ji and janasheen ji bohut bohut shukriya ki aapne is thread ko padha aur saraha bhi
janasheen ji aap bhi agar kuch lines likhte apne andaaz mei to hamei aur bhi acha lagta
anyway thnks a lot
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«Reply #11 on: February 27, 2009, 05:31:30 AM » |
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celmira ji
khwaish ji
pooja ji
jasbir ji
aap sabka mei tahedil se shukriya ada karti hu ki aapne padha aur saraha bhi
bas aap sabka saath milta raha to ham yu hi hamesha likhte rahenge
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«Reply #12 on: February 27, 2009, 05:36:48 AM » |
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Very nice written Bhavna. keep writing more...
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«Reply #13 on: February 27, 2009, 06:02:19 AM » |
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Very nice Bhawana ji
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«Reply #14 on: February 27, 2009, 09:09:57 AM » |
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mere ashkun ko palkun pe machalna bhi nahi ata
hisar-e-zabatse mujh ko nikalna bhi nahi ata
gai ho essi rahuon pe akeela chor ker mujh ko
keh jin rahoun pe mujh ko thek se chalna nahi ata.
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on eTI community..
