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suman59
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Na gam do khuda ko yaad karke
Kahan chal diye tum hame berbaad karke
Mai berbaad hona bi gawara karungi
Agar wo khush hai hame barbaad karke
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«Reply #1 on: August 26, 2012, 06:02:32 PM » |
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Na gam do khuda ko yaad karke
Kahan chal diye tum hame berbaad karke
Mai berbaad hona bi gawara karungi
Agar wo khush hai hame barbaad karke
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suman59
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«Reply #2 on: August 26, 2012, 06:05:07 PM » |
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naaaaaaaice thankkkkkkkkkkkkksssssssss |
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MANOJ6568
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«Reply #3 on: August 26, 2012, 08:00:30 PM » |
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Na gam do khuda ko yaad karke
Kahan chal diye tum hame berbaad karke
Mai berbaad hona bi gawara karungi
Agar wo khush hai hame barbaad karke
gd sher ke hisaab se forth line mei.n wo ki jagah tum aana chahiye |
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«Reply #4 on: August 27, 2012, 12:29:15 AM » |
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bahut khoob suman ji
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«Reply #5 on: August 27, 2012, 04:32:49 AM » |
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good keep it up magar bi naheen bhee
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«Reply #7 on: August 27, 2012, 11:21:04 AM » |
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suman59 ji,
khayal achchhe hain..bandhne kee aur koshish
keejiye...likhne ke saath thoa bahut padhiye bhi
achchhe Poets ko....all the best...
Raqeeb
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«Reply #8 on: August 27, 2012, 11:39:33 AM » |
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waah suman ji wah
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suman59
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«Reply #9 on: August 27, 2012, 03:25:54 PM » |
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suman59 ji,
khayal achchhe hain..bandhne kee aur koshish
keejiye...likhne ke saath thoa bahut padhiye bhi
achchhe Poets ko....all the best...
Raqeeb
shukriya satish shukla jee. jaisa aapne kaha waisa hi karenge. |
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«Reply #10 on: August 27, 2012, 03:27:46 PM » |
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gd
sher ke hisaab se forth line mei.n wo ki jagah tum aana chahiye
accha... haan second line mein tum likhi thi na. toh sahi hai wo ki jagah tum likhna chahiye tha. slip hogaya  sory |
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«Reply #11 on: August 27, 2012, 03:28:58 PM » |
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good keep it up magar bi naheen bhee
keeping up... (magar bi nahi bi  is ka matlab kya hai? |
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«Reply #12 on: August 27, 2012, 03:33:26 PM » |
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3rd line me 'bi' ki jaha 'bhee' hoga... keeping up... (magar bi nahi bi is ka matlab kya hai? |
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«Reply #13 on: August 27, 2012, 03:37:18 PM » |
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3rd line me 'bi' ki jaha 'bhee' hoga... ok ok yeh padkar kahi HONEY BEE na peeche padjaye |
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~Hriday~
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kalam k chalne ko zamaana paagalpan samajhta hai.
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«Reply #14 on: August 27, 2012, 03:40:14 PM » |
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hahahhahaahah nahi padegaa... filhaal to main hi hoon pareshaan karne ke liye.... ok ok yeh padkar kahi HONEY BEE na peeche padjaye |
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on eTI community..
