nazdikyon ke faasle

by Prateek Mardia on December 21, 2008, 07:05:16 AM
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Main ruka to wo chale, main uga to wo dhale
Aankhen faad faad ke dekhe maine, nazdikiyon ke faasle!


Garmjoshi se dur  koson, raingtey  se yeh silsile
Barf jaise thande nikle,nazdikiyon ke faasle!


Mun shithil,kamzor rishtey,chahre ka rung kaise khile?
Taazi-khuli saanso pe bandish,nazdikiyon ke faasle!


Zindgi ki umra mein,mil jaate hein,kuch shaks bure,kuch log bhale
Na dosti- na dushmani se, nazdikiyon ke faasle


Shokhiyaa unki mur gayi ,na hum rahe ub munchaale
Bezubaa aur beasar se, nazdikiyon ke faasle


Haasil hi kya thaa, kiska gila aur mujhko kya khale
Nukeele naakhon jaisi kharonchey,nazdikiyon ke faasle!~


________Prateek
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«Reply #1 on: December 21, 2008, 07:57:59 AM »
Bahut Khoob Prateek Ji
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«Reply #2 on: December 21, 2008, 10:17:19 AM »
Bohat Achche Prateek Ji,.

Faasle Is Kadar Bardh Jaayenge, Is Ka Andaaza Na Tha,.
Wo Door Tha, To Mere Khayaalon Me Tha,
Ab Paas Hai, To Main Use Dikhta Bhi Nahi,.

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«Reply #3 on: December 21, 2008, 01:07:49 PM »
Bohat bohat khoob Prateek hamesha ki tarah ek bohat hi mazboot peshkesh muje yeh combination bohat Achcha laga "Main uga to woh dhale" its just great Thank You very much for such a beautiful work  Clapping Smiley

Good Reply Azeem....  Applause   

Maine jab chuma unke lashe ko
Samaj me aa gaye, nazdikiyon ke faasle...

                        -SG-
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«Reply #4 on: December 21, 2008, 04:07:08 PM »
bhut badiya prateekji....

door the toh chalte the silsiley,
saamne aaye toh bardgye nazdiyon ke faasle.
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«Reply #5 on: December 21, 2008, 06:35:47 PM »
Itne kareeb the par faasle the bahut jayada
Jo door chale gaye faasle ho gaye aur jayada
Ab milan ho na ho yeh faasle ghate na ghate
Badi ajeeb hai yeh faasle nazdikiyon ke faasle.
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«Reply #6 on: December 21, 2008, 09:23:13 PM »
Quote from: Prateek Mardia on December 21, 2008, 07:05:16 AM
Main ruka to wo chale, main uga to wo dhale
Aankhen faad faad ke dekhe maine, nazdikiyon ke faasle!

Garmjoshi se dur  koson, raingtey  se yeh silsile
Barf jaise thande nikle,nazdikiyon ke faasle!

Mun shithil,kamzor rishtey,chahre ka rung kaise khile?
Taazi-khuli saanso pe bandish,nazdikiyon ke faasle!

Zindgi ki umra mein,mil jaate hein,kuch shaks bure,kuch log bhale
Na dosti- na dushmani se, nazdikiyon ke faasle

Shokhiyaa unki mur gayi ,na hum rahe ub munchaale
Bezubaa aur beasar se, nazdikiyon ke faasle

Haasil hi kya thaa, kiska gila aur mujhko kya khale
Nukeele naakhon jaisi kharonchey,nazdikiyon ke faasle!~

________Prateek


 Applause Applause Applause Applause

wah wah wah, kaya baat hai prateek ji, ek ek shabd teekha, ek ek shabd dard main dooba zindagi ki suchaio ko bayan karta hua.. apki is kavita ko padte waqat jo do line man main aai wo yah hai:

Faaslein aise bhi hoge, yah kabhi socha na tha
samne baitha tha mere aor wo MERA na tha (nm)

janati hu apki kavita main kuch aor roop se nazdiki ke faslon ke baare kaha gaya hai... kuch likhne ki koshish kar rahi hu, shayad apko pasand ayye 

hai ek he chat ke niche, magar tu mujhse anjaan main tujhse anjaan
naam jurra hai tera mera, magar dilo main na ab ek dooje ke liye koi armaan

mere ansoo tujhko lage drama, tere ahsaaso se main ab anjaan
khamoshi teri meri main, ghar na jaane kab se ho gaya sunsaan

jhoothi muskaan jamane ke liye, dil main uthe dard ghamasaan
chah kar bhi na kahe kuch ab hum ek dooje se, pyar lafz se ho gaye anjaan

hai ek he chat ke niche, magar tu mujhse anjaan main tujhse anjaan
naam jurra hai tera mera, magar dilo main na ab ek dooje ke liye koi armaan
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Pooja
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«Reply #7 on: December 21, 2008, 09:30:32 PM »
nice lines lil bro, SG JI AND Rajesh ji
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«Reply #8 on: December 21, 2008, 09:56:38 PM »
Quote from: Pooja on December 21, 2008, 09:30:32 PM
nice lines lil bro, SG JI AND Rajesh ji
Thanks Pooja Ji
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«Reply #9 on: December 22, 2008, 12:43:37 PM »
Quote from: Rajesh Harish on December 21, 2008, 07:57:59 AM
Bahut Khoob Prateek Ji
Quote from: Jaanasheen on December 21, 2008, 10:17:19 AM
Bohat Achche Prateek Ji,.

Faasle Is Kadar Bardh Jaayenge, Is Ka Andaaza Na Tha,.
Wo Door Tha, To Mere Khayaalon Me Tha,
Ab Paas Hai, To Main Use Dikhta Bhi Nahi,.

____________________________-Jaanasheen

Quote from: sajid_ghayel on December 21, 2008, 01:07:49 PM
Bohat bohat khoob Prateek hamesha ki tarah ek bohat hi mazboot peshkesh muje yeh combination bohat Achcha laga "Main uga to woh dhale" its just great Thank You very much for such a beautiful work  Clapping Smiley

Good Reply Azeem....  Applause  

Maine jab chuma unke lashe ko
Samaj me aa gaye, nazdikiyon ke faasle...

                        -SG-


Quote from: cara on December 21, 2008, 04:07:08 PM
bhut badiya prateekji....

door the toh chalte the silsiley,
saamne aaye toh bardgye nazdiyon ke faasle.
Quote from: Rajesh Harish on December 21, 2008, 06:35:47 PM
Itne kareeb the par faasle the bahut jayada
Jo door chale gaye faasle ho gaye aur jayada
Ab milan ho na ho yeh faasle ghate na ghate
Badi ajeeb hai yeh faasle nazdikiyon ke faasle.





Shukria hausla afzaahi ka,Jaansheeji, Sajid ji,rajesh ji,cara ji
aap sub ne is prayaas ki taareef kar hauley badhaaye.
Aap sub ne bhee khoob likha hai.
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«Reply #10 on: December 22, 2008, 12:47:40 PM »
Quote from: Pooja on December 21, 2008, 09:23:13 PM
Applause Applause Applause Applause

wah wah wah, kaya baat hai prateek ji, ek ek shabd teekha, ek ek shabd dard main dooba zindagi ki suchaio ko bayan karta hua.. apki is kavita ko padte waqat jo do line man main aai wo yah hai:

Faaslein aise bhi hoge, yah kabhi socha na tha
samne baitha tha mere aor wo MERA na tha (nm)

janati hu apki kavita main kuch aor roop se nazdiki ke faslon ke baare kaha gaya hai... kuch likhne ki koshish kar rahi hu, shayad apko pasand ayye 

hai ek he chat ke niche, magar tu mujhse anjaan main tujhse anjaan
naam jurra hai tera mera, magar dilo main na ab ek dooje ke liye koi armaan

mere ansoo tujhko lage drama, tere ahsaaso se main ab anjaan
khamoshi teri meri main, ghar na jaane kab se ho gaya sunsaan

jhoothi muskaan jamane ke liye, dil main uthe dard ghamasaan
chah kar bhi na kahe kuch ab hum ek dooje se, pyar lafz se ho gaye anjaan

hai ek he chat ke niche, magar tu mujhse anjaan main tujhse anjaan
naam jurra hai tera mera, magar dilo main na ab ek dooje ke liye koi armaan


pooja ji,sada k tarah aapne ek baar fir is kaushish ki taareef ki,jiska main shukrguzaar hu.aap ki khaas baat yeh hein,ki rachna maamooli bhee ho to bhee aap taareefon ke pul baandh himmaatein badhaati rehti hein.

Aap ka jawaab khoob bhaaya,aap bhee badhai ki patra hein.
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«Reply #11 on: December 22, 2008, 01:29:03 PM »
Yunhi besabab na phira karo Koi shaam ghar bhi raha karo,.
Wo ghazal ki sachi kitab hay Usay chupke chupke parha karo,.

Koi haath bhi na milayega jo galay milo gay tapaak se,
Ye naye mizaaj ka shehr hay zara faslay se mila karo...

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«Reply #12 on: December 22, 2008, 01:30:28 PM »
Kon daita hay umar bhar ka sahara FARAZ..
Log to Janazay me bhi kandhay badaltey rehtey hain...

Ahmed Faraaz
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«Reply #13 on: December 22, 2008, 02:07:39 PM »
Quote from: Jaanasheen on December 22, 2008, 01:29:03 PM
Yunhi besabab na phira karo Koi shaam ghar bhi raha karo,.
Wo ghazal ki sachi kitab hay Usay chupke chupke parha karo,.

Koi haath bhi na milayega jo galay milo gay tapaak se,
Ye naye mizaaj ka shehr hay zara faslay se mila karo...

Ahmed Faraaz

KHOO
Quote from: Jaanasheen on December 22, 2008, 01:30:28 PM
Kon daita hay umar bhar ka sahara FARAZ..
Log to Janazay me bhi kandhay badaltey rehtey hain...

Ahmed Faraaz
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khoob kahi hai, ahmed ji ne, kya behtareen collection hein aapke aap jaansheen ji,mauka laga ko kabhi le udunga....
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«Reply #14 on: December 23, 2008, 03:07:39 AM »
Quote from: Jaanasheen on December 22, 2008, 01:29:03 PM
Yunhi besabab na phira karo Koi shaam ghar bhi raha karo,.
Wo ghazal ki sachi kitab hay Usay chupke chupke parha karo,.

Koi haath bhi na milayega jo galay milo gay tapaak se,
Ye naye mizaaj ka shehr hay zara faslay se mila karo...

Ahmed Faraaz

Chote yeh kalam Dr. Basheer Badr ka hain Faraaz ka nahi.
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