SAANP AAKHIR SAANP HI NIKLA ................. HASAN -Panna 3:Shayri-E-Dard

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«Reply #30 on: June 21, 2012, 02:16:11 PM »

Hausla afzai ke liye bahut bahut shukriya , Khamosh Aawaaz ji. Khush rahiye .

Quote from: khamosh_aawaaz on June 18, 2012, 06:29:21 PM

doosra sher kyaa kahne FHS. VERIII NAAAAAAAAICE------ONE RAU


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Re: SAANP AAKHIR SAANP HI NIKLA ................. HASAN

«Reply #31 on: June 21, 2012, 03:58:33 PM »

BAHUT BAHUT SHUKRIYA , SATISH JI .

Quote from: Satish Shukla on June 19, 2012, 04:05:10 AM

Waah waah...Hasan Sahab...bahut khoob...Raqeeb


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Re: SAANP AAKHIR SAANP HI NIKLA ................. HASAN

«Reply #32 on: June 22, 2012, 10:56:53 AM »

THANKS , PANKAJ JI . GOD BLESS YOU . HASAN

Quote from: pankajwfs on June 19, 2012, 10:44:37 AM

Very true and nice writing Hasan Sir ......


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Re: SAANP AAKHIR SAANP HI NIKLA ................. HASAN

«Reply #33 on: June 22, 2012, 04:37:52 PM »

Quote from: janumanu on June 19, 2012, 12:06:04 PM

Pilaaya doodh lekin , Saanp aakhir Saanp hee nikla ,
Azeez - az - jaaN jise samjha , mera qaatil wahee nikla

Wafa hoti hai sub meiN , aur phir Bhai to Bhai hai ,
YaqeeN mera ghalat thha , tera Andesha sahee nikla

bahut acha sher hai hasan sahab Usual Smile

saani bahut acha laga
lekin kafiyaa ghalat lag raha hai... sahi lafz asal mai sahiH hota hai... plz check and let me know ..

Chale thhe Doodh karne Doodh , aur Paani ko hum Paani ,
Kiya Paani alag to saare ka saara Dahee nikla

oolaa agar aisa ho to thoda clear ho raha hai .. mere hisaab se baakia ap dekh le

chale they doodh ko hum doodh karne paani ko paani

HaiN yaksaaN Dard ke Qisse , Haqeeqat ho gai saabit ,
Fasaana tera , jub meri , kahani ankahee nikla

mere khayal se ... haqeeqat ka zahir honaa jydaa suit karega sabit kahne ke bajaye ....!!!

Kisi per aankh band kar ke , Bharosa mat 'Hasan' karna ,
Hamaare tajruboN se ye Usool - e - Aagahee nikla

acha makta hai saheb ....
acha laga aapko padhnaa

regards

Hausla afzai aur mufeed mashviron ke liye shukriya.

* Main muttafiq hoon ki 'saabit' se 'zaahir' zyada suit karta hai. Darasl main bhi in dono alfaaz ke beech muzabzab mein thha lekin post karte waqt 'sabit' hi kiya.

* Doodh paani... waale misre mein original hi zyada munasib hai kyunki 'paa NI ko paani' ke NI se zyada choti aawaaz 'KO hum paani' ke KO mein hai jo rawaani aur wazan ke aitbaar se main samajhta hoon zyada sahi hai.

Waise upar ke dono hi cases mein tajweez karda tarmim bhi mumkin hai .Bulki koi doosre reader apne aql o faham ke mutabiq kuch aur tareeqa bhi bata sakte hain .

* 'Sahi' lafz hijje ke aitbaar se 'sahiH' hi hai lekin aawaaz au itemaal ke aitbaar se H pe nahi toot'ta hai.Aur jahaan tak main samajhta hoon 'Sahi' ki tarah istemaal kiya jaata hai. Lekin main yaqeeni taur per aap ki raai ko ghalat nahi kahta hoon . Guzarish karunga ki agar 'Sahi' ka 'sahiH' ki tarah wazan ya qafiyon mein istemaal ke kuch ashaar hon to bataur misaal rahnumaai ke liye likh dein.
Duago,Hasan


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Re: SAANP AAKHIR SAANP HI NIKLA ................. HASAN

«Reply #34 on: June 24, 2012, 10:55:17 AM »

Quote from: khwaish on June 19, 2012, 01:34:16 PM

Saheb...Lajawaaaaab!!!!

Kya Kehne....Itni Gehri Baatein Kam se Kam LafzoN Mein Keh Dena Koi Aapse Seekhe...Bahut Bahut Aur bahuttttttttttttttt Khooob

BAHUT BAHUT SHUKRIYA , KHWAISH JI . DUAAEIN.


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Re: SAANP AAKHIR SAANP HI NIKLA ................. HASAN

«Reply #35 on: June 24, 2012, 11:49:33 AM »

Quote from: F.H.SIDDIQUI on June 22, 2012, 04:37:52 PM

behr aur rawani ke hisaab se merea misra bhi theek hai par. choice aapki hai.. aap ahle ghazal hai.... actualy mai muhaware pe dhyaan de raha tha... khair... apni apni rai ho sakti hai ..

-- aur sahi waali baat to.. example mere pas na ... "sahi" ke liye hai na hi "sahiH" ke liye ....

maine ek sher likhaa tha ..

ajab log haiN aur ajab khaahisheN
ghalat ko bhi sab kuch sahi chahiye"

to mujhe "sahi" pe toka gaya tha.. isliye maine aapko ye baat kahi ...

jinhone mujhe tokaa... mai unki bata taal nahi saktaa ... to socha shayed aapse kuch maloomaat ho... isliye kaha

bas itna hi likhte raheN


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Re: SAANP AAKHIR SAANP HI NIKLA ................. HASAN

«Reply #36 on: June 24, 2012, 04:25:23 PM »

SHUKRIYA , SHIHAB MIYAN . AAP BHI CHUST MAST AUR SWASTH RAHEIN .

Quote from: Shihab on June 20, 2012, 06:19:36 PM

kya kehne Hasan Sahab Kya Wah
Bahut Bahut Jhub Janaab...

ALLAH pak Aapko Chust, Mast, Aur Swast Rakhey Aameen...
Shad o Aabaad Rahiye...

Shihab


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Re: SAANP AAKHIR SAANP HI NIKLA ................. HASAN

«Reply #37 on: June 26, 2012, 09:20:58 AM »

Quote from: janumanu on June 24, 2012, 11:49:33 AM

Bhai , bahut achha laga aap se baat kar ke . Aapke
tabsiron aur mashviron ka hamesha khair maqdam hai .
Bahut khubsurat sher aap ne inayat kiya hai. Isi
se milta julta apni eik puraani ghazal ka sher pesh
karte hue ikhtitaam karta hoon :

KaheiN ghalat ko ghlat maana itna zarf naheeN,
Magar yeh kya ki ghalat hi kaheiN Sahi ko log


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Re: SAANP AAKHIR SAANP HI NIKLA ................. HASAN

«Reply #38 on: June 28, 2012, 04:21:40 AM »

very very nice


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Re: SAANP AAKHIR SAANP HI NIKLA ................. HASAN

«Reply #39 on: June 28, 2012, 01:45:58 PM »

THANKS , LIVINGBYTHEDAY JI .

Quote from: livingbytheday on June 28, 2012, 04:21:40 AM

very very nice


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