Samajh lena ke wo hoon main

by angel4u on July 10, 2008, 02:44:21 AM
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«Reply #15 on: July 12, 2008, 07:52:18 AM »
Nice one..

Teri baaton ki baahon mein simat aaye jo khamoshi,
Sadayein de tanhaiyon mein jo aansuon ki nami,
Waqt ke us pehlu mein chum jaye teri palkon ko,
masoom si koi sabah to samajh lena wo hoon main...
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«Reply #16 on: July 12, 2008, 08:19:18 AM »
angel ji aur bekarar ji,

bahut badhiya...dard aur khumaar khoob saath saath chala rahe he. badhtey rahiye..kadradaano ki kami nahi he.

Prateek

(matra itna samjha dijiye--ki ''woh main hu'' mein aakhir kaun he--angel ji ya bekarar ji aap?)
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«Reply #17 on: July 12, 2008, 08:59:44 AM »

bahoot achcha likha angel.....

prateek bhai agar aap ye thread padh rahe hain..tasalli se to hum to sareaam apne apne hone ke lakshan bata hi rahe hain....
jo likh rahe hain gar kabhi aisa ho to
samajh lena ke wo hoon mai...

kabhi karvaton me kat jaaye,
raat aur neend na aaye
kabhi neendon se uth baitho
jo dekho khwab achcha sa,
use fir khwab na kahna,
samajh lena ke wo hun mai..
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«Reply #18 on: July 12, 2008, 09:20:28 AM »
Quote from: bekarar on July 12, 2008, 08:59:44 AM
bahoot achcha likha angel.....

prateek bhai agar aap ye thread padh rahe hain..tasalli se to hum to sareaam apne apne hone ke lakshan bata hi rahe hain....
jo likh rahe hain gar kabhi aisa ho to
samajh lena ke wo hoon mai...

kabhi karvaton me kat jaaye,
raat aur neend na aaye
kabhi neendon se uth baitho
jo dekho khwab achcha sa,
use fir khwab na kahna,
samajh lena ke wo hun mai..
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bekarar ji,

janaab..bilkul tassali se padha he.

hur ehsaas hota he mujhe
jo kuch kaha he aapne--(aap dono ne)
kabhi lagta he ki tum ho
kabhi lagta woh he saamne
asmanjasta bani hui he
budh gayi baichainiyaan
vyaakulta mein pooch betha
kaun aaya mujhko thaamne!

(mera likha kuch anaavashyak sa lug raha he..yadi paane ki shobha ghat rahi ho-(mera likha mehaj mazaak he durd aur khummar mein doobi kavita ke beech mein) to isey delete kare...koi aapatti nahi he zara si bhee.

Prateek
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«Reply #19 on: July 12, 2008, 09:56:22 AM »
Quote from: Prateek Mardia on July 12, 2008, 09:20:28 AM
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bekarar ji,

janaab..bilkul tassali se padha he.

hur ehsaas hota he mujhe
jo kuch kaha he aapne--(aap dono ne)
kabhi lagta he ki tum ho
kabhi lagta woh he saamne
asmanjasta bani hui he
budh gayi baichainiyaan
vyaakulta mein pooch betha
kaun aaya mujhko thaamne!

(mera likha kuch anaavashyak sa lug raha he..yadi paane ki shobha ghat rahi ho-(mera likha mehaj mazaak he durd aur khummar mein doobi kavita ke beech mein) to isey delete kare...koi aapatti nahi he zara si bhee.

Prateek




kisi bhi shayri ke panne par aapki upasthiti matr se hi us panne ki shobha badh jaati hai....to zanab yahan to aapne kuch likha bhi hai.....
nayab lafzon me sabhi logon ki housala afzai ka behtreen dhang gar kisi se sikha ja sakta hai to......
samajh lena ke wo hai....prateek ji... icon_salut
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«Reply #20 on: July 12, 2008, 01:47:12 PM »
Quote from: Prateek Mardia on July 12, 2008, 08:19:18 AM
angel ji aur bekarar ji,

bahut badhiya...dard aur khumaar khoob saath saath chala rahe he. badhtey rahiye..kadradaano ki kami nahi he.

Prateek

(matra itna samjha dijiye--ki ''woh main hu'' mein aakhir kaun he--angel ji ya bekarar ji aap?)

Thanks sahi kaha bekarar ji ne...
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«Reply #21 on: July 12, 2008, 01:49:28 PM »
Quote from: Prateek Mardia on July 12, 2008, 09:20:28 AM
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bekarar ji,

janaab..bilkul tassali se padha he.

hur ehsaas hota he mujhe
jo kuch kaha he aapne--(aap dono ne)
kabhi lagta he ki tum ho
kabhi lagta woh he saamne
asmanjasta bani hui he
budh gayi baichainiyaan
vyaakulta mein pooch betha
kaun aaya mujhko thaamne!

(mera likha kuch anaavashyak sa lug raha he..yadi paane ki shobha ghat rahi ho-(mera likha mehaj mazaak he durd aur khummar mein doobi kavita ke beech mein) to isey delete kare...koi aapatti nahi he zara si bhee.

Prateek




Please aisa na kahein, har ek lafz umda hai.
aapne yahan apne keemti lafz rakhe isse badi baat koi nahi,
Thanks a lot...
and wonderful.
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«Reply #22 on: July 12, 2008, 01:50:06 PM »
Quote from: bekarar on July 12, 2008, 09:56:22 AM
kisi bhi shayri ke panne par aapki upasthiti matr se hi us panne ki shobha badh jaati hai....to zanab yahan to aapne kuch likha bhi hai.....
nayab lafzon me sabhi logon ki housala afzai ka behtreen dhang gar kisi se sikha ja sakta hai to......
samajh lena ke wo hai....prateek ji... icon_salut

Rightly said... Usual Smile
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«Reply #23 on: July 12, 2008, 01:54:15 PM »
Aap logon jaisa umda to nahi, bas thodi likhne ki koshish karungi...

Zara sa jo dil behek jaaye tumhara,
saansein mehekne lage beshumaar jab,
dard jo sur mein koi gaane lage,
tanhaiyon ki payal gungunane lage,
samajh lena wo hoon main,

Kabhi hawaon mein, kabhi fizaon mein,
jo gunj uthe tumhari awaz ki,
samajh lena wo hoon main,

Kabhi suna suna sa jo lagne lage zindagi ka kaarvaan,
Manzilon ka pata to ho, raasta na ho par uske darmiyaan,
reh guzar achanak sa koi mil jaaye un raahon mein,
samajh lena wo hoon main....
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«Reply #24 on: July 13, 2008, 03:23:22 PM »
bekarar bhai angel jee aur Prateek ji aap tamam ne bohut hi umda or kamaal ka likha he, ise jaari rakhiye.  Applause  Applause  Applause

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«Reply #25 on: July 13, 2008, 03:54:27 PM »
are wah randeri sahab...........aapka to andaaz hi nirala hai......
shukriya is nayab tarike se housala afzai ka...........
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«Reply #26 on: July 13, 2008, 04:01:05 PM »
Quote from: bekarar on July 13, 2008, 03:54:27 PM
are wah randeri sahab...........aapka to andaaz hi nirala hai......
shukriya is nayab tarike se housala afzai ka...........

Daad qubuul karne or uspar tareef karne ka shukriya.
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«Reply #27 on: July 13, 2008, 04:05:38 PM »
zanab sirf shukriya se kaam nahi chalega...aapko kuch likhna bhi hoga......
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«Reply #28 on: July 13, 2008, 04:54:34 PM »
Quote from: bekarar on July 13, 2008, 04:05:38 PM
zanab sirf shukriya se kaam nahi chalega...aapko kuch likhna bhi hoga......

Aap ka hukam sar aankhoN par janaab.
Ek kamzor si koshish, shayad kisi qaabil ho.

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«Reply #29 on: July 13, 2008, 05:07:46 PM »
 Applause Applause Applause
hum to bus isi ke talab gaar the zanab..wah
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