Taish- aankh me utraa to PAANI ho gaya...!!

by ghayal_shayar on July 28, 2013, 12:24:05 AM
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marhoom bahayaat
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«Reply #15 on: July 29, 2013, 01:14:34 AM »
Quote from: Taish on July 28, 2013, 12:24:05 AM
toota dil teri nishaani ho gaya,
ishq dekho kitna faanii* ho gaya...

*kamjor.

Kal talak aaNsu nageene the mere,
Aaj apna khoon paani ho gaya...

bhoolta rehta jise tha raat din,
yaad mujhko vo zubaani ho gaya...

vo hari saari pehan kar aayi hai,
rang mehfil ka bhi dhaani ho gaya...

chaahte the sab bulandi par jise,
gir gaya to ik kahaani ho gaya...

vo nawaazeN roz mujhko ghum naye,
meri khaatir kitna daani* ho gaya...

*daan karne waala.

jal raha tha ishq mere dil meN jo,
aaNkh meN utraa to paani ho gaya...

baat teri baandh di dil ne mere,
mera saani, tera saani ho gaya...


ye ek sher feedback ke liye ghazal se baahar rakha hai...

ishq ka ab dard maani ho gaya,
tu jo meri nathwani* ho gaya,

*durbalta.

nice,sir
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ghayal_shayar
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«Reply #16 on: July 29, 2013, 04:31:20 AM »
Quote from: aqsh on July 28, 2013, 11:33:45 AM
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waah waah taishji. behad khoooob.gehre ehsaas se saji hui hai aapki ghazal.

bhoolta rehta jise tha raat din,
yaad mujhko vo zubaani ho gaya...
Awesomeeeeeeeeeee

chaahte the sab bulandi par jise,
gir gaya to ik kahaani ho gaya...
bahut khooooooooooob

vo nawaazeN roz mujhko ghum naye,
meri khaatir kitna daani* ho gaya...
kya baat hai

jal raha tha ishq mere dil meN jo,
aaNkh meN utraa to paani ho gaya...
khoobsurat khayal

baat teri baandh di dil ne mere,
mera saani, tera saani ho gaya...
superb
 Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley. Hazaron dili daaaaaaaaaaaad is kalaam par..

aqsh ji aapki tareef dekh kar kabhi kabhi ye bhram ho jaata hai ki main shayar h gaya, aapki is izzat afzaayi ka main tah-e-dil se shukraguzaar hun, umeed kara hun aapka yahi pyar mujhe aage bhi milta rahegaaa....!!
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«Reply #17 on: July 29, 2013, 07:48:05 AM »
waah waah waaaaaaaaaaaaaaah Bhushan jee bahut bahut khoob, maza aa gaya padh ke. 4th, 6th aur 7th sher bahut pasand aae. Dil se daad-o-mubarakbaad aur ek Rau qubool kijiye. Aur jo feedback k liye sher likha hai wo utna nahiN jaNch raha hai, mere khyaal se isse ghazal meiN shaamil naa kareN to behtar hoga.
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«Reply #18 on: July 29, 2013, 02:13:09 PM »
Quote from: SaniyaS on July 28, 2013, 07:45:58 PM
Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause badhiya hai

saniya ji hausla afzaayi ka shukriya....!!
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«Reply #19 on: July 29, 2013, 04:30:42 PM »
Quote from: Iqtedar on July 28, 2013, 07:55:50 PM
Bahot khooob as usual...
 Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause

shukriya iqtedar bhai, bas aage bhi aap yuNhi saath dete rahiye...
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«Reply #20 on: July 29, 2013, 07:08:48 PM »
behad khoobsoorat dheron daad
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«Reply #21 on: July 30, 2013, 03:21:59 PM »
Quote from: nishi gahlaut on July 29, 2013, 01:03:53 AM
very nice... Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause

pasand karne ka shukriya nishi ji, aap aage bhi bas yuNhi saath deti raheN...!!
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«Reply #22 on: July 31, 2013, 07:12:01 PM »
Quote from: marhoom bahayaat on July 29, 2013, 01:14:34 AM
nice,sir

thanks for liking sir...!!
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«Reply #23 on: August 01, 2013, 09:17:07 PM »
Quote from: Iftakhar Ahmad on July 29, 2013, 07:48:05 AM
waah waah waaaaaaaaaaaaaaah Bhushan jee bahut bahut khoob, maza aa gaya padh ke. 4th, 6th aur 7th sher bahut pasand aae. Dil se daad-o-mubarakbaad aur ek Rau qubool kijiye. Aur jo feedback k liye sher likha hai wo utna nahiN jaNch raha hai, mere khyaal se isse ghazal meiN shaamil naa kareN to behtar hoga.

janaab aapki tareef sar aankhon pe, aapki salah pe bhi alam hai, aur behad khushi milti hai jab aap jaise shayri ke qadrdaan tareef karte haiN, umeed karta hun ki aapka saath aage bhi yuNhi milta rahegaa...
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«Reply #24 on: August 01, 2013, 09:17:57 PM »
Quote from: sksaini4 on July 29, 2013, 07:08:48 PM
behad khoobsoorat dheron daad

daad aur hausla afzaayi ka shukriya saini sir... Usual Smile
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