tamam hui jaati hai

by bekarar on August 19, 2009, 07:15:03 PM
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mustakbil ki tammannayen sabhi nakaam hui jaati hai
be-sabab safar me jindagi tamam hui jaati hai,

gaf-lat kahun ise ya haqikat jindagi ki,
sahar ke sitaaron me bhi ab shaam najar aati hai,

watan choda tha maine kamyabiyon ki talash me,
nakamyabiya is pardes me meri pah-chaan hui jaati hai,

ashqon ko dikhava kahte hain aur har aah ko bahana
meri hasti bhi ab dil bah-laane ka saman hui jaati hai,

muskara ke padhna "BEKARAR" har ek ashar ko,
ghazlen teri rulaane ke liye badnaam hui jaati hai
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«Reply #1 on: August 19, 2009, 07:50:23 PM »
Wah wah bahut khoob Bekarar ji,really touching and mindblowing creation.
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thegrimreaper
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«Reply #2 on: August 19, 2009, 08:04:53 PM »
maan gaye Bekraar ji
kya khoob likha hai

Applause Applause
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Pooja
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«Reply #3 on: August 19, 2009, 08:14:24 PM »
Quote from: bekarar on August 19, 2009, 07:15:03 PM
mustakbil ki tammannayen sabhi nakaam hui jaati hai
be-sabab safar me jindagi tamam hui jaati hai,

gaf-lat kahun ise ya haqikat jindagi ki,
sahar ke sitaaron me bhi ab shaam najar aati hai,

watan choda tha maine kamyabiyon ki talash me,
nakamyabiya is pardes me meri pah-chaan hui jaati hai,

ashqon ko dikhava kahte hain aur har aah ko bahana
meri hasti bhi ab dil bah-laane ka saman hui jaati hai,

muskara ke padhna "BEKARAR" har ek ashar ko,
ghazlen teri rulaane ke liye badnaam hui jaati hai




wah wah wah kaya baat hai bekarar ji!! ek ek shabd , ek ek line.. kamaal.. kamaal aor kamaal ka likha hai apne!! bahoot khoob!!
Likhe bina raha nahi ja raha hai... janti hu..app jitna acha to nahi... phir bhi kalam ne jo likhwaya... likhne ja rahi hu

Nakaam sahi, per bahoot kuch kiya hai hasil
Safar ki her ek yaad sath hue jaati hai

Haqiqat hai zindagi ki, is se kaya shikayat kare ab
Her shikayat, zindagi ke samne, bejaar hue jaati hai

Watan ho koi bhi, kismet to her pal rahti hai apni
Takdeer se he ab to her pal, takraar hue jaati hai

Khud se chupana hota hai mushkil, is jahan main
Khud se he khud, ek ab deewar hue jaati hai

Machine ban gai zindagi kab kaha kho gai  Pooja
Is sawal ke jawab main, khud Pooja Gumnaam hue jaati hai…
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thegrimreaper
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«Reply #4 on: August 19, 2009, 08:28:38 PM »
Quote from: Pooja on August 19, 2009, 08:14:24 PM
wah wah wah kaya baat hai bekarar ji!! ek ek shabd , ek ek line.. kamaal.. kamaal aor kamaal ka likha hai apne!! bahoot khoob!!
Likhe bina raha nahi ja raha hai... janti hu..app jitna acha to nahi... phir bhi kalam ne jo likhwaya... likhne ja rahi hu

Nakaam sahi, per bahoot kuch kiya hai hasil
Safar ki her ek yaad sath hue jaati hai

Haqiqat hai zindagi ki, is se kaya shikayat kare ab
Her shikayat, zindagi ke samne, bejaar hue jaati hai

Watan ho koi bhi, kismet to her pal rahti hai apni
Takdeer se he ab to her pal, takraar hue jaati hai

Khud se chupana hota hai mushkil, is jahan main
Khud se he khud, ek ab deewar hue jaati hai

Machine ban gai zindagi kab kaha kho gai  Pooja
Is sawal ke jawab main, khud Pooja Gumnaam hue jaati hai…




bhaut hi accha likha hai Pooja ji loved the lines

"Khud se chupana hota hai mushkil, is jahan main
Khud se he khud, ek ab deewar hue jaati hai"
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«Reply #5 on: August 19, 2009, 08:33:44 PM »
Quote from: thegrimreaper on August 19, 2009, 08:28:38 PM

bhaut hi accha likha hai Pooja ji loved the lines

"Khud se chupana hota hai mushkil, is jahan main
Khud se he khud, ek ab deewar hue jaati hai"


bahoot bahoot shukaria thegrimreaper ji!!
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«Reply #6 on: August 20, 2009, 02:45:55 AM »
Quote from: bekarar on August 19, 2009, 07:15:03 PM
mustakbil ki tammannayen sabhi nakaam hui jaati hai
be-sabab safar me jindagi tamam hui jaati hai,

gaf-lat kahun ise ya haqikat jindagi ki,
sahar ke sitaaron me bhi ab shaam najar aati hai,

watan choda tha maine kamyabiyon ki talash me,
nakamyabiya is pardes me meri pah-chaan hui jaati hai,

ashqon ko dikhava kahte hain aur har aah ko bahana
meri hasti bhi ab dil bah-laane ka saman hui jaati hai,

muskara ke padhna "BEKARAR" har ek ashar ko,
ghazlen teri rulaane ke liye badnaam hui jaati hai




Waah Waah Bahoot Bahoot Khoob Sanjeev Ji... Bahoot hi Behtareen pehkash... Sach mea bahoot hi Khoob Likha hai .. Bahoot Khoob!

Main khud ko rok nahi pa rahi iss topic pe likhne se par waqt ki kami hai... Koshish hai jarur likhungi...
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«Reply #7 on: August 20, 2009, 02:47:24 AM »
Quote from: Pooja on August 19, 2009, 08:14:24 PM
wah wah wah kaya baat hai bekarar ji!! ek ek shabd , ek ek line.. kamaal.. kamaal aor kamaal ka likha hai apne!! bahoot khoob!!
Likhe bina raha nahi ja raha hai... janti hu..app jitna acha to nahi... phir bhi kalam ne jo likhwaya... likhne ja rahi hu

Nakaam sahi, per bahoot kuch kiya hai hasil
Safar ki her ek yaad sath hue jaati hai

Haqiqat hai zindagi ki, is se kaya shikayat kare ab
Her shikayat, zindagi ke samne, bejaar hue jaati hai

Watan ho koi bhi, kismet to her pal rahti hai apni
Takdeer se he ab to her pal, takraar hue jaati hai

Khud se chupana hota hai mushkil, is jahan main
Khud se he khud, ek ab deewar hue jaati hai

Machine ban gai zindagi kab kaha kho gai  Pooja
Is sawal ke jawab main, khud Pooja Gumnaam hue jaati hai…




Waah waah Pooja di .. SubanAllah Kya khoob likha hai.. specially the last four lines.. Dil ko choo gai.. Bahoot bahoot Khoob Di
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deepika_divya
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«Reply #8 on: August 20, 2009, 02:48:03 AM »
Quote from: thegrimreaper on August 19, 2009, 08:28:38 PM

bhaut hi accha likha hai Pooja ji loved the lines

"Khud se chupana hota hai mushkil, is jahan main
Khud se he khud, ek ab deewar hue jaati hai"


Bahoot Bahoot Khoob Likha hai Grimreaper ji.. Bahoot Khoob!
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Roja
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«Reply #9 on: August 20, 2009, 02:49:05 AM »
Quote from: bekarar on August 19, 2009, 07:15:03 PM
mustakbil ki tammannayen sabhi nakaam hui jaati hai
be-sabab safar me jindagi tamam hui jaati hai,

gaf-lat kahun ise ya haqikat jindagi ki,
sahar ke sitaaron me bhi ab shaam najar aati hai,

watan choda tha maine kamyabiyon ki talash me,
nakamyabiya is pardes me meri pah-chaan hui jaati hai,

ashqon ko dikhava kahte hain aur har aah ko bahana
meri hasti bhi ab dil bah-laane ka saman hui jaati hai,

muskara ke padhna "BEKARAR" har ek ashar ko,
ghazlen teri rulaane ke liye badnaam hui jaati hai




Bahut bahut accha likha hai aapne bhaiya. Daad hazir hai  Usual Smile
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«Reply #10 on: August 20, 2009, 03:07:19 AM »
Wah wah bahut khoob Pooja ji and Reaper ji,beautiful lines.excellent. icon_thumleft Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #11 on: August 20, 2009, 03:15:40 AM »
Quote from: madhuwesh on August 19, 2009, 07:50:23 PM
Wah wah bahut khoob Bekarar ji,really touching and mindblowing creation.
 icon_thumleft Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause

bahoot shukriya madhu ji aapne humesha ki tarah housala afzai ki...
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«Reply #12 on: August 20, 2009, 03:16:53 AM »
Quote from: thegrimreaper on August 19, 2009, 08:04:53 PM
maan gaye Bekraar ji
kya khoob likha hai

Applause Applause
bahoot bahoot shukriya janab...mashkoor hun aapka...ki aapko achcha laga
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«Reply #13 on: August 20, 2009, 03:24:12 AM »
Quote from: Pooja on August 19, 2009, 08:14:24 PM
wah wah wah kaya baat hai bekarar ji!! ek ek shabd , ek ek line.. kamaal.. kamaal aor kamaal ka likha hai apne!! bahoot khoob!!
Likhe bina raha nahi ja raha hai... janti hu..app jitna acha to nahi... phir bhi kalam ne jo likhwaya... likhne ja rahi hu

Nakaam sahi, per bahoot kuch kiya hai hasil
Safar ki her ek yaad sath hue jaati hai

Haqiqat hai zindagi ki, is se kaya shikayat kare ab
Her shikayat, zindagi ke samne, bejaar hue jaati hai

Watan ho koi bhi, kismet to her pal rahti hai apni
Takdeer se he ab to her pal, takraar hue jaati hai

Khud se chupana hota hai mushkil, is jahan main
Khud se he khud, ek ab deewar hue jaati hai

Machine ban gai zindagi kab kaha kho gai  Pooja
Is sawal ke jawab main, khud Pooja Gumnaam hue jaati hai…



pooja ji,
aapka tah-e-dil se shukriya aapne humesha ki tarah mera housala badhaya
aur aapne jo likha hai ki aap mere jitna achcha nahi likh payengi......sahi likha hai.. kyunki aapne mujhse achcha nahi balki bahoot bahoot achcha likhe hai.
bilkul makool jawab hai aapka....
daad kabool karen.....
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«Reply #14 on: August 20, 2009, 03:26:10 AM »
Quote from: Sophi on August 20, 2009, 02:45:55 AM
Waah Waah Bahoot Bahoot Khoob Sanjeev Ji... Bahoot hi Behtareen pehkash... Sach mea bahoot hi Khoob Likha hai .. Bahoot Khoob!

Main khud ko rok nahi pa rahi iss topic pe likhne se par waqt ki kami hai... Koshish hai jarur likhungi...

shukriya sophi ji,
is rachna ko aapki sarahna mili...intzaar rahega is panne ko aapke shabdon ka.
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