tamam hui jaati hai

by bekarar on August 19, 2009, 07:15:03 PM
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«Reply #15 on: August 20, 2009, 03:27:20 AM »


Bahut bahut accha likha hai aapne bhaiya. Daad hazir hai  Usual Smile

bahoot shukriya roja sis
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«Reply #16 on: August 20, 2009, 04:03:14 AM »
pooja ji,
aapka tah-e-dil se shukriya aapne humesha ki tarah mera housala badhaya
aur aapne jo likha hai ki aap mere jitna achcha nahi likh payengi......sahi likha hai.. kyunki aapne mujhse achcha nahi balki bahoot bahoot achcha likhe hai.
bilkul makool jawab hai aapka....
daad kabool karen.....




Tahe dil se shukaria dost.. dil rakhna koi apse sikhe....
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«Reply #17 on: August 20, 2009, 07:16:11 AM »
mustakbil ki tammannayen sabhi nakaam hui jaati hai
be-sabab safar me jindagi tamam hui jaati hai,

gaf-lat kahun ise ya haqikat jindagi ki,
sahar ke sitaaron me bhi ab shaam najar aati hai,

watan choda tha maine kamyabiyon ki talash me,
nakamyabiya is pardes me meri pah-chaan hui jaati hai,

ashqon ko dikhava kahte hain aur har aah ko bahana
meri hasti bhi ab dil bah-laane ka saman hui jaati hai,

muskara ke padhna "BEKARAR" har ek ashar ko,
ghazlen teri rulaane ke liye badnaam hui jaati hai



bahut achche bekarar ji,ye "firaq" ki adavat aapki ghazalon ka guhar hai, ise hamesha jahir rakhiye har as_ar mein nikhar aa jayega.umda work,best wishes.
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«Reply #18 on: August 20, 2009, 02:05:45 PM »
mustakbil ki tammannayen sabhi nakaam hui jaati hai
be-sabab safar me jindagi tamam hui jaati hai,

gaf-lat kahun ise ya haqikat jindagi ki,
sahar ke sitaaron me bhi ab shaam najar aati hai,

watan choda tha maine kamyabiyon ki talash me,
nakamyabiya is pardes me meri pah-chaan hui jaati hai,

ashqon ko dikhava kahte hain aur har aah ko bahana
meri hasti bhi ab dil bah-laane ka saman hui jaati hai,

muskara ke padhna "BEKARAR" har ek ashar ko,
ghazlen teri rulaane ke liye badnaam hui jaati hai




Ufff....Sanjeev Ji..itni na-umeedi kyun........ Bohot achcha likha hai apne........Khuda aap ko har qadam pe kamyaabiyon se nawaze, apki har mushkil asaan kare, ameen.

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«Reply #19 on: August 20, 2009, 02:50:29 PM »
Wah wah Bekararji badi achhi pesh-kash hai aapki... Applause Applause Applause

Koshishe sohrat paane ki sab nakaam hui jaati hai
Ab tou meri muskurahat bhi bejaan hui jaati hai
Socha tha suraj-chand sa roshan naam karunga mai
Par tootte taaron si meri pahchan hui jaati hai
mustakbil ki tammannayen sabhi nakaam hui jaati hai
be-sabab safar me jindagi tamam hui jaati hai,

gaf-lat kahun ise ya haqikat jindagi ki,
sahar ke sitaaron me bhi ab shaam najar aati hai,

watan choda tha maine kamyabiyon ki talash me,
nakamyabiya is pardes me meri pah-chaan hui jaati hai,

ashqon ko dikhava kahte hain aur har aah ko bahana
meri hasti bhi ab dil bah-laane ka saman hui jaati hai,

muskara ke padhna "BEKARAR" har ek ashar ko,
ghazlen teri rulaane ke liye badnaam hui jaati hai



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«Reply #20 on: August 20, 2009, 04:01:23 PM »
mustakbil ki tammannayen sabhi nakaam hui jaati hai
be-sabab safar me jindagi tamam hui jaati hai,

gaf-lat kahun ise ya haqikat jindagi ki,
sahar ke sitaaron me bhi ab shaam najar aati hai,

watan choda tha maine kamyabiyon ki talash me,
nakamyabiya is pardes me meri pah-chaan hui jaati hai,

ashqon ko dikhava kahte hain aur har aah ko bahana
meri hasti bhi ab dil bah-laane ka saman hui jaati hai,

muskara ke padhna "BEKARAR" har ek ashar ko,
ghazlen teri rulaane ke liye badnaam hui jaati hai




 Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley

Bhaut Bahut Bahut Khooob Sanjeev Bro...

Har Ek Ashaar Apne Hisse Ki Dastaan keh Raha Tha..

Bahut Bahut Khoob..Aapki Izzazat Ho To Zaroor Kuch Likhunga..

Excellent Bro... Thumbs UP
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«Reply #21 on: August 20, 2009, 04:04:28 PM »
Wah wah Bekararji badi achhi pesh-kash hai aapki... Applause Applause Applause

Koshishe sohrat paane ki sab nakaam hui jaati hai
Ab tou meri muskurahat bhi bejaan hui jaati hai
Socha tha suraj-chand sa roshan naam karunga mai
Par tootte taaron si meri pahchan hui jaati hai

wah kaya baat hai smardia ji, bahoot khoob.. char line main sab kuch kah jaana,,, kash main sikh saku apki tarah likhna... bahoot khoob!!
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«Reply #22 on: August 20, 2009, 04:05:10 PM »

Waah waah Pooja di .. SubanAllah Kya khoob likha hai.. specially the last four lines.. Dil ko choo gai.. Bahoot bahoot Khoob Di


Thank you so much Sophi!!!
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«Reply #23 on: August 20, 2009, 04:05:34 PM »
wah wah wah kaya baat hai bekarar ji!! ek ek shabd , ek ek line.. kamaal.. kamaal aor kamaal ka likha hai apne!! bahoot khoob!!
Likhe bina raha nahi ja raha hai... janti hu..app jitna acha to nahi... phir bhi kalam ne jo likhwaya... likhne ja rahi hu

Nakaam sahi, per bahoot kuch kiya hai hasil
Safar ki her ek yaad sath hue jaati hai

Haqiqat hai zindagi ki, is se kaya shikayat kare ab
Her shikayat, zindagi ke samne, bejaar hue jaati hai

Watan ho koi bhi, kismet to her pal rahti hai apni
Takdeer se he ab to her pal, takraar hue jaati hai

Khud se chupana hota hai mushkil, is jahan main
Khud se he khud, ek ab deewar hue jaati hai

Machine ban gai zindagi kab kaha kho gai  Pooja
Is sawal ke jawab main, khud Pooja Gumnaam hue jaati hai…



Bahut Bahut Khoob Pooja.. Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley

Bahut Hi Khoobsurat Addition..
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«Reply #24 on: August 20, 2009, 04:06:20 PM »
Wah wah bahut khoob Pooja ji and Reaper ji,beautiful lines.excellent. icon_thumleft Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause

Meri aor sanjeev ji ki taraf se bahoot bahoot shukaria Madhu ji!!!

Sanjeev ji, maine apki taraf se bhi jawab de diya tongue3
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«Reply #25 on: August 20, 2009, 04:08:31 PM »
Bahut Bahut Khoob Pooja.. Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley

Bahut Hi Khoobsurat Addition..


Thank you Khwaish ji !!!
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«Reply #26 on: August 20, 2009, 06:57:54 PM »
bahut achche bekarar ji,ye "firaq" ki adavat aapki ghazalon ka guhar hai, ise hamesha jahir rakhiye har as_ar mein nikhar aa jayega.umda work,best wishes.

bahoot shukriya saaz sahab....
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«Reply #27 on: August 20, 2009, 07:24:37 PM »

Ufff....Sanjeev Ji..itni na-umeedi kyun........ Bohot achcha likha hai apne........Khuda aap ko har qadam pe kamyaabiyon se nawaze, apki har mushkil asaan kare, ameen.

talat....
bahoot shukriya aapki dua-on ke liye jo har waqt musibaton me mere saath hoti hi hai.....
is ghazal ko maine kin haalaton me likha mai zara uske baare me yahan bata dun....
mere office ki shifting ka kaam chal raha tha aur mujhe kuch "majdooron" ki jaroorat thi loading-unloading ke liye....to yahan SURAT (gujraat) me is kism ke kaam karne ke liye majdoor ek fix jagah par ikattha hote hain..jahan se koi bhi apne kaam ke hisaab unhe hire kar sakta hai.......chunki suraj dhalne ki taiyaari me tha...to us fix jagah par mujhe sirf char majdoor hi mile jinme ek kuch umr-daraj aadmi bhi tha.....mere kaam ke liye mujhe sirf teen ki hi jaroorat thi....to un chaar admiyon ne apas me ye faisla kiya ki ye boodha kuch jyada kaam nahi kar paayega ise yahin chod diya jaaye.......khair jab unka aapas me hi jhagda hone laga to maine chaaron ko hire kar liya kyunki time kam tha aur kaam jyaada...
jab kaam hone laga to us boodhe ne bhi khasa kaam kiya aur wo shakal aur haav-bhav se kuch majakiya sa bhi laga mujhe....baaton - baaton me usake beete ateet ke kuch panne bhi khule...khair baat aai-gai hui..mera kaam khatm hua aur unhe maine vida kiya....
kal shaam ko kuch andhera sa hone laga tha aur mai traffic me fansa hua desh ki yatayaat vyavstha ko kos rahah tha ki mere just aage khde hue tempo par kapde ki potaliyon ke beech mujhe wahi boodha maskhara aadmi baitha dikhai diya jise maine mere office shifting ke samay hire kiya tha...maine horn baja-kar uska dhyan apni aur khichna chaha.....lekin wo upar aasman ki taraf dekhta hua kuch soch raha tha........samne mai head light ki roshni se uski aankhon ko saaf dekh paa raha tha...us maskhare boodhe ki aankhon me us samay mujhe pata nahi kyun bahoot dard nazar aaya.....veerana najar aaya....mano ki wo bhagwaqn se pooch raha ho ki ab jindagi ki shaam me bhi kya mere achche din aayenge ya fir mujhe bina kisi hasil ke hi is duniya se jaana hoga?
maine likhne ki koshish ki hai us samay uske man me kya vichar honge....mai poora ab bhi nahi likh paaya hun magar maine post kar diya......

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«Reply #28 on: August 20, 2009, 07:26:39 PM »
Wah wah Bekararji badi achhi pesh-kash hai aapki... Applause Applause Applause

Koshishe sohrat paane ki sab nakaam hui jaati hai
Ab tou meri muskurahat bhi bejaan hui jaati hai
Socha tha suraj-chand sa roshan naam karunga mai
Par tootte taaron si meri pahchan hui jaati hai

shukriya s mardia ji..
aapne bhi chaar line behad prbhavshaali likhin hain
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«Reply #29 on: August 20, 2009, 07:28:25 PM »
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Bhaut Bahut Bahut Khooob Sanjeev Bro...

Har Ek Ashaar Apne Hisse Ki Dastaan keh Raha Tha..

Bahut Bahut Khoob..Aapki Izzazat Ho To Zaroor Kuch Likhunga..

Excellent Bro... Thumbs UP


bahoot shukriya khwaish bro.....
aapko padhne ka mujhe intzaar rahega
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