Tere jane ke baad

by mamta bajpai on March 08, 2010, 12:05:45 AM
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saaye ne jab dhoop ka jama pahan liya
hujoom darkhton ka fir saamne to kya

ahasas ki sakht dhoop me rooh tak jhulas gayee
aye abre baran jhoom ke ab barsa to kya

kar gaya mujhko juda mujhse hi woh napaq rooh
gar maseeha baad me fir aaya to kya

rounaqen sab jati rahi ek tere jane ke baad
aaina andhere me mujhko toone dikhlaya to kya
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malli
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«Reply #1 on: March 08, 2010, 02:00:27 AM »
saaye ne jab dhoop ka jama pahan liya
hujoom darkhton ka fir saamne to kya
ahasas ki sakht dhoop me rooh tak jhulas gayee
aye abre baran jhoom ke ab barsa to kya
kar gaya mujhko juda mujhse hi woh napaq rooh
gar maseeha baad me fir aaya to kya
rounaqen sab jati rahi ek tere jane ke baad
aaina andhere me mujhko toone dikhlaya to kya


Bahut khoob..... Mamta ji and welcome to Yoindia
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Rajesh Harish
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«Reply #2 on: March 08, 2010, 03:25:46 AM »
Good one Mamta Ji
Welcome to Yoindia
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riyaz106
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«Reply #3 on: March 08, 2010, 11:15:12 AM »
Welcome to Yoindia Mamta Ji. Bahut hi shandaar likha hai.Padhte hi apna asar chhorti hai. No doubt,ye high level ki shayari hai lekin agar zara behr ka bhi khayal rakhen to sone pe suhaaga. Any way, very nice creation. Keep writing and posting here. Isi mizaj ka mera ek sher arz hai:

Kis darja badlon ne sitam dekh ye kiya
Sehra ko jalta chhor ke aage nikal gaye

saaye ne jab dhoop ka jama pahan liya
hujoom darkhton ka fir saamne to kya
ahasas ki sakht dhoop me rooh tak jhulas gayee
aye abre baran jhoom ke ab barsa to kya
kar gaya mujhko juda mujhse hi woh napaq rooh
gar maseeha baad me fir aaya to kya
rounaqen sab jati rahi ek tere jane ke baad
aaina andhere me mujhko toone dikhlaya to kya

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«Reply #4 on: March 09, 2010, 08:45:11 AM »
"Raunake Sab Jaati rahi Ek tere Jaane Ke Baad
Aaena Andhere Mein Mujhko Tune Dikhlaya To Kya"

Bahut Bahut Khoob!!! Bahut Gehre Jazbaat Pesh Kiye Hai Aapne..Aur yeh sher To Seedha Dil par Utar Aaya

Likhte Rahiye.. Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
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«Reply #5 on: March 19, 2010, 06:25:29 AM »
thanks malli ji
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«Reply #6 on: March 19, 2010, 06:32:25 AM »
khwaishji yaqeenan waqt ne sab sikha diya....thanks ..
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mamta bajpai
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«Reply #7 on: March 19, 2010, 06:34:22 AM »
riyazji bahut bahut dhanyawad
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mamta bajpai
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«Reply #8 on: July 10, 2010, 05:31:50 PM »
MALLI JI!AAJ AAP KA AR FIR SHUKRIYA ADA KARNE KO JEE CHAHTA HAI KYONKI AAJ JAB SAFEPALATNE BAITHI TO PAAYA KI AAP HI YO PAR MUJHE HOUSALA DENE WALE PAHLE SHAKHS HAIN.
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«Reply #9 on: March 30, 2011, 06:46:43 PM »
aur ham aakhri sakhs hain iss post par aapko hosla denewal Usual SmileUsual Smile
””
baarish me bheeg jaane ke baad
    chaata laaya to kya

shama ke bujh jaane ke baad
       parwaana aya to kya

toot kar bikhar jaane ke baad
       aas jagaya to kya
””
wo mai aise hi likh deta hu kuch bhi…dont mind mat karna aap…bura lage to ek bar kahna del kar dunga ji.
””
aapka post acha laga ji
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«Reply #10 on: March 31, 2011, 03:42:50 AM »
Bura lagne jaise koi baat aap ne likhee hee nahee........balkeh shukriyaa ...parh kar mood ekdum fresh ho gayaa...lekin is tarah taang khinchwane kaa bhee badaa mazaa hai.......
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manjum
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«Reply #11 on: March 31, 2011, 03:48:30 AM »
bahut khub mamtaji........ badiya.....

 Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #12 on: March 31, 2011, 04:52:03 AM »
Manju bahut bahut shukriyaa! ye meraa shuruaatee kalaam hai jab bhar  kaa  koi ilm naa thaa....
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«Reply #13 on: March 31, 2011, 04:53:57 AM »
Nirala jee aap ne kahaa ki hum aakhiri shakhs hai is post par houslaa dene wale .......ab mujhe yuN kahnaa padegaa ki aap ne is kalaam ko phir se zinda kar diyaa.......
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«Reply #14 on: March 31, 2011, 04:58:48 AM »
waise aapki jitni rachnae samne aai padi hain... par ab lagta hai khoj khoj ke sari padni padenge... bahut sundar hai...
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