Teri aisi haalat mein nahin dekh sakti.....

by SURESH SANGWAN on August 28, 2010, 09:05:47 PM
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khwaishji ne apni kavita mein jeena chahti thi mein jo darpan humen dikhaya hai,usi ke jawab mein mujhe aisa lagta hai female foeticide par mazboor kyon hain log.ek insaan apni soch kuch hi pal mein nahin badal sakta.zamaane lag jaate hain.ye bhaarat ke lower middle class ki baat hai upper to kuch theek hi hai.
Ek aurat shayad iss paap ke liye issliye mazboor rahi hogi ki Jiska kuch bhi apna nahin hai wo bhala kya kisi apne ko degi.


Nanhi kali mein tujhe khilana chahti to thi,
Par jaise khud hun mazboor tujhe nahin dekh sakti.
Teri pehli kilkaari pe tujhe kyun rota parivaar dikhaun.
Teri pehli muskaan pe kyun aanhen bhartaa jahaan dikhaun.
Tere saath aisa julm mein nahin dekh sakti.

Tujhe dekh log na muskurayenge,kadvi baaten jabaan pe layenge.
Beti ka baap hone pe pal pal tere papa ko dabaayenge.
khud to barson sunti aai,tere baare nahin sun sakti,
Ek baar hi mar ja beti, teri maan tera pal pal marna nahin dekh sakti.
Teri aisi haalat mein nahin dekh sakti.

Teri Taalim ko school nahin koi aaspaas,
zaalim jamaana ,door tujhe mein nahin bhej sakti.
log kahenge sikha de isko chulha chauka,chod padhai,
mein bhi kabhi padh nahi pai ,tujhe ghar par bhi nahin padha sakti.
Teri aisi haalat mein nahin dekh sakti.

log kahenge issase jayada preet na kar ye parai amanat hai,
aglon ki marzi hogi to padha lenge,koi course kara denge,
tu mera jigar hai tujhe gair ki amaanat nahin samajh sakti.
Tu kitni bholi hai tujhe gair ke haathon nahin saump sakti.
Teri aisi haalat mein nahin dekh sakti.
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«Reply #1 on: August 28, 2010, 09:40:49 PM »
Suresh Jee ........ aapne jo likha hai, uski tarif karni sach meiN aasaaN nahi hai... aapne khud ek aisi maaN meiN samaa kar likha hai jo aap nahi woh bahut badi baat hai....... aapki is creation ko salaam janaab...
Aapki writting skill bahut mazboot aur unche kism ki hai...... woh har baat ko socha aapne jo ek ladki ki maa sochti hai... It's realy amazing... Keep it up ...           
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«Reply #2 on: August 28, 2010, 09:43:10 PM »
bahut hi gehraayi se likhi hai aapne ye kavita jiski taarif shabdon me mumkin nahi... dil ko chhoo gayi aapki ye kavita... bahut bahut khoob likha hai aapne Suresh ji...!!!
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«Reply #3 on: August 28, 2010, 09:47:54 PM »
Bahut umda lekh hai aap ki Suresh Ji
Kitna dard bhari mala piroya hai aapne
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«Reply #4 on: August 29, 2010, 05:16:06 AM »
ek maa aur bhi sochti hai suresh ji....
kuch iss tarah shayad.....

Haan main nahin de saki janm tujhe
Kyun…? ye sawaal na kar meri gudiya mujhse
Apne hi haalaton se majbur hun main
Nahin chahti k tu bhi meri tarah ye majburi sahe

Dekh beta apni maa ki haalat ab to tu samjh ja re
Aise jeene se achcha hai k tu meri kokh me hi mar ja re
Tujhe mara dekh main ro lungi ek bar teri yaad me
Par jab tu satai jayegi har roz na seh paungi me har bar re

Chhoti hogi to ladegi apne pyare bhaiyon se
Teri dadi tere dada karenge durvyahwaar tere sath re
Chhoti chhoti baaton pe ye denge tujhe hi taane sau
Man masos kar aayegi tu to tere aansu bhi na ponch paungi main

Har bar tera tiraskaar hoga har guun aur sanskaar me
Log kahenge na surat hai na rup diya tujhe bhagwan ne
Koi na dekhega khubsurat pyar bhara ye dil tera
Na pehchanega koi bhi tere inn uttam sanskar se

Padhai ho ya kaam kaaj ya kisi se bol chaal uthna baithna
Aana jana ghumna firna yahan tak ki manpasand khana
Har baat pe hogi  kai pabandiyan aur rok tok karenge tujhpe
Ek saans bhi  na le payegi tu apni marzi se iss khule aasmaan me

Bol beti aisi zindagi kaise dedun main tujhe
Jahan baap bhai guru bhi dekhen tujhe galat hi nazar se
Badi hogi tab ka dar  nahin.. mujhe to tere bachpan ka dar hai
Kaise karun tujhe ek pal bhi durr bol main apni nazar se

Jii chahta hai k taumra main tujhe apni kokh me hi rakh lun
Jii le tu apni zindagi itna tujhe aatm vishwaas main de dun
Par jo main khud na kabhi juta pai takat apne aap me
Kaise de paungi bachcha wo aatmavishawas main apni jaan me…..!!!
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«Reply #5 on: August 29, 2010, 08:30:56 AM »
kis tarhaa aapka shukriya ada karen samajh nahi aata .
fir bhi parwaaz ji bahut bahut shukriya. icon_flower icon_flower icon_flower
Quote from: ParwaaZ on August 28, 2010, 09:40:49 PM
Suresh Jee ........ aapne jo likha hai, uski tarif karni sach meiN aasaaN nahi hai... aapne khud ek aisi maaN meiN samaa kar likha hai jo aap nahi woh bahut badi baat hai....... aapki is creation ko salaam janaab...
Aapki writting skill bahut mazboot aur unche kism ki hai...... woh har baat ko socha aapne jo ek ladki ki maa sochti hai... It's realy amazing... Keep it up ...           

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«Reply #6 on: August 29, 2010, 08:34:45 AM »
thanks a lot kapil ji aapne apna qeemati  waqt diya.aur apne vichar vayakt kiye. icon_flower icon_flower
 
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«Reply #7 on: August 29, 2010, 09:08:22 AM »
rajesh ji aapka bahut bahut shukriya ki aapne meri kavita ko dhyan se padha,samjha aur pasand kiya. icon_flower icon_flower icon_flower
Quote from: Rajesh Harish on August 28, 2010, 09:47:54 PM
Bahut umda lekh hai aap ki Suresh Ji
Kitna dard bhari mala piroya hai aapne
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«Reply #8 on: August 29, 2010, 09:13:42 AM »
wah wah kasak ji
aapne bahut acha likha ek maan ke zazbaat kis tarha mazboor hote hain.ek ek baat ko aapne ache se likha hai.
bahut umda. icon_flower icon_flower icon_flower

Quote from: *KasaK*....Dil Ki on August 29, 2010, 05:16:06 AM
ek maa aur bhi sochti hai suresh ji....
kuch iss tarah shayad.....

Haan main nahin de saki janm tujhe
Kyun…? ye sawaal na kar meri gudiya mujhse
Apne hi haalaton se majbur hun main
Nahin chahti k tu bhi meri tarah ye majburi sahe

Dekh beta apni maa ki haalat ab to tu samjh ja re
Aise jeene se achcha hai k tu meri kokh me hi mar ja re
Tujhe mara dekh main ro lungi ek bar teri yaad me
Par jab tu satai jayegi har roz na seh paungi me har bar re

Chhoti hogi to ladegi apne pyare bhaiyon se
Teri dadi tere dada karenge durvyahwaar tere sath re
Chhoti chhoti baaton pe ye denge tujhe hi taane sau
Man masos kar aayegi tu to tere aansu bhi na ponch paungi main

Har bar tera tiraskaar hoga har guun aur sanskaar me
Log kahenge na surat hai na rup diya tujhe bhagwan ne
Koi na dekhega khubsurat pyar bhara ye dil tera
Na pehchanega koi bhi tere inn uttam sanskar se

Padhai ho ya kaam kaaj ya kisi se bol chaal uthna baithna
Aana jana ghumna firna yahan tak ki manpasand khana
Har baat pe hogi  kai pabandiyan aur rok tok karenge tujhpe
Ek saans bhi  na le payegi tu apni marzi se iss khule aasmaan me

Bol beti aisi zindagi kaise dedun main tujhe
Jahan baap bhai guru bhi dekhen tujhe galat hi nazar se
Badi hogi tab ka dar  nahin.. mujhe to tere bachpan ka dar hai
Kaise karun tujhe ek pal bhi durr bol main apni nazar se

Jii chahta hai k taumra main tujhe apni kokh me hi rakh lun
Jii le tu apni zindagi itna tujhe aatm vishwaas main de dun
Par jo main khud na kabhi juta pai takat apne aap me
Kaise de paungi bachcha wo aatmavishawas main apni jaan me…..!!!
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«Reply #9 on: August 29, 2010, 09:21:42 AM »
Quote from: SURESH SANGWAN on August 29, 2010, 09:13:42 AM
wah wah kasak ji
aapne bahut acha likha ek maan ke zazbaat kis tarha mazboor hote hain.ek ek baat ko aapne ache se likha hai.
bahut umda. icon_flower icon_flower icon_flower



shukriya suresh ji.....k aapne ise pasand kiya....
aapki kavita k jawab me ye likh to dimaine par ek jhijhak si thi k chote muh badi baat ho gai...
shukriya k aapne meri iss gustakhi ko saraha aur pasand kiya...
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«Reply #10 on: August 29, 2010, 10:07:18 AM »
Nice thoughts and expression.......Gauhar ji.... Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause



Quote from: SURESH SANGWAN on August 28, 2010, 09:05:47 PM
khwaishji ne apni kavita mein jeena chahti thi mein jo darpan humen dikhaya hai,usi ke jawab mein mujhe aisa lagta hai female foeticide par mazboor kyon hain log.ek insaan apni soch kuch hi pal mein nahin badal sakta.zamaane lag jaate hain.ye bhaarat ke lower middle class ki baat hai upper to kuch theek hi hai.
Ek aurat shayad iss paap ke liye issliye mazboor rahi hogi ki Jiska kuch bhi apna nahin hai wo bhala kya kisi apne ko degi.


Nanhi kali mein tujhe khilana chahti to thi,
Par jaise khud hun mazboor tujhe nahin dekh sakti.
Teri pehli kilkaari pe tujhe kyun rota parivaar dikhaun.
Teri pehli muskaan pe kyun aanhen bhartaa jahaan dikhaun.
Tere saath aisa julm mein nahin dekh sakti.

Tujhe dekh log na muskurayenge,kadvi baaten jabaan pe layenge.
Beti ka baap hone pe pal pal tere papa ko dabaayenge.
khud to barson sunti aai,tere baare nahin sun sakti,
Ek baar hi mar ja beti, teri maan tera pal pal marna nahin dekh sakti.
Teri aisi haalat mein nahin dekh sakti.

Teri Taalim ko school nahin koi aaspaas,
zaalim jamaana ,door tujhe mein nahin bhej sakti.
log kahenge sikha de isko chulha chauka,chod padhai,
mein bhi kabhi padh nahi pai ,tujhe ghar par bhi nahin padha sakti.
Teri aisi haalat mein nahin dekh sakti.

log kahenge issase jayada preet na kar ye parai amanat hai,
aglon ki marzi hogi to padha lenge,koi course kara denge,
tu mera jigar hai tujhe gair ki amaanat nahin samajh sakti.
Tu kitni bholi hai tujhe gair ke haathon nahin saump sakti.
Teri aisi haalat mein nahin dekh sakti.
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«Reply #11 on: August 29, 2010, 11:08:20 AM »
thanks many a times koyalji,.me thinks you commentted for the first time on my poems. again a lot of thanks.
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Quote from: KOYAL46 on August 29, 2010, 10:07:18 AM
Nice thoughts and expression.......Gauhar ji.... Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #12 on: August 29, 2010, 11:23:16 AM »
Quote from: SURESH SANGWAN on August 28, 2010, 09:05:47 PM
khwaishji ne apni kavita mein jeena chahti thi mein jo darpan humen dikhaya hai,usi ke jawab mein mujhe aisa lagta hai female foeticide par mazboor kyon hain log.ek insaan apni soch kuch hi pal mein nahin badal sakta.zamaane lag jaate hain.ye bhaarat ke lower middle class ki baat hai upper to kuch theek hi hai.
Ek aurat shayad iss paap ke liye issliye mazboor rahi hogi ki Jiska kuch bhi apna nahin hai wo bhala kya kisi apne ko degi.


Nanhi kali mein tujhe khilana chahti to thi,
Par jaise khud hun mazboor tujhe nahin dekh sakti.
Teri pehli kilkaari pe tujhe kyun rota parivaar dikhaun.
Teri pehli muskaan pe kyun aanhen bhartaa jahaan dikhaun.
Tere saath aisa julm mein nahin dekh sakti.

Tujhe dekh log na muskurayenge,kadvi baaten jabaan pe layenge.
Beti ka baap hone pe pal pal tere papa ko dabaayenge.
khud to barson sunti aai,tere baare nahin sun sakti,
Ek baar hi mar ja beti, teri maan tera pal pal marna nahin dekh sakti.
Teri aisi haalat mein nahin dekh sakti.

Teri Taalim ko school nahin koi aaspaas,
zaalim jamaana ,door tujhe mein nahin bhej sakti.
log kahenge sikha de isko chulha chauka,chod padhai,
mein bhi kabhi padh nahi pai ,tujhe ghar par bhi nahin padha sakti.
Teri aisi haalat mein nahin dekh sakti.

log kahenge issase jayada preet na kar ye parai amanat hai,
aglon ki marzi hogi to padha lenge,koi course kara denge,
tu mera jigar hai tujhe gair ki amaanat nahin samajh sakti.
Tu kitni bholi hai tujhe gair ke haathon nahin saump sakti.
Teri aisi haalat mein nahin dekh sakti.










Sureshji..Aapki yeh Lkehni Bahutttttttttt Hi Jazbaati Aur Dil Jhinjod dene wali Hai..Aap ne ek aisa drish dikhaya hai iss kavita se jo sach mein naa jaane kitne gharo,kitne logon Ki yeh kahani hogi..aapka yeh andaaz bahut hi laga mujhe jo aapne bataya hai ke yeh Khaas taur par waha bahut hai jahan logon padhe-likhe naa ho, jahan gareebi zyaada ho,jo logg chote-chote gaon,shehar mein base ho..

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«Reply #13 on: August 29, 2010, 11:35:08 AM »
thanks a lot khwaishji.aapke comments ka humen besabree se intezar tha.pata nahi aapko ye kuch atpataa lage ki kyun kisi ki soch aisi hoti hai.
anyway you liked it .i am very hopeful that the other sIde of the coin is also very important.hausla afzahi ke liye dher sara shukriya.


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Quote from: khwaish on August 29, 2010, 11:23:16 AM
Sureshji..Aapki yeh Lkehni Bahutttttttttt Hi Jazbaati Aur Dil Jhinjod dene wali Hai..Aap ne ek aisa drish dikhaya hai iss kavita se jo sach mein naa jaane kitne gharo,kitne logon Ki yeh kahani hogiJi zaroor waha par yeh sab ..aapka yeh andaaz bahut hi laga mujhe jo aapne bataya hai ke yeh Khaas taur par waha bahut hai jahan logon padhe-likhe naa ho, jahan gareebi zyaada ho,jo logg chote-chote gaon,shehar mein base ho..

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«Reply #14 on: August 29, 2010, 11:44:22 AM »
Quote from: SURESH SANGWAN on August 29, 2010, 11:35:08 AM
thanks a lot khwaishji.aapke comments ka humen besabree se intezar tha.pata nahi aapko ye kuch atpataa lage ki kyun kisi ki soch aisi hoti hai.
anyway you liked it .i am very hopeful that the other sode of the coin is also very important.hausla afzahi ke liye dher sara shukriya.


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Aap Mere Comments Ka Intezaar kar rahe The Yeh jaankar bahutttttt Khushi hui hai.aur jo aapne dusra pehlu bataya hai,woh bilkul sach hai..yeh haqeeqat hai..Sach Se Sankoch Kaisa???
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