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Kis mod pe ye zindagi le aayee hai mujhe
Chhod chale they jin rishto ko hum pechhe
Tumhari chahat phir kheech layi hai mujhe
Darrti hu zamaana de-de na koi sazaa tujhe
Socha tha jee lenge tum bin hum O-sanam
Khaltee rahi teri judaayee kadam-der-kadam
Bhool na paaye har pal yaad karte rahe tujhe
Tumhari chahat phir kheech laaye hai mujhe
Ab chahe kinaara mile ya mile majhdhaar mujhe
Tere saath kaisa bhee safar manjoor hain mujhe
Tumhari chahat phir kheech laaye hai mujhe
Tere nayno-ne yahi raah sujhayee hai mujhe
Ab tu he naiya tu he kheewaiya saajan mere
Tere bharose chhod aayi hu main apne dere
Jeevan mai nayee roshni dikh aayee hai mujhe
Tumhari chahat aaj phir kheech laaye hai mujhe
----koyal----
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«Reply #1 on: February 12, 2010, 12:23:07 PM » |
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Bahut badiya Koyal ji,bahut dard aur khoobsurti se likha aapne.great work.excellent.hats off
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riyaz106
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«Reply #2 on: February 12, 2010, 01:42:08 PM » |
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Wah wah Koyal ji badi achhi nazm likhi hai aapne. Dil ki kaifiyat aur jazbaat ki ek kahani hai isme. Bahut sunder tareeqe se takhayyul ki tarjumaani ki hai. Nice creatioin. Ye lines khas taur par achhi lagi.
Ab tu he naiya tu he kheewaiya saajan mere
Tere bharose chhod aayi hu main apne dere
Jeevan mai nayee roshni dikh aayee hai mujhe
Tumhari chahat aaj phir kheech laaye hai mujhe
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«Reply #3 on: February 12, 2010, 01:57:23 PM » |
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Moved to appropriate section!
Thnx...
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«Reply #4 on: February 12, 2010, 01:58:57 PM » |
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waah sweetu bahut hi badhiya likha hai...tooo gud..keep it up....
Vaade pe vaade karti hai ye hawaye mujhse,
har bar chupke se achank chhu jati mujhe,
kuch smjhne se pehle hi tumhare kareeeb..
tumhari chahat kheech lati hai mujhe.....
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«Reply #5 on: February 12, 2010, 02:08:36 PM » |
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Amazing , Waaah Waah Kya baat hai... Tumari Iss Nazm se pata chalta hai ki tum kitna acha likhti hun aur kitni jaldi seek rahi ho.. Bahoot Bahoot Khoob Likha hai..
Well Done Sweetheart !
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«Reply #6 on: February 13, 2010, 05:40:24 AM » |
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Bahut khoob Riyaz ji n Geet ji.lovely lines.
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«Reply #7 on: February 13, 2010, 05:56:29 AM » |
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Bahoot Bahoot Khoob Geet !
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KOYAL46
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«Reply #8 on: February 13, 2010, 06:28:58 AM » |
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Thanks a lot Madhu-di....you always encourage me..  Bahut badiya Koyal ji,bahut dard aur khoobsurti se likha aapne.great work.excellent.hats off
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KOYAL46
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«Reply #9 on: February 13, 2010, 07:18:44 AM » |
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Aapka bahut bahut Shukriya Aakaash-ji..... |
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KOYAL46
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«Reply #10 on: February 13, 2010, 07:22:18 AM » |
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Tahe Dil se aapka Dhanaywaad Riyaz-bhai.... Aapne etne gaur aur gehrahee se padha aur samiksha ki..saraha Mujhe aanand ki anubhuti hui.... Aapne bhi bahut achha likha hai......  Wah wah Koyal ji badi achhi nazm likhi hai aapne. Dil ki kaifiyat aur jazbaat ki ek kahani hai isme. Bahut sunder tareeqe se takhayyul ki tarjumaani ki hai. Nice creatioin. Ye lines khas taur par achhi lagi.
Ab tu he naiya tu he kheewaiya saajan mere
Tere bharose chhod aayi hu main apne dere
Jeevan mai nayee roshni dikh aayee hai mujhe
Tumhari chahat aaj phir kheech laaye hai mujhe
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KOYAL46
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«Reply #11 on: February 13, 2010, 07:26:20 AM » |
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Geet-di bas aapke prohhatsaan se he likh leti hu.... Dhanaywaad...Aabhaar...Shukriya...sab keh deti hu... Aapki lines bhi bahut achhi hai....Geet-di waah sweetu bahut hi badhiya likha hai...tooo gud..keep it up....
Vaade pe vaade karti hai ye hawaye mujhse,
har bar chupke se achank chhu jati mujhe,
kuch smjhne se pehle hi tumhare kareeeb..
tumhari chahat kheech lati hai mujhe.....
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«Reply #12 on: February 13, 2010, 08:03:22 AM » |
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KOYAL46
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«Reply #14 on: February 13, 2010, 11:46:48 AM » |
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on eTI community..
