viraana hoga~~~ SAAHIL

by salil2002 on April 19, 2009, 09:58:40 AM
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in this poem i m trying to express emotion of a guy who is physically disabled........and who don't want to be burden on her lover

chale jao tum mujhe akela chhodkar
main ek bojh hoon mujhe zindgi bhar oothana hoga

mere darakht k shareer main lag gayi hai deemakein
tumhe daal toote isse pahle kaahin basera basana hoga

bhool jao tum mujhe , aur mujhe bhi tumko bhoolne do
kii jab tak rahenge saath tab talak aansu bahana hoga

yeh pyaar ka bandhan hai ise todna muskil hai
magar main kya karoon , mujhe yeh gunaah oothana hoga

mere chahat se na kar shikwa koi
na soch kii meri zindgi ka koi aur tarana hoga

tum hi toh saaz mere , tum hi toh sangeet mere
baad tere mere mehboob yahan viraana hoga
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dead heart
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«Reply #1 on: April 19, 2009, 10:02:56 AM »
Wah Wah Saahil Saheb wah...Kitne dino bad kuch dil ko choo gaya... Applause Applause

Bhale hi toota hua hai tera shareer zalim,
Phir bhi tujhe mere saath ghar banana hoga,
Itni dhoor akar mujhe tanha chorne ki baat karte ho,
Abhi tumhe mere saath hi kabar main jana hoga...
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khamosh_aawaaz
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«Reply #2 on: April 19, 2009, 10:03:55 AM »
 

       salil........................merly outstanding ....very...very ..very  nice ....yaar aap to chaa gaye ...mazaa aa gyaa padh kar...

 keep writing


   K_A
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khamosh_aawaaz
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«Reply #3 on: April 19, 2009, 10:05:37 AM »
Quote from: dead heart on April 19, 2009, 10:02:56 AM
Wah Wah Saahil Saheb wah...Kitne dino bad kuch dil ko choo gaya... Applause Applause

Bhale hi toota hua hai tera shareer zalim,
Phir bhi tujhe mere saath ghar banana hoga,
Itni dhoor akar mujhe tanha chorne ki baat karte ho,
Abhi tumhe mere saath hi kabar main jana hoga...


DH ......HA...HAA   YEH TO ZABARDASTI HAI...BUT NICE LINES
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Talat
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«Reply #4 on: April 19, 2009, 10:11:20 AM »
Quote from: salil2002 on April 19, 2009, 09:58:40 AM
in this poem i m trying to express emotion of a guy who is physically disabled........and who don't want to be burden on her lover

chale jao tum mujhe akela chhodkar
main ek bojh hoon mujhe zindgi bhar oothana hoga

mere darakht k shareer main lag gayi hai deemakein
tumhe daal toote isse pahle kaahin basera basana hoga

bhool jao tum mujhe , aur mujhe bhi tumko bhoolne do
kii jab tak rahenge saath tab talak aansu bahana hoga

yeh pyaar ka bandhan hai ise todna muskil hai
magar main kya karoon , mujhe yeh gunaah oothana hoga

mere chahat se na kar shikwa koi
na soch kii meri zindgi ka koi aur tarana hoga

tum hi toh saaz mere , tum hi toh sangeet mere
baad tere mere mehboob yahan viraana hoga


Very nice creation Salil...zabardast likha hai !
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Talat
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«Reply #5 on: April 19, 2009, 10:12:04 AM »
Quote from: dead heart on April 19, 2009, 10:02:56 AM
Wah Wah Saahil Saheb wah...Kitne dino bad kuch dil ko choo gaya... Applause Applause

Bhale hi toota hua hai tera shareer zalim,
Phir bhi tujhe mere saath ghar banana hoga,
Itni dhoor akar mujhe tanha chorne ki baat karte ho,
Abhi tumhe mere saath hi kabar main jana hoga...

Nice one from you Rahim
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diya786
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«Reply #6 on: April 19, 2009, 10:26:24 AM »
Quote from: salil2002 on April 19, 2009, 09:58:40 AM
in this poem i m trying to express emotion of a guy who is physically disabled........and who don't want to be burden on her lover

chale jao tum mujhe akela chhodkar
main ek bojh hoon mujhe zindgi bhar oothana hoga

mere darakht k shareer main lag gayi hai deemakein
tumhe daal toote isse pahle kaahin basera basana hoga

bhool jao tum mujhe , aur mujhe bhi tumko bhoolne do
kii jab tak rahenge saath tab talak aansu bahana hoga

yeh pyaar ka bandhan hai ise todna muskil hai
magar main kya karoon , mujhe yeh gunaah oothana hoga

mere chahat se na kar shikwa koi
na soch kii meri zindgi ka koi aur tarana hoga

tum hi toh saaz mere , tum hi toh sangeet mere
baad tere mere mehboob yahan viraana hoga


Bahut khoob Salil ji notworthy
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diya786
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«Reply #7 on: April 19, 2009, 10:27:19 AM »
Quote from: dead heart on April 19, 2009, 10:02:56 AM
Wah Wah Saahil Saheb wah...Kitne dino bad kuch dil ko choo gaya... Applause Applause

Bhale hi toota hua hai tera shareer zalim,
Phir bhi tujhe mere saath ghar banana hoga,
Itni dhoor akar mujhe tanha chorne ki baat karte ho,
Abhi tumhe mere saath hi kabar main jana hoga...

Too good reply Rahim Bhai
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dead heart
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«Reply #8 on: April 19, 2009, 10:35:18 AM »
Quote from: khamosh_aawaaz on April 19, 2009, 10:05:37 AM

DH ......HA...HAA   YEH TO ZABARDASTI HAI...BUT NICE LINES
Shukriya

Zabardasti toh usne ki hai bewaffai main Rahim,
Aaj toh hum bas unhi ki zuban bolne lage hai...
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dead heart
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«Reply #9 on: April 19, 2009, 10:38:25 AM »
Quote from: Celmira on April 19, 2009, 10:12:04 AM
Nice one from you Rahim
Shukriya Talat jee
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dead heart
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«Reply #10 on: April 19, 2009, 10:50:50 AM »
Quote from: diya786 on April 19, 2009, 10:27:19 AM
Too good reply Rahim Bhai

Shukriya Diya di
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salil2002
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«Reply #11 on: April 23, 2009, 07:44:45 AM »
Quote from: khamosh_aawaaz on April 19, 2009, 10:03:55 AM


       salil........................merly outstanding ....very...very ..very  nice ....yaar aap to chaa gaye ...mazaa aa gyaa padh kar...

 keep writing


   K_A
Quote from: Celmira on April 19, 2009, 10:11:20 AM
Very nice creation Salil...zabardast likha hai !

Quote from: diya786 on April 19, 2009, 10:26:24 AM
Bahut khoob Salil ji notworthy

thanks rahim bhai, diya and talat di and KA
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salil2002
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«Reply #12 on: April 23, 2009, 07:48:58 AM »
Quote from: dead heart on April 19, 2009, 10:02:56 AM
Wah Wah Saahil Saheb wah...Kitne dino bad kuch dil ko choo gaya... Applause Applause

Bhale hi toota hua hai tera shareer zalim,
Phir bhi tujhe mere saath ghar banana hoga,
Itni dhoor akar mujhe tanha chorne ki baat karte ho,
Abhi tumhe mere saath hi kabar main jana hoga...
bahut achche rahim bhai.........junoon ko ahi bayaan kiya hai
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«Reply #13 on: April 23, 2009, 08:08:39 AM »
Quote from: salil2002 on April 19, 2009, 09:58:40 AM
in this poem i m trying to express emotion of a guy who is physically disabled........and who don't want to be burden on her lover

chale jao tum mujhe akela chhodkar
main ek bojh hoon mujhe zindgi bhar oothana hoga

mere darakht k shareer main lag gayi hai deemakein
tumhe daal toote isse pahle kaahin basera basana hoga

bhool jao tum mujhe , aur mujhe bhi tumko bhoolne do
kii jab tak rahenge saath tab talak aansu bahana hoga

yeh pyaar ka bandhan hai ise todna muskil hai
magar main kya karoon , mujhe yeh gunaah oothana hoga

mere chahat se na kar shikwa koi
na soch kii meri zindgi ka koi aur tarana hoga

tum hi toh saaz mere , tum hi toh sangeet mere
baad tere mere mehboob yahan viraana hoga


Bhoot hi kHoob salial. Gud Work!
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«Reply #14 on: April 23, 2009, 08:29:12 AM »
Waah Salil Bhai, Kya Khoob Likha Hai yaar, Bohat achchi tareekhe Se Exprss Kiya Hai Us Bechaare ke dil Ka Haal,.
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