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rashmisangeeta
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teri basti chhut jaati hai
meri hasti lut jaati hai
paani mein banti parchhaai
lahre ye aaye hut jaati hai
chhote kisse yaadein bante
yaad ye dil se sat jaati hai
bikhare aansu moti ban ke
cheekh ye man ki ghut jaati hai
jakhmoN ki na daaroo koii
kuchh katgi kuchh kat jaati hai
ko na jaane meri peeDa
'rashmi' peeDa bat jaati hai
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sksaini4
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«Reply #1 on: May 22, 2013, 06:26:30 PM » |
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waah waah
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«Reply #2 on: May 22, 2013, 06:39:50 PM » |
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«Reply #3 on: May 22, 2013, 06:43:00 PM » |
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«Reply #4 on: May 22, 2013, 06:45:17 PM » |
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«Reply #5 on: May 22, 2013, 08:43:19 PM » |
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bahut khoob. likhte rahiye...
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«Reply #6 on: May 22, 2013, 11:57:18 PM » |
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«Reply #7 on: May 23, 2013, 03:43:45 AM » |
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teri basti chhut jaati hai
meri hasti lut jaati hai
paani mein banti parchhaai
lahre ye aaye hut jaati hai
chhote kisse yaadein bante
yaad ye dil se sat jaati hai
bikhare aansu moti ban ke
cheekh ye man ki ghut jaati hai
jakhmoN ki na daaroo koii
kuchh katgi kuchh kat jaati hai
ko na jaane meri peeDa
'rashmi' peeDa bat jaati hai
Rashmi ji bahut khoob likha hai aapne, khaas yeh "bikhare aansu moti ban ke cheekh ye man ki ghut jaati hai" |
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rashmisangeeta
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«Reply #8 on: May 23, 2013, 06:21:50 PM » |
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waah waah
shukriya ji bahut aapka aap aise hi hume protsahit karte rahiye plz |
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rashmisangeeta
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«Reply #9 on: May 23, 2013, 06:23:02 PM » |
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sudhir ji bahut shukarguzar hooN aapka ye andaz humein protsahit karta rahega |
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rashmisangeeta
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«Reply #10 on: May 26, 2013, 06:03:43 PM » |
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shukriya nashwani ji aise hi utsaah umang jagaate rahiye |
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«Reply #11 on: May 26, 2013, 06:05:23 PM » |
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good.. keep going.. shukriya ji thankyou very much for your inspiration |
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rashmisangeeta
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«Reply #12 on: June 01, 2013, 12:48:07 AM » |
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bahut khoob. likhte rahiye...
shukriya aqsh ji apna pyaar youn hi banaye rakhein |
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jasbirsingh
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«Reply #13 on: June 01, 2013, 12:58:29 AM » |
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Sach meh bahut kamaal ka likha hai
Badey dinoh baad yaha aaya and its worth it.
Keep it going. Congrats
Jasbir Singh
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rashmisangeeta
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«Reply #14 on: June 02, 2013, 05:14:40 PM » |
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Good one...
behad shukarguzar hoon arghya ji aise hi aap ke aagman se hum himmat jutate rahenge |
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