Yahan mere ashqo'n ke samandar ka kinaara naa raha

Kuchh shaamil-e-mahfil ka taqaza na raha
Na shama-e-bazm rahi , Na sukhan-e-ta'azeem raha

Muhabbat ke andaaz men koi jalva na raha
Na raha noor-e-chashm , na tarq-e-deedar raha

Dardmandi ke 'Naami' sahaare to buhat mile
Na raha ashkbaar, na taabish-e-izn raha


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Andaaz-e-bayan bahtreen hai, aisa laga jaise kissi purani adabi sangat men lot aya hun.

Wah Wah....

Thanks Mr. Rangrej, continue please.

Aalam-e-khumaar tha ya haijaan men mera wujood,
Lashaoori men magan tha behad ay mere mehboob.

Khoya jo tere dard men to aaya ik junood.
Har Ashk men nazar aaya tere pyar ka saboot,

Rang-e-muhabbat men na rach saka na hua kuchh wusool,
Chal pada rah-e-zeest par lekar Kaanton bhare phool.


Nice one dear Bro, keep up with the passion.

Good work both!!!

Please syed ji app Urdu words ke meaning bhi sath likh diya kare!!

Lashaoori =??

shukaria Syed ji!!

Apki likhi dono kavitaye bahoot hi achi lagi.. khasker doori wali to ek ek line kamal ki likhi hai apne!!!

jianranrej ji,

kya baat he sarkaar,aapke bhee kayal ho gaye.bahut umda,bhut ziada umda.

syeednaami ji,

aapki saajish he yeh,ki bus sub lutf le aur mein akela jiski urdu bahut kamzor he woh vanchit reh jaaye itni zabardast nazm se.aapne jo kuch likha he aaj,fursat se gungunaiyega,khud pur bahut naaz hoga aapko,jaise mujhe he aap-pur.aapko kasht to hoga pur aap zarror shabdarth likhe,hume mehroom na rakhe.

Prateek
(mujhe yo india ka sabse badhiya panna-yaani chaaro kavitayen ek se budh kar ek lagi-aap dono ko dhero mubarakbaad)

uff!! yeh duniyaa hai ki maaina-e-muhabbat puchhti hai
lafz-b-lafz kaise bayana hoga mera dard puchhti hai

tu bikher kyoun nahi deta fizaao'n me mere dard ke kisse
roz mere dar par aakar subah aagaazh-e-ghamm puchhti hai..




thanks to all for reading and appreciate to us.we are trying to shape up the feelings in our own words....mr.saiyed is really sharp and true in his words..and have a great sense of humour too....( men Kavikaarshaastra ke bajaye shabdkosh likhta to shayad kissi vidyalaya men adhyaapaka hota) ......