*Bechari Rooh*

by Roja on August 01, 2008, 03:04:46 PM
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Bhook mitati jism ki, apna jism paros
Gidh notchte hi rahe, nayen rahe khamosh..!!

Jeena marna roj ka ab ban gaya swabhav
Por-por mein teeste hare zakham ke ghav..!!

Unhe jism mein mil raha jannat sa swaad
Edhar deh chalni huyi, risne laga mavaad..!!

Paavon mein hai bediyan, baat-baat mein daant
Andhar ghayal jism hai, baher bandhar-baant..!!

Badi hasthiyan bhi yahan aati gutne tek
Karte sauda jism ka, chod erade nek..!!

Tan ke saudagar mile, man ka mila na pyar
Wohi andheri bastiyan vohi police ki maar..!!

Bhook-pyas unki miti, liya jism ko dooh
Pyasi-hi pyasi rahi yeh bechari rooh..!!
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«Reply #1 on: August 01, 2008, 03:09:31 PM »
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Hamesha ki tarah jabardast Roja!! bahoot he dil ko dehla dene wale shabdo main apne is rachna ko racha hai!! kai baar padi .. bahoot ache!! Good creation!!

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«Reply #2 on: August 02, 2008, 03:35:06 AM »
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kya baat hai roja ji....bahoot hi behtreen ghazal aapne likhi hai....aankhen taras jaati hain aisi behtreen kavita ke liye
ek ek sher...badi gahri baat kahta hai......chuninda shabdon ke istemaal ne ise aur bhi behtareen bana diya hai...beshaq aap bahoot hi achcha likhtin hain....
badhai sweekar karen.
ek baar fir se bahoot khoob..
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«Reply #3 on: August 02, 2008, 03:37:19 AM »
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nice n gr8 one.sach mein alfaz nhi hain ki main kya kahun.
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«Reply #4 on: August 02, 2008, 04:26:36 PM »
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Quote from: Roja on August 01, 2008, 03:04:46 PM
Bhook mitati jism ki, apna jism paros
Gidh notchte hi rahe, nayen rahe khamosh..!!

Jeena marna roj ka ab ban gaya swabhav
Por-por mein teeste hare zakham ke ghav..!!

Unhe jism mein mil raha jannat sa swaad
Edhar deh chalni huyi, risne laga mavaad..!!

Paavon mein hai bediyan, baat-baat mein daant
Andhar ghayal jism hai, baher bandhar-baant..!!

Badi hasthiyan bhi yahan aati gutne tek
Karte sauda jism ka, chod erade nek..!!

Tan ke saudagar mile, man ka mila na pyar
Wohi andheri bastiyan vohi police ki maar..!!

Bhook-pyas unki miti, liya jism ko dooh
Pyasi-hi pyasi rahi yeh bechari rooh..!!

Hamesha ki tarah bahtareen aur haqiqat pasandi ke saath zamane men andher aur sitam par intahai baariki se kahi gayi hai yeh kavita. -

Par wah wah se ziyada rashk karna bahtar hoga aur burai ke khilaaf awaaz. -
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«Reply #5 on: August 02, 2008, 09:59:53 PM »
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Bohot achha likha roja ji....

Bohot kuchh badalaa magar chand baato ki tarah ek ye baat bhi nahi badali, bas sodebaazi kaa tareeqaa badlaa he.
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«Reply #6 on: August 03, 2008, 10:31:56 AM »
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Bahut Bahut Khoob!!  Applause Applause Applause
Bahut hi achi kavita likhi hai roja aapne..bahut ache  Clapping Smiley
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«Reply #7 on: August 25, 2008, 02:13:26 PM »
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Quote from: Pooja on August 01, 2008, 03:09:31 PM
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Hamesha ki tarah jabardast Roja!! bahoot he dil ko dehla dene wale shabdo main apne is rachna ko racha hai!! kai baar padi .. bahoot ache!! Good creation!!

 Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley

Bahut bahut shukhriya Pooja di Aapne hamara likha pada aur tarif ki. Thank you very much.
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«Reply #8 on: August 25, 2008, 02:14:48 PM »
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Quote from: bekarar on August 02, 2008, 03:35:06 AM
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kya baat hai roja ji....bahoot hi behtreen ghazal aapne likhi hai....aankhen taras jaati hain aisi behtreen kavita ke liye
ek ek sher...badi gahri baat kahta hai......chuninda shabdon ke istemaal ne ise aur bhi behtareen bana diya hai...beshaq aap bahoot hi achcha likhtin hain....
badhai sweekar karen.
ek baar fir se bahoot khoob..

Thank you very much for reading me sanjeev ji.
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«Reply #9 on: August 25, 2008, 02:15:54 PM »
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Quote from: meet_08 on August 02, 2008, 03:37:19 AM
nice n gr8 one.sach mein alfaz nhi hain ki main kya kahun.

Shukriya Meet ji..
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«Reply #10 on: August 25, 2008, 02:18:04 PM »
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Quote from: Sayyid Randeri on August 02, 2008, 09:59:53 PM
Bohot achha likha roja ji....

Bohot kuchh badalaa magar chand baato ki tarah ek ye baat bhi nahi badali, bas sodebaazi kaa tareeqaa badlaa he.


Haan, sahi kaha aapne Sayyid ji... aur aapko bahut bahut
shukriyada karti hu ke aapko hamara yeh likha pasand aaya.
Thanks ji.
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«Reply #11 on: August 25, 2008, 02:18:55 PM »
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Quote from: Roja on August 01, 2008, 03:04:46 PM
Bhook mitati jism ki, apna jism paros
Gidh notchte hi rahe, nayen rahe khamosh..!!

Jeena marna roj ka ab ban gaya swabhav
Por-por mein teeste hare zakham ke ghav..!!

Unhe jism mein mil raha jannat sa swaad
Edhar deh chalni huyi, risne laga mavaad..!!

Paavon mein hai bediyan, baat-baat mein daant
Andhar ghayal jism hai, baher bandhar-baant..!!

Badi hasthiyan bhi yahan aati gutne tek
Karte sauda jism ka, chod erade nek..!!

Tan ke saudagar mile, man ka mila na pyar
Wohi andheri bastiyan vohi police ki maar..!!

Bhook-pyas unki miti, liya jism ko dooh
Pyasi-hi pyasi rahi yeh bechari rooh..!!

Wah Roja kamaal ke lines likha hai aapne Applause
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«Reply #12 on: August 25, 2008, 02:20:33 PM »
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Quote from: khwaish on August 03, 2008, 10:31:56 AM
Bahut Bahut Khoob!!  Applause Applause Applause
Bahut hi achi kavita likhi hai roja aapne..bahut ache  Clapping Smiley
Thank you very much khwaish ji
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«Reply #13 on: August 25, 2008, 02:21:29 PM »
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Quote from: honeyrose on August 25, 2008, 02:18:55 PM

Wah Roja kamaal ke lines likha hai aapne Applause

Thank you Honey dear
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