Besharam Duniya - Based on Real Incidence

       Besharam Duniya


 Besharam Duniya , Duniya besharam
 Maangne wala bhi, dekho kitna besharam.
 Dene wala bhi, dekho kitna besharam

 Baitha hua tha main, ek billionare ke yaha,
 Tabhi aa gayi teen auratein waha
 Dekhne mein to aisa lagta tha
 Jaise aasmaan se aayi ho

 Par mooh khola toh, Nikli woh besharam
 Besharam Duniya , Duniya besharam

 Maang maang ke usne toh
 Billionare ko sharminda kar diya
 
 Par Billionare bhi to dekho, Nikla besharam
 Besharam Duniya , Duniya besharam

 Saaf-saaf mana usne kar diya
 Haath-pair bhi jodh liya
 Ab aurato ki baari thi
 Woh billionare pe bhaari thi

 Billionare toh jaise thak gaya
 Bola usne apne saathi ko
 Ki de dey inhe  tu dus ka note
 Aur unhe woh note thama diya

 Maine socha ab na legi woh
 Aur bahut tamasha karegi woh
 Par auratein toh dekho ,bahut nikli besharam

 Dus ka note le kar chal di woh
 Gaali ka bhi dose free mein de gayi woh

 Dekh li aur sun li maine
 Besharam duniya ,duniya besharam
 Maangne wala bhi, dekho kitna besharam.
 Dene wala bhi, dekho kitna besharam


 Composed by Aamit

Madhuwesh ji,i also respect ladies but this poem is based on real incidence when i hav seen well reputed family ladies wearing gold chains and other jewellery went to every shop for money.

i am dead sure they all are from rich family and trust me they were all well and no need of money.

Even i respect womens a lot ,but the way they were reacting for money was so irritationg and they made it their business.

Thats y i wrote this poem.

Thanks for ur feedback

Iam very sorry Amit ji.

No need to say thanks madhuwesh ji , i can understand u take it in the wrong way firstly.

But nice tat u understand what i mean to say by this poem, keep in touch and u r feel free to write advices ,tat is d way i will knw abt my poems.

Thanks for understanding it

And @kaash ,thanks for moving my poem to this section.

Sophi ji , will sure write poems here ,love having all friends on yo india , my next poem will be "Khuda Bolta hai"

Happy republic day to all my yo india friends

Amit Ji
It is a matter of concern from the view point of poetry that the poet is a communicator of events, incidences, beauty, appreciations, messages and lots more whatsoever it may be in a fantastic way that a common audience can not do. However, the responsibility of the poet lies in the facts that:
1. the poem should not hurt the sentiments of the audience any way.
2. the poet should not become arrogant on the perceived incidences.
3. the communication skill should be soft, easily accessible & impressive.
4. the non appreciable  or abusive words should be avoided unless much needed.
5. the poem should softly massage the weak and strong impulses of the audience.

Regarding your poem my humble submission is that the aforesaid points have been  violated, that is why so many negative remarks have been endorsed.

Amitji I can understand the reason of your anger, that is but natural, if such things happen a sensitive poet mind boils. But remember "exceptions never make a rule" You have tried to make the reverse happen. I am agree with the comments of Riyaj Sahab and Madhu ji in this regard.

Although my friendly suggestion is that; if possible modify the post replacing the word 'BESHARAM' with some other words like BERAHAM or any other you can understand better and change the direction of the poem to get better appreciation and response.

Please don't take it otherwise.
Thanks     

Aapka intezaar rahega Amit ji.mujhe poora barosa hai aap bahut acha likhoge.God bless you Amit ji.Aap sabka bahut bahut shukriya.

Amit Ji Dont mind For Negative Comment

Aap sirf likhne pe dhyan do aur hume aapki next post ka behad intzar rahega

Rishi