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by Jaanasheen on February 22, 2009, 02:36:37 PM
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«Reply #15 on: February 23, 2009, 07:47:06 AM »
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Applause Applause

Bohat achcha likha hai BhaiJaan..

Shukriya Jaya Didi,.
Thank U,.
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«Reply #16 on: February 23, 2009, 07:48:23 AM »
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BAUT KHOOB JAANASHEEN BHAI KHUDA KARE AAP AISE LIKHTE REHAIN.ASGHR
Shukriya Ashgr Bhaiya, Thank U,.
May Allah Bless You,.
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«Reply #17 on: February 23, 2009, 07:51:01 AM »
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Bahut hi pyaari tashweer key saath bahut hi painee baateyn bayaan keen hai aapney, Jaanasheen ji!
                               - abd bundeli

Shukriya Abd Bhaiya, Thank U,.
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«Reply #18 on: February 23, 2009, 07:52:39 AM »
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bahoot khoob likha hai bhai aapne

nahi gunah kee wo ek aurat hai
nahi gunah kee wo mamtaa kee murat hai
laiye aankh me paanee, god me jimmedaree
yahee gunah uskaa, kee wo ek aurat hai....

nahi hotaa vajood kisee kaa jo naree n hotee
nahi janmte  raam n gandhee jo aurat n hotee
kon janegaa ise n ye khud ko ye jaan payee hai
bas yahee gunah hai kee wo ek aurat hai..


netra...

Waah waaha Kya Khoob Netra Bhaisa, Bohat hi Badhiya Likha Hai Aapne,.
nice One,.

And Thank U,.
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«Reply #19 on: February 23, 2009, 12:17:19 PM »
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Shukriya Abd Bhaiya, Thank U,.
Jaanasheen, you're always welcome!
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«Reply #20 on: February 23, 2009, 04:59:51 PM »
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Nice work Lil bro, magar pata nahi kyun pahli baar apki kavita adhuri si lagi... kuch rah gaya hai...

Hamesha ki tarah shandaar jawab likha hai Netra ji apne,.... ajj kal bahoot kam dikhai dete hai app... ate raha kare.. apko padna hamesha bahoot acha laga hai!!
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«Reply #21 on: February 23, 2009, 05:04:03 PM »
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Nice work Lil bro, magar pata nahi kyun pahli baar apki kavita adhuri si lagi... kuch rah gaya hai...

Hamesha ki tarah shandaar jawab likha hai Netra ji apne,.... ajj kal bahoot kam dikhai dete hai app... ate raha kare.. apko padna hamesha bahoot acha laga hai!!
Haan Sis Mujhe Bhi Adhoori Lagi Jab Post Kiya, Kyunki Aage Lafz Kuch Hattke Mile Rahe The, Isliye POst Nahi Kiya, Bas Ek Koshish Ki, Khushi Ho Aapne Saraaha,.

Thank U,.
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«Reply #22 on: February 23, 2009, 05:05:44 PM »
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Azeem Bro, Bahut alag Vichaar Rakhe Hai aapne,Aapki iss Koshish Ko Daad Deta Hoon..Bahut Ache.. Applause Applause

Nice One Netra.. Applause
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«Reply #23 on: February 23, 2009, 05:06:54 PM »
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Azeem Bro, Bahut alag Vichaar Rakhe Hai aapne,Aapki iss Koshish Ko Daad Deta Hoon..Bahut Ache.. Applause Applause

Nice One Netra.. Applause


Shukriya Khwaaish Bhai, Bas Duaa Karein,.
And Thank U Aapne Hamaari Koshish Ko Saraaha
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«Reply #24 on: February 23, 2009, 05:41:43 PM »
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Jaanasheen dear,
your writing is quite realistic. I really like it.
Keep writing happy9
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«Reply #25 on: February 23, 2009, 05:56:22 PM »
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wah wah bahut achha likha he..... Applause
Doston Kuch Hattke Likh Raha Hoon, Jo Haqeeqat Hai Kuch Galti Nazar Aaye To Maaf Karna,.




Main Bhi Ek Aurat Hoon, Har Ghar Ki Main Zarurat Hoon,.
Aai Yahaan Majboori Se, Ab Mehfill Ki Main Zeenat Hoon,.

Sabke Taane Main Sehti Hoon, Phir Bhi Chup-Chaap Rehti Hoon,.
Sab Aurton Ki Izzat Bachaati Hoon, Khud Ko Tawaayaf Kehti Hoon,.

Main Na Hoti To Kya Hota, Manzar Duniya Ka Judaa Hota,.
Karte Mard "Shikaar Masoomon Ka, Aurton Ka Haal Buraa Hota,.

Phir Bhi, Samaajh Mujhe Izaat Ki Nazar Se Nahi Dekhta,.
Tawaayaf Bhi Ek Samaajh Sewak Hai, Ye Koi Nahi Sochta,.

Main To Har Raat Suhaagan Banti Ho, Har Din Widhwah Hoti Hoon,.
Kaisi Zindagi Rab Ne Bakshi, Ye Sochkar Apni Kismat Pe Main Roti Hoon,.

Har Khwaaish Ko Maarkar, Badsurat Mard Se Bhi Milti Hoon,.
Main Wo Kali Hoon Murjhaakar Bhi, Har Taraf Khilti Hoon,.

Apni Khushi Se Main Is Dhand Mein Utri Nahi,.
Majboor Hokar Aayi,.
Jab Dard Ki Kahaani Zindagi Se Guzri Nahi,.

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«Reply #26 on: February 23, 2009, 07:28:12 PM »
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bahot, bahot, bahot khoob yaar!!! Very touching and true!
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«Reply #27 on: February 23, 2009, 10:37:28 PM »
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Kya baat hai jaansheen saaheb....
bahut acche
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«Reply #28 on: February 24, 2009, 07:51:59 AM »
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Chote padh ke bas wahi kahuga jo Muqaddar ka Sikandar me Sikander ne Zohra bai se kaha tha aur jise sunkar Zohara bai ne apna khota bandh kar diya tha, aur kaha tha ''Aaj ke baad zohara gayegi to sirf Sikander ke liye.

Isse aage ki ab dastaan mujse sun
Sun ke teri nazar dab_daba jayegi
Baat dil ki jo ab tak tere dil me thi
Mera dawa hain hotho pe aa jayegi
Tu masiha mohabbat ke maro ka hain
Hum tera nam sunkar chale aaye hain
Ab dawa de hame ya tu de ab zehar
Tere dar par yeh dil_jale aaye hain
Ek ehasaaan karrrrrrrrrrrrrr
Ehsaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaannnnnnnnnn kar
Ek ehsan kar, apne mehman par
Apne mehmaan par ek ehsan kar
DE DUA_YE TUJHE UMR BHAR KE LIYE.....

Plz do watch this song if you have not seen, beautifully sung by my favorite singer The Great Kishore Kumar.
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«Reply #29 on: February 24, 2009, 08:30:47 AM »
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Jaanasheen dear,
your writing is quite realistic. I really like it.
Keep writing happy9

Shukriya Lalit Ji,.
Thank;'s For Reading My Work,.
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