ye kaisa manzar hai !!

by abdulqadeer on February 04, 2009, 12:13:46 PM
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Ye ghazal maine pahele eak mahefil me padi thi !! aur ajj yoindia ke nazar kar raha hon aur is ghazal ke khuch ashar pesh nahi kar sakta mahefil ki nazaqath ko nazar me rakhte howe !! ghazal se mil ja-o- to nawaz dena !!  aur maine kiss manzar ki bath ki hai is ghazal me wo ap samjh jayenge mere ishare se !! aur is ghazal ko mazhabi roop na den to bahetar hoga !!

Dara – dara sa jahan lagta hai !!
Andheri rath aur gharon me dhunwa lagta hai !!
Kal isi gulistan se ruqsath li thi maine !!
Aj lauta hon to qabrastan lagta hai !!

Ye kya manzar hai !! ye kaisi lachari hai !!
Har maqtol ka chahera begunha lagta hai !!

Utha-e-thi talwar jisne dekh ke is manzar ko !!
Daheshat gard ab usse wohi naujawan lagta hai !!

Ye uske zulam ki ibteda hai ya inteha qadeer !!
Jisne khuch kiya hi nahi wo bhi pareshan lagta hai !!

Maqtol ( mara howa ( dead body ) )
Ibteda ,( Begning )
Inteha  ( Ending )

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«Reply #1 on: February 04, 2009, 12:34:09 PM »
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Ek baar phir se aapne ek naazuk masle pe qalam chalaya hai...Poori ghazal padhne main aati to aur bhi achcha lagta...par aapne shayad sahi faisla liya hoga kuch asha'ar post na kar ke....Bohot Khoob Qadeer Ji

Ek baar phir se kuch likhne ki jurrat kar daali, ma'afi ke saath :

Us shahar main ab har aangan sunsaan lagta hai
Gulshan jo tha kal tak, ab shamshaan lagta hai

Kya khabar kaun tha, thi kisne chalaayi goli,
Humko to bas maaon ka aanchal veeraan lagta hai
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«Reply #2 on: February 04, 2009, 12:46:29 PM »
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bahot khub surat qadeer bhaiyya... bahot bahot bahot pasand aaya!
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«Reply #3 on: February 04, 2009, 12:50:25 PM »
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Quote from: Celmira on February 04, 2009, 12:34:09 PM
Ek baar phir se aapne ek naazuk masle pe qalam chalaya hai...Poori ghazal padhne main aati to aur bhi achcha lagta...par aapne shayad sahi faisla liya hoga kuch asha'ar post na kar ke....Bohot Khoob Qadeer Ji

Ek baar phir se kuch likhne ki jurrat kar daali, ma'afi ke saath :

Us shahar main ab har aangan sunsaan lagta hai
Gulshan jo tha kal tak, ab shamshaan lagta hai

Kya khabar kaun tha, thi kisne chalaayi goli,
Humko to bas maaon ka aanchal veeraan lagta hai

Bahoth bahoth shukriya janab apne ghazal ko barike se pada aur pariki mahesoos ki hai ghazal ki !! aur maafi ka haqdar hon ke puri ghazal se rubaru na kara saka !! aur subhan allah bahoth umda likha hai apne janab !! dil dad qubool karen nacheez Dr.talat !!
Allah apko khush o qurram rakhe !!

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«Reply #4 on: February 04, 2009, 12:59:57 PM »
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Quote from: anjaan dharkan on February 04, 2009, 12:46:29 PM
bahot khub surat qadeer bhaiyya... bahot bahot bahot pasand aaya!

Bahoth bahoth bahoth shukriya bahen !! ye umar ap ki samajh ka maada bahtoh ziyada lagta hai jo is ghazal ko samjha tumne !! allah tumhe qair de aur khush rakhe bahen !! allahhafiz!!

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«Reply #5 on: February 04, 2009, 01:43:25 PM »
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Quote from: abdulqadeer on February 04, 2009, 12:50:25 PM
Bahoth bahoth shukriya janab apne ghazal ko barike se pada aur pariki mahesoos ki hai ghazal ki !! aur maafi ka haqdar hon ke puri ghazal se rubaru na kara saka !! aur subhan allah bahoth umda likha hai apne janab !! dil dad qubool karen nacheez Dr.talat !!
Allah apko khush o qurram rakhe !!

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«Reply #6 on: February 04, 2009, 03:38:02 PM »
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Waah Mere Bhai, Waah Kya Baat Kahi Hai, Kitne Ishaare Samajh Me Aaye Hain,.

Sach Mein You Are Genious Yunhi Likhaa Karo Mere Bhai, May Allah Bless You, Allah Aapko Har Buri Nazar Se Bachaaye, Aur Aapko Aabaad Rakhe,.

Subhan Allah,.


Aur Talat Didi, Kamaal Ki Lines Likhi Hain Aapne Bhi Yahaan, Bohat Achche Bohat Hi Achche,.

Yunhi Hum Bachchon Ko, Aap Ki Shayariyon Se Sabak Dete Rahiye,.
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«Reply #7 on: February 04, 2009, 03:57:45 PM »
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Quote from: abdulqadeer on February 04, 2009, 12:13:46 PM
Ye ghazal maine pahele eak mahefil me padi thi !! aur ajj yoindia ke nazar kar raha hon aur is ghazal ke khuch ashar pesh nahi kar sakta mahefil ki nazaqath ko nazar me rakhte howe !! ghazal se mil ja-o- to nawaz dena !!  aur maine kiss manzar ki bath ki hai is ghazal me wo ap samjh jayenge mere ishare se !! aur is ghazal ko mazhabi roop na den to bahetar hoga !!

Dara – dara sa jahan lagta hai !!
Andheri rath aur gharon me dhunwa lagta hai !!
Kal isi gulistan se ruqsath li thi maine !!
Aj lauta hon to qabrastan lagta hai !!

Ye kya manzar hai !! ye kaisi lachari hai !!
Har maqtol ka chahera begunha lagta hai !!

Utha-e-thi talwar jisne dekh ke is manzar ko !!
Daheshat gard ab usse wohi naujawan lagta hai !!

Ye uske zulam ki ibteda hai ya inteha qadeer !!
Jisne khuch kiya hi nahi wo bhi pareshan lagta hai !!

Maqtol ( mara howa ( dead body ) )
Ibteda ,( Begning )
Inteha  ( Ending )

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Bahut Khoob Qadeer Saheb..Hamesha Ki Tarah Lajaawab..

"Yeh Uske Zulm Ki Ibteda Hai Ya Inteha Qadeer
Jisne Kuch Kiya Hi Nahi Wo Bhi Pareshaan Lagta Hai"....Bahut Bahut Khoob.. Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #8 on: February 04, 2009, 04:00:34 PM »
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Bohot Shukriya Azeem......
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Aur Talat Didi, Kamaal Ki Lines Likhi Hain Aapne Bhi Yahaan, Bohat Achche Bohat Hi Achche,.

Yunhi Hum Bachchon Ko, Aap Ki Shayariyon Se Sabak Dete Rahiye,.
May Allah Bless You,.

Bohot shukriya Azeem...aur agar doosri baat mere liye bhi kahi hai to bata doon ki main itni badi nahin ki aap mere saamne bachche nazar aayen...Abhi abhi to meri shaadi hui hai LOL
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«Reply #9 on: February 04, 2009, 04:02:08 PM »
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Quote from: Celmira on February 04, 2009, 12:34:09 PM
Ek baar phir se aapne ek naazuk masle pe qalam chalaya hai...Poori ghazal padhne main aati to aur bhi achcha lagta...par aapne shayad sahi faisla liya hoga kuch asha'ar post na kar ke....Bohot Khoob Qadeer Ji

Ek baar phir se kuch likhne ki jurrat kar daali, ma'afi ke saath :

Us shahar main ab har aangan sunsaan lagta hai
Gulshan jo tha kal tak, ab shamshaan lagta hai

Kya khabar kaun tha, thi kisne chalaayi goli,
Humko to bas maaon ka aanchal veeraan lagta hai

Bahut Bahut Khoob Talat...Aapne bhi Sirf Chaar Line mein Bahut Kuch Keh Diya.. Applause Applause Applause
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QADEER BHAI KYA BAAT HAI KYA TAKHYEL HAI ALLAH KARE ZOR EH QALAM AR ZYADA AMEEN.ASGHR
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«Reply #11 on: February 05, 2009, 04:30:54 AM »
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Quote from: Celmira on February 04, 2009, 01:43:25 PM
Shukriya Qadeer Ji Bas aap yunhi yahan likhte rahiye...aur hum seekhte rahen.

Shukriya janab is izzath afzai ka !! allah apko khush rakhe Dr.talat saheba !!

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«Reply #12 on: February 05, 2009, 08:31:39 AM »
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Quote from: Jaanasheen on February 04, 2009, 03:38:02 PM
Waah Mere Bhai, Waah Kya Baat Kahi Hai, Kitne Ishaare Samajh Me Aaye Hain,.

Sach Mein You Are Genious Yunhi Likhaa Karo Mere Bhai, May Allah Bless You, Allah Aapko Har Buri Nazar Se Bachaaye, Aur Aapko Aabaad Rakhe,.

Subhan Allah,.


Aur Talat Didi, Kamaal Ki Lines Likhi Hain Aapne Bhi Yahaan, Bohat Achche Bohat Hi Achche,.

Yunhi Hum Bachchon Ko, Aap Ki Shayariyon Se Sabak Dete Rahiye,.
May Allah Bless You,.

Bahoth bahoth shukriya azeem !! izzath afza-e-ka shukar guzar hon !! aur yaar tum bahoth jazbati ho he he he !! allah tumhe khush rakhe aur tumhare jazbe ko nek rah de !! Ameen !!

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Quote from: khwaish on February 04, 2009, 03:57:45 PM
Bahut Khoob Qadeer Saheb..Hamesha Ki Tarah Lajaawab..

"Yeh Uske Zulm Ki Ibteda Hai Ya Inteha Qadeer
Jisne Kuch Kiya Hi Nahi Wo Bhi Pareshaan Lagta Hai"....Bahut Bahut Khoob.. Applause Applause Applause

bahoth bahoth shukriya janab !! apne izzath dene me koikami nahi ki ghazalke saath bahoth insafi ki hai apne !! Allah apko khush rakhe !!

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Bahoth bahoth shukriya azeem !! izzath afza-e-ka shukar guzar hon !! aur yaar tum bahoth jazbati ho he he he !! allah tumhe khush rakhe aur tumhare jazbe ko nek rah de !! Ameen !!

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Shukriya Bhaijaan, Aur Thank U Bhai,.

Aameeen,.
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