intazar-e-mohobaat

by devika singh rajpoot on October 25, 2014, 01:34:42 PM
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sham ka dubta suraj unke aane ki ummid lati h
raat ke chand ki chandni unke yaade lati h
chaha jata h raaho par  intzar-e-dastan
wo aaenge ek roz bs yahi saugat har pal lata h..



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«Reply #1 on: October 25, 2014, 01:42:25 PM »
nice
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«Reply #2 on: October 25, 2014, 01:47:23 PM »
Devika Ji Adab!

achchhi koshish rahi par kuchh errors hai jaise

yadein laati hai hona chahiye lata hai hamare hisab se sahi nhi

third line mei bhi I think it should b Chha jati..

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«Reply #3 on: October 25, 2014, 02:11:14 PM »
So nice.
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«Reply #4 on: October 26, 2014, 06:12:33 AM »
shukriya mr. kumar humari galtiyono k batane k liye..pdh kr wah wah to bnohot krte h..pr aapne humari galtiyono ko samjha.. aapka teh dil se shukriyan...
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«Reply #5 on: October 27, 2014, 07:55:03 AM »
अच्छी कोशिश है....
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