Kaas ham aik kitaab hi hote...

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"Mujhko aik kitaab ki tarah pada usne...dekha mere chahre ko der tak...vark ke maaniend...Har harff..har lafz..har alfaaz...jo meri jindgi ke udaas lamhe the...uski lamas-e-najron se...noor huye phir be-noor ho gaye...Palta tha usne...meri hasraton ko...padke... page ki tarah...rakhke apne seine pe...wo nazneena ...so gayi...kho gayi...kinhien khwaabon me...KAASH HAM AIK KITAAB HI HOTE DEEP"
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«Reply #1 on: April 04, 2014, 04:21:36 PM »
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«Reply #2 on: April 04, 2014, 04:27:52 PM »
"Mujhko aik kitaab ki tarah pada usne...dekha mere chahre ko der tak...vark ke maaniend...Har harff..har lafz..har alfaaz...jo meri jindgi ke udaas lamhe the...uski lamas-e-najron se...noor huye phir be-noor ho gaye...Palta tha usne...meri hasraton ko...padke... page ki tarah...rakhke apne seine pe...wo nazneena ...so gayi...kho gayi...kinhien khwaabon me...KAASH HAM AIK KITAAB HI HOTE DEEP"

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    बहुत अच्छी रचना पेश की है आपने. बहुत पसंद आयी. एक मेरा सुझाब मान लें, हेर शेर को अलग अलग लाइन्स में पैरवाईज़ लिखे तो बेहतर तथा प्रभावी होगा.              
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«Reply #3 on: April 04, 2014, 04:55:36 PM »
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